S&M Fanfiction Commentary: Concordria by MetaKnight145

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/73105/concordria

metaknight145: You know what time it is?
metaknight145: Read another shitty fanfiction time.
metaknight145: This one's old.
metaknight145: Pre season 3 old.
Stiggerzz: oh good lord
metaknight145:

Discord was floating upside down in his mind, he had his arms crossed as he pouted over his defeat; the boredom had long got to him by now.

metaknight145: We got a shitty discord fanfiction before season three.
metaknight145: This is going to be full of cringy randumb isn't it?
metaknight145:

His mind was its own separate dimension and the part he was in right now was like M.C. Escher’s Relativity

metaknight145: Why the fuck are you naming something in the description of a story?
metaknight145: Just describe it and let us make the comparison.
metaknight145: You inept retarded fuck OP
metaknight145:

except the stairs were made of pumpkin pudding and the plants were made of stucco. The featureless pony golems tried to no avail to climb the oozing stairs.

metaknight145: Well.
metaknight145: to be fair.
metaknight145: That is the kind of thing I'd expect out of Discord's world
Stiggerzz: indeed
metaknight145: Not randumb yet.
metaknight145:

“Here I am stuck in stone…alone…again. I knew I should have been crueler to those annoying order order four horseshoe ponies, maybe even ki...” Discord stopped himself mid thought with a shake of his head.

metaknight145: >order order four horseshoe
metaknight145: >goodie goodie two shoes
metaknight145: This.
metaknight145: Is fucking stupid OP
Stiggerzz: aye
metaknight145: I mean are you fucking 12?
metaknight145:

“No, I don’t hurt ponies.” He reminded himself.
“Not that it matters anyway. You can’t change the past, well I can but that’s beside the point.”

metaknight145: >well I can but that's beside the point
Stiggerzz: you stole fluttershy and rarity's wings, and twilight and rarity's horns
Stiggerzz: you might not have hurt them physically, but the emotional trauma
metaknight145: A unicorn's horn is like a man's penis
metaknight145: You don't take a man's penis
Stiggerzz: same with a pegasus' wings
metaknight145: Exactly.
metaknight145:

"Well, I guess I should make something sentient to talk to so I'm not stuck in here talking to myself like an idiot, again.

metaknight145: >sentient
metaknight145: *Sapiant OP you inbred fucktard.
metaknight145:

Oh it seems I've already started, wonderful. Maybe I should just get a black curly mustache and a white fluffy cat to complete this cliché villain image… Actually now that I think about it that is not a bad idea, I would look simply smashing with a mustache. Well I’d look smashing in anything; I bet that I could even make black jump suits look good."

metaknight145: What is with all this inane rambling coming from Discord for?
metaknight145: OP
metaknight145: have you actually watched the show?
metaknight145: Do you not know what Discord's personality is?
Stiggerzz: Stiggerzz - Today at 9:58 AM
SO FAR AWAY WE WAIT FOR THE DAAAAY
FOR THE TIME WHEN OP DELIVERS
WE FEEL THE PAIN IN A LIFETIME LOST IN A THOUSAND POSTS
THROUGH OP'S FAGGOTRY, WE CARRY ON
metaknight145: hue
metaknight145: We got a lot more faggotry
metaknight145: This chapter is over 3K words long
metaknight145:

Just then a white fluffy cat with a curly black mustache wearing a black jump suit with various utility belts strapped to it and a jet pack came flying through a door beneath Discord into the room he was in and out one of the open doors, closely followed by Mare Do Well on a magically produced blue flying disk.

metaknight145: Welp.
metaknight145: >Just then
metaknight145: Of course you use just then.
metaknight145: Its like all of a sudden
metaknight145: Stock phrases that are boring as fuck to read and require no effort to use.
metaknight145:

"Not quite what I meant, but it is oh so deliciously chaotic."

metaknight145:

Discord then heard Mare Do Well yell from the room she and the cat flew into in a high pitched female voice that reminded him of a certain rock loving quadruped marshmallow. "You can stop right there Opalevicious! Your crime spree is over, I've got you cornered."

