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TheSinsOfOurPast


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  • 164 weeks
    Whoo... Happy Hearts Warming Eve

    Yeah, that time of the year again. No, but seriously Happy Hearts Warming Eve and overall happy holidays, fellow bronies and pegasisters!

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  • 172 weeks
    FanFic Thoughts #3

    FanFic Thoughts #3

    Yeah i'm back into doing these, i guess. Just a little nearly-a-month break, the reason is that i'm lazy , very very lazy. Anyway let's get back on track, today i want to write about a pretty popular story, most of you who enjoy darker stories should already know it
    The Immortal Game by AestheticB

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  • 172 weeks
    Whoo... Happy Nightmare Night!

    So it's Nightmare Night, again. Little kids everywhere demanding candy and wandering in their poorly made costumes, when it's literally freezing outside.
    Oh and let's not forget about the brony fandoms Nightmare night specials, all the collabs, the animations, the vlogs it's like Hearthswarming Eve only with i don't know pumpkins or something.

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  • 180 weeks
    FanFic Thoughts #2

    FanFic Thought #2

    This time with Maledictum Insania by Nero Darkard

    Again the start of an epic trilogy. His first story already had an impressive word count of 192.000 with a total of 36 chapters including 3 endings and 3 Spoiler images with a picture and a little bit of text of what to expect for the next few chapters.

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  • 180 weeks
    FanFic Thoughts #1

    FanFic Thoughts #1

    So my first Blog entry, nothing really special, with this series of Reviews i want to share my thoughts about my favorite Fanfics.
    Starting with Silent Ponyville by SamRose
    His first and shortest entry into his Silent Ponyville series, with only about 30.000 words it is a little bit too short for my taste. Nonetheless it was a great experience.

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Oct
31st
2016

FanFic Thoughts #3 · 7:03pm Oct 31st, 2016

FanFic Thoughts #3

Yeah i'm back into doing these, i guess. Just a little nearly-a-month break, the reason is that i'm lazy , very very lazy. Anyway let's get back on track, today i want to write about a pretty popular story, most of you who enjoy darker stories should already know it
The Immortal Game by AestheticB

The story first published in 2011 is with it's immense word count of nearly 300.000 words (297.261 to be exact), the longest story i've reviewed yet. It is divided into 24 chapters with an average of roughly 11.000 words. This is as the first 2 entries a Mature story with more focus on violence and gore.
The plot starts with our more or less favorite purple unicorn getting captured and the return of the two oldest alongside Discord foes to ponykind. That is as much as i can tell here without ruining the surprise. So let's talk about the style of the story itself, this is the part where i have the most troubles with.
The story often jumps between the past and the present and most of the time you have no idea what is going on especially in the earlier and the later chapters. But this was the only major issue for me the other factors like the gore parts or the characters are on point.

Speaking of characters, this fic created in my opinion, one of the most interesting and believable character i've ever seen including a very well written backstory, i won't mention his/her name if you read the story you will find out soon enough. Aside from him/her the other characters are as well written or even better than in the official show.
My only problem with a character is maybe Titan the antagonist in the story, he seems a bit flat to say at least, his motifs are a bit too thin for me, but he is still enjoyable to read.
One of my favorite characters in the world of Immortal Game (formerly known as Ponies Make War) is Celestia, the best version of her i've ever seen. I can't describe her well enough without throwing out major spoilers to the plot. But let me tell you, she's a real gem.

So that's about it what i have to say about The Immortal Game. Below will be the link to the story and the final rating. If you liked the review, a comment is very much appreciated and if you don't want to miss when a new one comes out a follow would really ecourage me to post more frequently. Also don't fret to leave critisicm, the only way i can actually learn to improve my wrting.

Characters: 9.5/10
World building: 8.5/10
Plot: 8.5/10
Writing Style: 7/10
Length: 10/10

Final Rating: 43.5/50 Very enjoyable story.

The story The Immortal Game can be found here

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