Free Shavacado Reviews · 12:51pm Mar 31st, 2017
Author: Sku Blue CMC
I... have a... huh... I really don't know what to say about this one...
Usually I can dissect a sentence as simple as "Fuck, you Jerry" but with this I'm really at a loss. It wasn't bad persay, just generally confusing. I'm not sure if it's the whiplash inducing pace or the author's writing style that I couldn't follow.
Plot: Starlight and Sunburst confess to each other, I think? That's my least fave ship btw, more than flashlight...
OW, YOU SONUVA WHORE!!
I just don't like the idea of "He's a guy, she's a girl, now kiss"... I think you broke my face... fucking cunt...
Anyway, that's the plot really. Nothing much else of substance happens until they confess who their true loves are. And for once in my life, I did not see it coming...
"Umm... she's somepony you probably don't know. Discord's daughter, Screwball." Sunburst explained. "She was the one who convinced me that I had more magical potential than I thought."
You read it here folks, Sunburst has the hots for Disney Fanatic's Fluttercord abo- I mean bundle of joy 
I kid you not. That was so out of left field it made me do that frown when you're like, wtf?
That's the face.
Memes: they practically write everything
And you'll never guess who Starlight loves... Yeah it's Thorax... Sorry but that hint drop was as subtle as a screaming steam train with the voice of Gilbert Gottfried. I get that there are only three Starlight ships, but that was too obvious.
Next, the story takes a turn for the worse or better, depending on where your subjectivity stands...
"Can I tell you another secret? Well... it's really more showing than telling." Without even waiting for a response, Sunburst transformed in front of Starlight. When he was done, he had a light-greenish hued skin, orange-ish antlers, and crystalline blue wings.
As if this didn't feel rushed enough, that magic happens. Then no more than a sentence later Starlight is actually screwball, they realize that they confessed to each other, the end.
Hey, Sky... You did tell me before that writing fast if your style, so I won't hold that against you. But, it was so disjointed and confusing. It could be a sweet story if it was a little longer and had more meat on the metaphorical bones. Plus an editor pass, but after reading the author's note, I have to say that, that's very sweet mayne. I'm not made of stone, it was a nice gesture to give to someone you feel for
But from a quality standpoint, this is lacking... HARD. It doesn't make sense, the paragraphs and sentences are barely spaced adding to the confusion, and the twist was just... nonsensical. Shouldn't they have knows that they were impostering? Playing as imposters? However you say that; shouldn't they have knows that they weren't what they seemed?
Story Grade: D
It didn't have much to stand on to make it good. The writing was bad, the plot was as stable as a recovering meth addict, and the characters didn't seem 'real' if that makes sense.
It's OK... a D is still a passing grade.... even if it's the lowest passing grade it still counts.
So much memes... but that was a good review. ^^