metaknight145: >Opalevicious
metaknight145: The wall is calling for my forehead again.
metaknight145: >rock loving quadruped marshmallow
metaknight145: Gotta have that 2013 rarity is a marshmellow meme.
Stiggerzz: hue
metaknight145: Oh Sithis.
metaknight145: I just realised. This is a 2013 fic
metaknight145: its gonna be filled with pone memes
Stiggerzz: rekt
metaknight145:

He heard a deep female almost male sounding raspy voice respond to the hero pony in an obvious mocked dramatic tone. "Cornered, trapped, and treed, yes this unsatisfactory outcome of my plans at your hooves is almost certainly a cause for me to be melancholy, doleful, and gloomy.”

metaknight145: Yes OP.
metaknight145: Everyone has access to a fucking thesaurus.
metaknight145: Its the internet.
metaknight145: You don't need to fucking show off.
metaknight145:

"Are you mocking me?"
"How canny, clever, and cunning of you my archnemesis, you deserve a treat. However you would do well to mark my next words with the utmost seriousness that they deserve. Today is the day that the cats will come to rule, rein, and reign over you insufferable and intolerable hoofed quadrupeds, and there is nothing you can do to stop me."

metaknight145: >quadrupeds
metaknight145: >again
metaknight145: After showing off your thesaurus skills.
metaknight145: At least be fuckign consistent.
metaknight145: If you are gonna be a 12 year old with his first thesaurus at least stick to it.
metaknight145:

"What is your plan, and for that matter where have you sent us? This place is as chaotic as Strife and as random as her sister Dissension, only much less...violent than they were."
"All in due time my annoying analytical antagonist."

metaknight145: >Strife
metaknight145: >Dissension
metaknight145: >sisters
metaknight145: Oh Sithis.
metaknight145: No. OP
metaknight145: Please.
metaknight145: No.
metaknight145: I know you've been kinda absolutely retarded up till now.
metaknight145: But please.
metaknight145: Tell me this isn't some stupid alternate universe where the sister's are chaotic and Discord isn't.
metaknight145: Do you have any idea how often this is fucking done?
Stiggerzz: probably
metaknight145:

At this point Discord was seriously confused as to what was going on, and he did not like to be confused he preferred to be the one doing the confusing. He snapped his fingers and teleported himself into the room they were in.

metaknight145:

The room was a basketball court complete with bleachers and upside down hoops. In the middle of the court was a large glass aquarium filled with cheese. Why cheese you ask, because only salt water fish can breathe chocolate, duh.

metaknight145: >Why cheese you ask, because only salt water fish can breathe chocolate, duh
metaknight145: This sentence.
metaknight145: Gave me cancer, aids, ebola, and crabs.
Stiggerzz: that is indeed a disturbing sentence
metaknight145: We've finally reached randumb.
metaknight145: Its all downhill form here
Stiggerzz: I think he's just trying too hard to describe Discord's world.
Stiggerzz: He's going for the lack of subtlty because Discord's world lacks subtlty, but he's trying way too hard to be not subtle and it's just ending up awkward
metaknight145: >he's going for the lack of subtly
metaknight145: I don't think he thought that much about it.
Stiggerzz: the 4th wall meta break is what killed it dedder than spam
metaknight145: I think he just thought up things that would be random.
Stiggerzz: maybe
metaknight145: I am fairly certain I know he didn't think about it much.
metaknight145:

"Who are you two and how did you get in my mind?"
"C-C-Concord? But...but you're dead."
"What did you just call me?!" Discord yelled enraged at the name she called him. "My name is Discord spirit of chaos and disharmony; I am immortal and the most handsome being in the multiverse. You would do well not to forget it." He snapped his fingers and caused her hat to turn into water and get her soaking wet.

metaknight145: yep
metaknight145: This rarity is from a world where Discord is order.
metaknight145: ugh.
metaknight145: I'm gonna save the skeleton image.
metaknight145: I'm probably gonna need it later
metaknight145:

"My hat! This is the absolute. Worst. Possible. Thing! Why did you do that Concord?" She asked while she took off her mask with her magic and wring it out. She kept her dripping wet face and head hidden in a veil of glowing blue magic. "Now I have to make another one when I get back home."

metaknight145: >worst possible thing
metaknight145: Later is now.
metaknight145:

metaknight145:

