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BleedingRaindrops


Just a critic who happens to write about pastel colored magical talking ponies

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  • 295 weeks
    Signal Boost: Bronycon Bookstore 2019!

    If you’re on this site, you’ve probably wondered about making your super amazing fan fictions into a book that people would actually buy or at least publish something in the next millenium.

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    Leaving for a bit

    If you're reading this, I'm off on a long, long field exercise, for a few months, and I won't be able to answer. Don't worry, I'm not dead. I'll be back as soon as I can.

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    The Rain Recedes

    Well, it's been nearly six months since the last update, but I'm considering shutting down "Tales of the Rainmaker". Someone pointed out a lot of flaws in the story that are too well engrained to fix. Part of me wants to continue, because I want to tell her story, but at the same time, that reviewer was right.

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    My Little Pony: The Movie. A (non)spoiler Review (spoilers after the break)

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  • 349 weeks
    Need a long term editor for "The Secret of Ponyville"

    No, this thing isn't dead. The entire plot is written out in a neat three arc format, I just need to fill in the details. The problem is I'm struggling to get a lot of the scenes to hit just right, and early on I relied heavily on input from Web of Hope as he

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Nov
1st
2016

Rainmaker Tales, told in 1st person? · 4:24pm Nov 1st, 2016

The idea came to me when a friend asked if she could provide the voice for Rainstream, and do a reading of the story. But now that I went back and read a different story for inspiration on a few scenes, I'm realizing that this story really should be in first person. All 30,000~ words of it.
Geez, did I really write that much? This was originally supposed to be a little 2k word oneshot for a friend, and it just grew into something more. Anyway, I originally thought to put it in first person, but I like the style of third better, and it was easier to provide a description of Rainstream if we weren't directly looking out through her eyes. I suppose I could have gotten clever with looking through her mane and at her hooves or something, but...

Anyway, what do you think? Is it worth going back and changing at this point, or should I just leave it as is?

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Comments ( 2 )

Well, I think I would like it from either perspective.
You could always leave your first version 'as is', if you wanted, and write the new version as a companion piece. Just a thought.

It's just fine as it is. It's from her perspective whether or not she says "I".

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