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  • 262 weeks
    New Character Icons!

    Yay, they finally implemented character icons for Human Twilight Sparkle, the Shadowbolts, Midnight Sparkle, Equestria Girls Main 5, and other Equestria Girls characters! I updated my story to show the proper characters.

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  • 284 weeks
    A Comment on the Merchant and HIE Fics

    So here's something I noticed in many human-in-Equestria fanfics. So, the main human character is at a convention, but he (because nine out of ten times, it's a "he") needs a thing for his thing. Luckily, this creepy guy has the thing, but he curses our protagonist and sends him to Equestria. Here's the thing, though: The creepy guy is always dressed like the Merchant from Resident Evil 4.

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  • 296 weeks
    An Issue with Saddle Row and Rec

    So, I was pretty disappointed with today's episode. It was kinda boring, but I had a big problem with the premise.

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    2 comments · 315 views
  • 300 weeks
    A Comment on Daring Do

    For those who don't know, my favorite fanfics are Slice of Life stories, especially those involved in the cast making new friends (villain redemption stories are some of my favorites). Eventually, there will come a point in these stories where the cast and the outsider are talking about common interests. The subject of books comes up, Daring Do is mentioned, and surprise, literally

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  • 326 weeks
    That Hearth's Warming Episode

    Okay, I figure a post about the newest episode would be as good a first blog post as any. Overall, I very much liked the episode, and I loved the interactions between the two families (especially Granny Smith and Pinkie's parents). I also loved Limestone and Marble, since they seemed to actually have a personality different from the rest of the family. There wasn't much I didn't like,

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2017

New Character Icons! · 3:41am Jan 12th, 2017

Yay, they finally implemented character icons for Human Twilight Sparkle, the Shadowbolts, Midnight Sparkle, Equestria Girls Main 5, and other Equestria Girls characters! I updated my story to show the proper characters.

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Cool can't wait to check them out I should have the next chapter posted in just a few minutes. Please look it over and let me know if there is anything that needs to be fixed or changed.

4379750 No problem. I suggest changing reason to excuse here:

“Oh, think nothing of it, Tia. I don’t mind at all. Besides, it gives me reason to be a grump on Saturdays and Sundays.”

And remove the quotation marks here:

"Grand Champion, Sixth Year Running, Swordsmanship and Archery."

There's no empty line between these two paragraphs in the chapter:

Heading over to the picture, Celestia picked it up, holding it tightly against her chest as she sobbed. Taking her sister gently by her shoulders, Luna led her to her niece's bed and sat her down on it, saying, “Don’t worry, Tia. We'll find her. You’ll see her again. I promise.”

Celestia just sobbed out, “I just want her home safe and sound. I just want my daughter back.”

And these two paragraphs need an empty line, as well:

An hour later, the two pulled up to Cheerilee’s house, finding the teacher outside, drinking some coffee. When she saw them getting out of the car, Cheerilee smiled warmly to her friends and bosses, saying, “Sunset isn’t up yet, so I made some coffee and let her have some sleep. I was just about to wake her, though. She had a pretty bad night, but I feel the worst is over now. Come in and warm up by the fireplace.”

The two principals went inside, and Cheerilee went to the guest room to wake up Sunset. Cheerilee smiled when she saw Sunset holding a picture of Musical Skies in one arm while wrapped in her blanket. Walking over to her, Cheerilee gently tapped Sunset on the shoulder saying softly, “Sunset, it's time to get up.”

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Is that an upcoming story?

4380440 No, it's a story wiccanminnesota is working on that I edit. It's called Why? A Tale of Anon-a-Miss.

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Ah, okay.

It will be a happy ending, right? :rainbowderp:

4380548 It'll likely be a bittersweet ending at best. There are some pretty dark tags on it. It's actually up now (and on its 51st chapter), if you wanna give it a read.

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Okay. It's just that I don't like Anon-a-Miss stories. Don't get me wrong, the comic was HORRIBLE. I feel that there's should be stories where the Rainbooms don't think Sunset is Anon-a-Miss and side with her.

4381616 I personally love Anon-a-Miss stories, but stories where the girls actually side with Sunset would be pretty interesting, too. I'd read that immediately.

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