"For the last time my name is Discord not Concord! Now then I was kind enough to tell you who I am now you two tell me who you are." Discord then looked around the room and scratched his head. "Hey were did that talking cat go?"
"Oh no! If I mess up one more time they'll demote me. If they demote me no pony will take my disguise shop seriously if the only disguises I've made are worn by rejects like me." She said in a very worried tone before she started to cry, the magical veil over her face started to slowly fade away.

metaknight145: This is just annoying.
metaknight145: I got no other comment for this shit.
Stiggerzz: hue
metaknight145: Discord was very annoyed at this point
metaknight145: Me too Discord.
metaknight145: Me too.
metaknight145:

he hated seeing ponies cry and he hated not knowing something. "Stop crying right now!" He yelled to command her. She continued to cry, now intensified because Discord yelled at her.

metaknight145: >hated seeing ponies cry
metaknight145: OP
metaknight145: Have you ever actually watched the episode with Discord?
metaknight145: Did you just hear about him and write this tripe?
metaknight145:

The Draconequus groaned and pulled at his ears both out of frustration and trying to muffle the sound that was her whining. "If I help you to trap him will you stop that insistent weeping and tell me who you are?!" He screamed over her loud crying.

metaknight145: Also
metaknight145: Discord isn't a fucking idiot
metaknight145: He knows full well who she is.
metaknight145: Rarity.
metaknight145: A couple paragraphs back you told us this OP
metaknight145:

She perked up almost immediately; her once dimming blue veil returned to full power and almost blinded Discord. "Watch where you are shining that thing." Discord said as he covered his eyes with his paw to prevent the painful light from harming his eyes.
"Oh sorry." She said before she slipped back on her now damp mask, and cancelled her veil spell. "You really mean it you'll help me?"
"Yes." He said while he rubbed his eyes. "But first, who are you?"
"I'm Mare Do Well." She said in a way as if Discord should automatically know what that entails.
"Now I know everything about you, gee thanks." Discord said sarcastically. "Anyway why and how are you in my mind?"

metaknight145: Discord offered to help her too easily.
metaknight145: Why the fuck didn't he just cast a spell on here so he couldn't hear her anymore?
metaknight145: Espeically considering this is pre 3 Discord.
Stiggerzz: because
Stiggerzz: plot
metaknight145: Sithisdamnit
metaknight145:

"You know only what everypony else knows about me, secret identity you know.” She said with a huff. “And only Opalevicious can answer your question. The only reason I am here is because of her."
"So everypony knows about that shop you own?” Discord raised an eyebrow and crossed his arms.

metaknight145: rekt
metaknight145: Well
metaknight145: It would be rekt.
metaknight145: If it wasn't for that line earlier about no one wanting to buy fromt he shop clearly implying other's know about it.
metaknight145:

"Umm no, that was a rookie slip up." She said as she looked down and hoofed the disk she was on out of embarrassment.

metaknight145: Oh
metaknight145: So we're forgeting that line?
metaknight145: Okay.
metaknight145: Whatever you say OP.
metaknight145: This is fucking stupid.
Stiggerzz: your pain amuses me
metaknight145: lol
metaknight145:

Discord let out a hearty laugh. “You know you’re alright, for a pony. Stop calling me Concord and I might actually leave you alone the next time I’m out.”
“Next time you are out?”
“You’ve never heard of me till now have you?”
“No I haven’t. You don’t know who Concord is, do you?”
“It is a travesty of monolithic proportions that you have not heard of me and my perfect face, and no I haven’t heard of this Concord and why should I care with a name like Concord?”

metaknight145: Nothing stupid here. At least nothing that stands out as stupid against the rest of this shitshow of a fanfiction.
metaknight145: Just fucking dull bullshit I have absolutely no investment in
Stiggerzz: hue
metaknight145:

“Why should you care?! He is the most important being in history; he sacrificed himself to save the world from the chaos sisters. In doing so his powers were inadvertently released all around the world, and because of that ponies developed special powers. You look exactly like he did which is why I thought you where him.”

metaknight145: Exposition.
metaknight145: Well.
metaknight145: It may not be 20 words but at least its only one paragraph
metaknight145: >super powered other dimension
metaknight145: Because this has never been done OP.
metaknight145: You know
metaknight145: If it wasn't for the fact that OP has his age on his fimfiction page. (which is the cringist shit I've ever read) I'd think he really was 12
metaknight145: But no.
metaknight145: He's an adult. and was an adult when he wrote this shit.
metaknight145:

