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Ouch, that is a great point you brought up. I don't think that this is what the creators intended but it is spot on. I hope they will be addressing this in the next season becuase this is kinda a bad message to be sending children. We need to know what they where like before Chrysalis took over and just why they had such a massive change.
4369064 I do say that I very much doubt the creators saw this. It's actually a very old failure paraded to children through the ages. It's still wrong.
It even has 4 legs and a tail!
4369113 As a horse should! I fixed the jitter, this morning, long after I uploaded it, oops. Live and learn, right?
Were you reading off a script? It sounds like it. Work on sounding more smooth and conversational.
4369253 But there's no one to converse with! :p
hum a vary interesting point DS and it will be vary interesting as to ware the show goes from this point.
I will be watching for more of David Silver talks.
I came for the words, but I stayed for the slightly animated pony.
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With my headphones in, I could even hear the clicks as he moved onto the next page/slide/whatever.
The point about looks being tied to alignment is a perfectly valid one, because since time immemorial, humans have used visual differences to demark certain character qualities. Even the most normal of evil characters tends to have something "off" about them. Maybe their smile is a little too wide, maybe they stare for just a bit too long, maybe they don't blink, maybe they move with more aggressive motions... Likewise, "good" characters tend to have certain features that exemplify the traits we want to see from them.
So a "bad" character transitioning to a "good" character has to face the visual differences as well, whether that is a surmountable problem, or one they simply accept and deal with.
I'm hesitant to push the minority issue here, mostly because dark, sinister, and predatory are all very common features in the "Evil motif" that have existed well before the current societal stresses. The dark, and dark things, are scary because they're harder to see, and things that play off that look get similar reactions. Similarly, if something's mannerisms model our perceptions of "aggressive," or their form resembles something built specifically for assaulting others, it's going to evoke specific reactions. Evolution guaranteed it for our own safety.
But was what happened to the changelings okay? I'm not a fan either. I agree that, to me, it detracts from what made them changelings, so the result is less "changelings learned to be more compassionate and accommodating," and more "changelings replaced themselves with something more acceptable."
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Sure, there's no one to converse with, but it's not just about the review, show, or 'conversation'... how you present it is often as valuable as what you end up saying.
Think about it like this... if you have a script, read it as if you were discussing it with someone. It's not halting, it's not artificially 'excited' or 'lilting'... it's not overly dramatic or static. Those are traits of people who aren't talking so much as exaggerating a message. On the contrary, there will be natural points of tension and speed/volume shifts as important pieces come up. There will be a smoothness between words, sentences, ideas, and ultimately topics. Transitions will sound and feel more fluid.
If you're having trouble with just reading it straight, try having someone else sit nearby (silently) and tell them about the episode, the traits, qualities, issues, pros, cons, etc.... don't think about making a review, just tell the other person in the room. If no one will sit there, pop up a picture on your screen or just set aside 5 minutes before your gaming group rolls dice and record your 'rant'. It will be MUCH more natural, easier to listen to, and carry more meaning.
Oration is a skill and an art - just like writing, storytelling, or gaming. The more you do it, the more naturally you do it, the better at it and more naturally it will come.
Don't give up!
4369754 Live and learn. I don't think it's too bad for a first, eh?
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Not at all! For a first time reviewing, let alone as a youtube broadcast, it's not bad. I'm just offering things to consider that might help to improve the outcome.
In analogy, if you've built a car, it's got wheels, a chassis, and a running engine. It sputters and belches smoke from time to time, but you BUILT A FREAKIN' CAR! Be proud of that.
And my comment was like someone mentioning they heard of these weird rubber wheel socks, shocks, and a catalytic converter that you might want to look into for your next project.
I had many of the same issues years ago. Then... then I took up improvisational theater. Reading something off isn't how we speak normally... and it takes some getting used to to make it sound 'normal.' Just keep at it and you'll only get better.
Well, kind of disagree with the video... I do see your point and where you are coming from, but... I just don't see how it's an issue. None of those were factors in why they changed. Plus it was already made clear via Thorax that ponies were perfectly willing to accept changelings as is, this wasn't anyone forcing them to change, just.. a natural result of biology or something. Plus there's the theory that this is what Changelings SHOULD be like, and their 'original' look was due to Chryssi corrupting them to suit her own goals.
Added to that is the insectile quality they have always had and how they transformed, it was metamorphosis. They've always had a 'bug-pony' aspect, and when they changed ,they first got wrapped in cocoons, only to emerge larger, and far more vibrantly colored, much like many insects do when they undergo metamorphosis. So there is that aspect to them as well, plus they do still have that insectile look, but more beetle like now, beetles tend to be very, very brightly colored and iridescent.
Really my only major issue with the look is that the colors are a tad eye searing and rather all over the place, but mostly it's just Thorax and his horns. not the moose antler, those are fine, it's that he has those AND still has the unicorn horn... one or the other please....
Anyway, this just seems like looking way to hard to find things that are not there, just becuase similarities can be drawn, but it's not actually why it happened in 'verse or had anything to do with the plot point.
As to the video itself, like others have said, really good for a first go, just could work on making your delivery sound a bit more natural.
I understand the metaphor...
FiM has this problem with other races. Dragons are all macho men and immature boys. Griffons lost an idol and became the most selfish people around.
Both are put to rights by the influence of ponies... but is their influence really that wrong, given the context of the story? There's still room for their own culture, and the problem is they are each negative stereotype: the race, which is what justifies ponies coming in and showing them the right way.
There were a few other examples.
Yaks... well we didn't see their whole culture, but they seemed to be "stubborn warrior race", but ponies didn't so much show them their culture was right so much as tried to not make a bad copy of the Yaks culture, which is better as far as I'm concerned.
Buffalo, by comparison is the good one, even though they are basically native american... (probably BECAUSE they are a recognizable culture, thus the show runners were more careful) but the whole episode is about compromise between the cultures.
Which people had a much stronger reaction to... again because it was mimicking a real culutre.
But none of these detract from the stories TOO much, because the stories are written... well, to put it one way, would YOU like to live in a hegemonic culture ruled by a tyrant where positive emotions were only around for you to exploit? I wouldn't. I'd want that to be done with.
The problem comes from the one dimensional villanization of the culture, which if fixed would (at least one would hope) naturally lend some nuance and different problem solving when the conflict of "they are ruled by a tyrant" is solved.
I agree with the other poster that your speech pattern isn't entirely natural, but that with practice I'm sure you'll improve.
... if I did a video essay like this, I would at least experiment with doing it extemporaneously, using notes closer to a bulleted list and flash cards rather than a pre-written speech. That's me, though, I have experience with that before anyway.