Desh Reviews 6 · 4:26am May 18th, 2017
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Name: Patience of Love
Author: Sky Blue CMC
Rating: Teen
Genre: Romance
Chapter Count: One
Review: The next installment in the Thorax and Screwball romantic trilogy. Patience of Love has two characters: Thorax, and Screwball. And they each have a respective flavor about them. There isn’t really much going on for a plot, but the characters feel like characters. The story was a little long for the idea adding in more “useless” details to lengthen it up, and no that isn’t a bad thing. Several jokes throughout felt rather forced, and not naturally appearing. Now, the idea could have been sorted out better to make the entire thing longer, but I have a feeling it is meant to be what it is like for a reason; though I can’t figure it out.
Recommendation: 1/5 Read it if you are curious how it turned out, the sequel to the last I mean. Without much plot it is mostly about the two characters interacting, but if you read the last one, then this one is for you… only if you want.
Name: Tell Me Sweet Apple Lies
Author: Cinder Vel
Rating: Teen
Genre: Hopefully Comedic Comedy
Chapter Count: Two
Review: With some clever jokes, while not super funny, they were able to catch me off-guard the next best thing I suppose. The only other type would be sharp jokes… er, smart jokes. Anyway, with a fun “TV Scottish” accent Berry Punch is a character who got an update in my headcannon; a welcomed addition to the ever growing headcannon. It did burn through a joke by using it not very long after it was used the first time, but it couldn’t taint the first time usage… so no complaints here…
Recommendation: 3/5 The driving force is rather amusing, should have mentioned that, anyway, it is certainly worth the read to figure everything out.
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~Desh
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Your last in the series should be next week... assuming I am able to have enough time to finish all of them. And thanks?
I don't know why but that made me laugh.
Anyway if there was a slight giggle and you have accepted McBerry as one true headcanon then I say my job here is done.
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I thought it would. When it comes to comedies I like to try adding some of my own to the reviews to the stories based around it. :P
4537390 A)How have you been? B)I don't remember what story it was I requested but if(or rather when) you can, can you change it to How could I forget...?? That's if (or rather when) you can. Meanwhile, I'll check your new story out later.
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Firstly: I've been good. Got a new story up today. And I've almost reached my quota of words for the NaPoWriMo... thing.
Secondly: The story is Seedling Springing in Love, but yeah I can switch them. Gonna be mostly busy the entire month of June. Need to write 50k in the length of the month. And 50k is the minimum.