Sneak Peek: TToP - Feedback? · 5:50pm Jul 16th, 2017
Finally, the day had come. After waiting and scheming for what had felt like an eternity, it was time that everyone came together. Each of them played every possible scenario in their heads and some even picked up meditation. It wasn't just mental preparation however. Some of our friends decided to train their bodies as well to get them pumped up for this day.
Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash were the first to arrive at Sunset's house, followed by Applejack, Twilight, Fluttershy and finally Rarity and Silver.
"This is gonna be the most epic thing we've ever done. Screw those demons and sirens", Rainbow Dash proclaimed.
"I'm just a bit uneasy, because we don't know if there could be any drawbacks. I basically thought of the arena to test the limits of my powers. Not to mention that I'm gonna let a complete stranger into my brain", Sunset answered.
"I'm telling you, Silver's a nice guy. Maybe a bit awkward and anti-social, but fun once he's comfortable around you", Pinkie assured her, yet it didn't make Sunset feel all that better. At least he was kind enough to give them a hint at his Team with his T-Shirt, which had three gecko-like creatures on it.
"Each of you, please draw a number. 1 and 2, 3 and 4 and so on will fight against each other." Twilight handed them a hat with snippets inside of them. This was the end result:
- Sunset
- Pinkie Pie
- Silver Screen
- Twilight
- Fluttershy
- Rainbow Dash
- Applejack
- Rarity
"So, shall we begin?"
They all found themselves inside Sunset's Colusseum. They still couldn't believe what she was capable of, yet Silver was the least impressed out of all of them. They took their seats in the front row and gazed apon the two contestants staring each other down. When they realized there was no referee, Silver jumped down and took the job, seeing as he was the least likely to take sides.
"This will be a 3-on-3 match. Both contestants are allowed to switch their Pokémon out at any given moment. The battle is over, when all 3 Pokémon of one side are incapable of fighting or one of the contestants throws in the towel. Each team is allowed to have one mega-evolved Pokémon during this match. You are limited to 4 moves per Pokémon, but you are free to use them in whatever way you can imagine. Sunset Shimmer, do you understand the rules?" She answered with a sharp "Yes". "Pinkie Pie, do you understand the rules?" She just nodded. "Then ... BEGIN!"
Both of them were quick to throw their first Pokéballs.
"Lycanroc, come on out!"
"Slurpuff, I chose you."
Out of Sunsets Pokéball materialized a sand-brown wolf-like quadruped. Lycanroc's Midday-Form.
"That's quite unexpected", Fluttershy commented.
"Why? Lycanroc is fast and has a tricky moveset", Rainbow answered her. "Sunset is smart enough to draw out its potential."
"Y'all better not forget Pinkie's imagination and creativity. If Sunset oversees one thing it could mean goodnight Sally."
Sunset was the first to make a move.
"Lycanroc, Stealth Rocks!" Her first point of action was to set up. After her command, several rocks appeared and floated around her Pokémon and scattered across the field. Pinkie took a moment to observe where they landed, all the while sporting a cocky grin on he face.
"Nice move. Now, my turn. Slurpuff, Energy Ball." Pinkie's Slurpuff conjured a ball of green energy from its mouth and shot it straight at Lycanroc, which it dodged on Sunset's command, before sprinting at its opponent.
"Use Accelerock!" With that, Lycanroc sprinted forward even faster ready to hit its opponent with the jagged rocks on its neck. But Pinkie had something else in store.
"Slurpuff, quick, use Cotton Guard." Threads and clumps of cotton formed around Lycanroc's target, partly shieldig it from the impact. "Use another Energy Ball!" This time, Lycanroc was left defenseless against the attack, as it tumbled across the dirt of the arena, before swifly getting up again.
"Wow, Pinkie is doing better than I thought", Rarity commented. "Considering her opponent, of course."
"Yeah. She's usually more the casual player. I never took her for much of a battler", Twilight answered. "Could it be that we've been underestemating her?"
"Ah just hope that Sunset takes her seriously."
"She is", Rainbow said. "She started by setting up traps for Pinkie and then continued with an attack to see how Pinkie would react. This is just a test phase. Besides, she must've noticed Pinkie's expression by now. That's the face of someone who puts up a fight."
I just wanted to post this, because I wanted some feedback on my style of writing fight scenes. Can I get some advice? Or am I doing alright?
I got no issues. Keep it going!