Discord scratched his head and his right eye twitched. “Chaos sisters? Special Powers?” He thought to himself ‘She must be from a different universe.’ A plan formed in his head to travel to the universe she was from and spread chaos and disharmony, he had to suppress an evil smile.

metaknight145:No shit Discord?
metaknight145: We figured that out a couple paragraphs into this story.
Stiggerzz: lel
metaknight145:

“Ugh don’t you know anything? The chaos sisters were alicorns who wanted to use their power over chaos to destroy the world because everypony regarded them as freaks and ostracized them from society.”

metaknight145: Oddly sympathetic backstory for someone to spout for literal satans who wanted to kill everyone over a thousand years ago. Its like people describing Hitler as an artist who was unfairly refused from joining an art college. Rubs me the wrong fucking way.
metaknight145:

When she mentioned how they were ostracized Discord zoned out, and completely forgot about his plan. He had a somber expression on his face as if he was remembering something from his past. The light that was coming from seemingly nowhere started to dim and the colors in the room started turning gray.

metaknight145: *sigh*
metaknight145: OP.
metaknight145: We need to have a talk.
metaknight145: Man to man.
metaknight145: The fuck are you doing?
metaknight145: No really.
metaknight145: The fuck are you doing?
metaknight145: I mean, giving Discord an edgy fucking backstory full of angst and other teenage bullshit?
metaknight145: Are you retarded?
metaknight145: Are you actually retarded?
metaknight145: Fully missing the chromosome and everything?
Stiggerzz: 10/10
metaknight145: Cause this is how this story makes me see you.
metaknight145:

“Are you ok?” She asked with her head cocked to the side.
“Yes I am fine. Why wouldn’t I be fine, and why would you care?” He snapped.
“You just seamed really sad for a moment there. I care because…well I don’t know why I wouldn’t care.”
“Well I wasn’t, I’m a god why would I be sad now let’s find that cat and get it to send you out of my mind. It’s rather uncomfortable having two other beings in my mind. Do you have any ideas why she is here in the first place?”

metaknight145: >why would an evil genius cat want to break into the mind of a spirit of chaos
metaknight145: It should be self evedent.
metaknight145: To use your power for evil ends
metaknight145:

"I don't know what she wants from your mind Con…err...Discord. Whatever it is, she will most likely leave me here when she gets it."
"I can't have that.”
“Then come on let’s get going, time is of the essence.” At that they both flew out of the room to begin searching for Opalevicious.

metaknight145:

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metaknight145:

Elsewhere in Discord’s mind.

metaknight145:

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metaknight145: >he doesn't know how to make lines on fimfiction
metaknight145: Your ineptitude is astounding OP
metaknight145:

metaknight145: Look at this shit.
metaknight145:

Opalevicious placed a small round metal object into the dark chocolate walls of the hallway that she was in. It had a large green screen on the front of it and sticking out of the top of it were three metal prongs with electricity cracking between them.
Once it was in place she tapped the screen with her paw. It lit up and an electronic female voice said, “Power transfer node four of four activated. Please state power level to use on the target now.”

metaknight145:

“Ten thousand.”

metaknight145: No.
metaknight145: No no
metaknight145: no no no
metaknight145:

“Warning using a power above nine thousand will kill mortal targets and neutralize any power transferred from the target. Do you wish to still use this power level?”

metaknight145: I need to fucking break something.
metaknight145:

metaknight145: This is unforgivable OP
Stiggerzz: read a highly rated clopfic
Stiggerzz: take your mind off it ;p
metaknight145: You deserve to die for this.
metaknight145: I'm not done with chapter one yet.
metaknight145: I cannot stop
metaknight145: Cause I'm going to post this shit.
Stiggerzz: lol
metaknight145: After this pain I am not letting him get away with it.
Stiggerzz: I am proud of the Be A Man parody I've just made in Discord
metaknight145: He deserves to be shamed for writing this abomination.
metaknight145:

