Chapter Twenty Rewritten · 10:37pm Apr 7th, 2017
There we go, I re-wrote chapter twenty, altering a few scenes, and adding some more in. I still think this isn't the best chapter, but I believe I got rid of the most glaring of the mistakes. I will be reworking some chapters in the future because of this and other things that have been brought to light, but that's the good thing about updating one chapter at a time - it gives me a chance to edit once I realize what's gone wrong.
Most of the major plot points in the future will not change. The next two chapters may be altered in some major ways, but the rest of the ending will be largely untouched by this.
Thank you for reading this, and telling me to my face that I messed up. The chapter still isn't great, but at least it isn't as bad as it was.
-GM, master of improvement.