“Si. Sim. Sea.”
“Power transfer nodes one through four set at power level ten thousand.”
“Activate stealth mode.”
“Power transfer nodes one through four are now in stealth mode.” The nodes that were located on the walls, the ceiling, and the floor turned invisible.
The less than reputable cat rubbed her front paws together with a malign smile on her face. “How perfect, immaculate, and consummate.” She took off using her silver twin ion engine jetpack while cackling like a mad hyena.

metaknight145: >and another fucking 4 line separation
metaknight145:

Back with Mare Do Well and Discord.

metaknight145:

Mare Do Well opened a door and leaned in it to look, she immediately regretted this decision. She was attacked by around fifty white winged snapping turtles with mouse traps for heads, as they rushed out of the room they were in. The constant snapping of their mouse trap heads drowned out her screams of pain.

metaknight145: You know. Cause chaos.
Stiggerzz: lol
metaknight145:

When the turtles finally dispersed she lay on the ground shaking. There were multiple holes in her suit where her white coat could be seen.
Discord leaned out form the room she just opened and look down at her. “Yeah you gotta watch out for those things they are everywhere in here. Nasty little buggers aren’t they?” Discord said, adjusting his new Atlanta Hawks cap.

metaknight145: RANDOM!
metaknight145: I need a flashing rainbow colored gif that just says random
metaknight145:

Mare Do Well just glared daggers at him. She then sighed, tossed her front hooves up in the air, and said, “Well I was going to make a new hat anyway so I might as well make everything new.”
Discord chuckled at her display while munching on a peperoni pizza flavored light bulb he conjured out of thin air.

metaknight145: OP
metaknight145: You're trying too hard
Stiggerzz: Prince OP, Faggot is he, OP Ababwa
metaknight145: Or you're not trying hard enough
metaknight145: I can't tell which
metaknight145:

Hey Discord can I ask you two questions?” Mare Do Well asked.
“Mmhmm.” Discord replied while he finished off the last of the light bulb.
“Why do you represent chaos and disharmony?”
“I would think it is obvious, I am made up of a bunch of animals mashed together in one.”
“Well that is why it seems wrong to me.”

metaknight145: Blah blah blah.
metaknight145:

“Elaborate for me please.” Discord was planning to destroy her misguided world view very slowly for the most enjoyment.
“Well with all those different parts working together in tandem toward a common goal, it would stand to reason that you symbolize harmony.”

metaknight145: BLAH BLAH
metaknight145:

Discord just floated there with his jaw agape not just because she had deeply offended him, she did, but because what she said actually fit. As it were Discord is the one whose world view was hurt, not Mare Do Well.
Mare Do Well just shrugged her shoulders. “I guess it is just a matter of different universes having different interpretations of things.” While they were searching earlier Discord had told her that he was from different universe than her.
“Yes it is. If you ever say I represent harmony again, well you remember what I did to your hat right?”
“Yes, and I shant be forgetting it anytime soon you uncouth drake.”

metaknight145: Fucking Sithis OP
metaknight145: I could not give a shit less how she views discord's make up
metaknight145: I get it. It sets up how the other world treats harmony.
metaknight145: I just don't fucking care.
Stiggerzz: I stopped caring a long time ago
Stiggerzz: I spent most of this time writing a parody for Make A Man Our Of You
metaknight145: lol
metaknight145:

“I’ll do that do your entire wardrobe.”
She gasped, “You wouldn’t dare?”
“Oh but I would. I’d turn it all into foul smelling sea water.”
“You haven’t felt anything like the fury of a mare that loses her clothes. I will..”
Discord interrupted her by yelling, “Hey Rarity!”

metaknight145: *sighs*
metaknight145:

“What!?” Soon after she realized her mistake. “I mean who is that? I haven’t heard that name until this particular point in time.”
He let out a loud laugh. “Nice try.”
“What gave me away?”

metaknight145: *SIGHS*
metaknight145: OP please.
metaknight145: At least give me something worth taking the piss out of.
metaknight145: This is fucking boring
metaknight145:

“Everything really, you need to work on staying in your Mare Do Well personality.” Discord snapped his fingers and transformed into a draconequus version of Simon Cowell. “Also your acting is horrid, horrendous, horrific, hideous, and other deprecating words that begin with H.” He snapped his fingers again and returned to normal.

metaknight145: Honestly. Given his thing for references I can buy him doing that.
metaknight145: You don't get a point OP but your negative score isn't made any more negative.
metaknight145:

“Ha ha ha.” She replied heavy with sarcasm.
“You should work on that fake laugh too. I give a 1 out of 10.”
She screamed and stomped her hooves in frustration. Discord just snickered.
There was suddenly a loud bang and when they turned they saw Opalevicious fly pass while making a very rude gesture with her paw.

metaknight145: r00d
metaknight145:

“Why you little!” Discord shouted before he spread his wings and gave chase to the mustached cat bandito.
“Hold on wait uuuup!” Half shouted half whined Mare Do Well as she conjured and got on another blue disc, and followed Discord on it.
Discord and Opalevicious flew at speeds and took hair pin turns though the chocolate hallways that would make even a wonderbolt lose his lunch.

metaknight145: That description of the speeds rubs me the wrong way.
metaknight145: OP are you describing this story to us or are you a pony writing about what happened. Descriptors like that are usually only for the second one.
metaknight145:

It took everything Mare Do Well had just to keep up. Discord noticed this after a few minutes into the chase and snapped his fingers causing Mare Do Well to be able to fly faster and keep up better. Mare Do Well tried to say thanks but due to the extreme wind caused by their dizzying speeds, not even she could hear what she said much less Discord.

metaknight145: You should be passed out right now from the lack of oxygen.
metaknight145:

Left. Right. Left. Right. All was a blur as they raced down the hallways. “If I didn’t know any better I’d say she was leading us somewhere.” thought Mare Do Well to herself.

metaknight145: up down b a start
metaknight145: Also
metaknight145: No shit?
metaknight145:you should always assume he's leading you somewhere since he obviously wanted you to see him with the flipping you off and all.
metaknight145:

They passed many strange rooms while they did this; one was a black empty space with naught but a single small toaster floating in it with a sticky note on it that read “I am brave.”. Another one was a room that had an actual sized replica of Equestria made of duplo blocks.

metaknight145: >duplo
metaknight145: >DUPLO
metaknight145: OP
metaknight145: You have sinned.
metaknight145: You have committed the unforgivable sin. You must burn forever and ever until the end of time in punishment for this offence.
metaknight145:

Mare Do Well came dangerously close to crashing into the wall more than a few times during this marathon of illogical mishaps, but Discord always kept her from doing worse than scraping against it for a few seconds.
After five more turns the hallway finally straightened out into a long stretch of dark chocolate. Opalevicious’s mouth turned into a nasty grin that would make even Sombra uncomfortable. She pressed a button on a very advanced watch located on her left paw. The engines in her jetpack went into overdrive and caused her to travel at just under the speed needed to break the color barrier. She left Discord and Mare Do Well in her blue ion fumes.

metaknight145: Again. Nothing to say to this chase scene beyond
metaknight145: I am bored out of my fucking mind.
Stiggerzz: how much moar is there, I wanna share muh parody, but it's the entire song so it's big
Stiggerzz: /me has stopped caring alltogether about this fic lel
metaknight145:

metaknight145: That much more to go
Stiggerzz: nearly there
metaknight145: Indeed
metaknight145: Its like fucking grinding in rune
Stiggerzz: hue
metaknight145:

As she came up to where the power transfer nodes were located, she pressed the button again and turned off the overdrive. After slowing down enough she stopped and made a one hundred and eighty degree turn in midair and just started to float there while she waited for Discord to catch up.
She wouldn’t have to wait very long for Discord had put himself into overdrive as well. On his goat hoof and dragon claw he was wearing rocket skates, and he was using them to skate along the air at break neck speeds. Mare Do Well was attached to him by way of a yellow energy rope around his and her abdomens.

metaknight145: More fucking nothing. Just to say something I'll caps lock show don't tell. SHOW DON'T TELL
metaknight145:

“Activate, actuate, and trigger transfer sequence omega five.” Opalevicious commanded when she saw that they were close enough.
“Transfer sequence omega five activated, three seconds untill transfer.” The electric female voice said emotionlessly.
“Three.”
Discord grew ever closer, oblivious as to what this unholy neko was planning.
“Two.”
Discord began to grow suspicious as to why that cat was just floating there, but he just mentally shrugged it off as something he could easily deal with so he continued on at the same speed.
Just as Discord reached Opalevicious the electronic voice sounded. “One. Power transfer sequence initiating.”

metaknight145: OP that countdown thing only works if we care.
metaknight145: I could not care less.
metaknight145: Just fuck off and let this be over already so I can show the few people who read my blogs how much you fucking suck as a writer.
metaknight145:

“Wait what?” Was all that Discord and Mare Do Well could get out before electricity emanated from the nodes and wrapped around and bound them. They both let out screams of intense anguish that would rival the volume of a hydra with a tooth ache.
As the electricity whipped around and painfully licked them the smell of burnt hair quickly filled the air and caused Opalevicious to gag.
Through the intense pain Discord felt his power be forced to the top of his head and after a few seconds it felt like his head had a railroad spike constantly being driven through it. He tried to move his paw and talon but when he did so the pain to his body increased one hundred fold. The combination of pains proved too much for even Discord and he promptly passed out. Mare Do Well passed out long before this point. The last thing he heard before his body released him from the pain was the mad cackling of the sadistic feline before him.

metaknight145: And Discord is ded
metaknight145: Also
metaknight145: WALL OF TEXT
metaknight145:

About a minute after he passed out his goat horn started to glow a bright yellow. This was accompanied with the electricity shutting off and the female voice. “Power transfer completed. Extra power was transferred as well.”
She smiled at that. “Well now I don’t have to worry about her annoying shield of hers anymore.”

metaknight145: >Rarity
metaknight145: >super powers
metaknight145: >shield
Stiggerzz: we found a fortune teller, Meta
metaknight145: A fortune teller in the form of shitty fanfictions.
metaknight145: What an unfortunate medium.
metaknight145: Mostly for us.
metaknight145:

She reached into the largest of the utility pockets located on her waist and pulled out a small electric saw. She used this to cut off Discord’s glowing horn with the utmost care not to damage it above the point where it was glowing. Upon getting it off she pressed a button on the left side of her jetpack and caused a compartment to open that is large enough to fit the horn in and she put the horn in it and closed it.
“Now that that is done, finished, and through I must contact Beast Master.”
She pressed a green button on her watch and a very soft female voice emanated from it with a worried tone. “Have you gotten the horn?”

metaknight145: Gee
metaknight145: I wonder who that is.
Stiggerzz: clearly it's Daring Do
metaknight145: My thoughts exactly.
metaknight145:

“Yes Beast Master Ma’am.”
The voice let out a long drawn out sigh. “Thank you. D will be sending the portal to you now; don’t forget that she wants them in our dimension as well.”
“Both of them? You mean I can’t leave, abandon, or desert Mare Do Well?!”
“No you cannot.”

metaknight145: >D
metaknight145: >might actually be right about the daring do thing
Stiggerzz: hue
metaknight145: OP why
metaknight145:

She wasn't pleased at this at all but she knew better than to question the Beast Master when it came to D. “Yes of course ma’am.”
She pressed the green button again and ended the transmission, as she did that a purple and white swirling vortex appeared next to her. She pressed the third and last button on the watch causing it to emit a black aura around Discord and Mare Do Well. Opal lifted and tossed them unceremoniously through the portal using the black aura from the watch, before she went through herself.

metaknight145: And done
metaknight145: Fucking finally.
metaknight145: This was nothing but pure pain.
metaknight145:

Author's Note:
Please point out anything I did wrong, grammar errors, walls of text, incorrect facts, if this is an unoriginal concept(I didn't check for similar ones before writing this, sorry), if Discord is OOC, if I or this should be killed killed with fire, you know the like. If you liked it see if you can name all the references that are in this chapter.

metaknight145: I'm going to go with killed with fire.
metaknight145: Yep, definitely killed with fire. And no, fuck you and your cringey name the references bullshit. Die in a fire.

metaknight145: Oh. you know how you said my pain amused you? Well you should find this twist hysterical. Concordria by MetaKnight145
metaknight145: Yep.
metaknight145: This was my first story. (that I kept posted) on the site.
Stiggerzz: lel
Stiggerzz: >Meta memed in a story
metaknight145: Multiple times.
Stiggerzz: horrifying
metaknight145: lol
metaknight145: Indeed. (Kill me.)