A new story? Maybe. Need a wee help first. ATTENTION: Wee as in little, not urine. · 6:12pm Aug 20th, 2016
Twilight has a brand new discovery. She has theorized that it is possible to create pocket dimensions and a way to enter them. Facing the ridicule of the rest of the theoretical magic community she has set forth to prove them wrong. She will construct a portal and enter it.
She does. Inside she finds a field of empty white. There is nothing there but her and her portal. She decides that she has to study this empty world and regain her credibility when she reports her results.
Soon enough she finds out this world is not that empty.
So, I've made a new story. I just finished it actually. I admit, I haven't completely edited it yet, but I think it's readable enough. "But Crimmar," I hear you ask. "Why should we give a flying feather?" Well, my rude friend, the reason I come before you today, non-existent hat in hand is this. I'm not very confident in whether I've achieved my goal with this story. You see, it's a horror story.
Get out of here sarcastic ghost. God, you're an asshole.
Disregard the flankhat making fun of me above. I don't think it's that bad, but I don't have the best opinion about my... opinion. Ok, is that kind of a paradox? It feels like one. Focus Crimmar. So, my opinion is kind of crap. For this reason I, still holding the non-existent hat, having crumpled it so hard by now that I will have to take it to a non-existent hat shop, have a question for you.
Would any one of you want to give it a pre-read? Give a look, a hoof, a hoot? All suggestions, comments, flames, insults, death threats and gentle persuasions to be better are welcome. Any ideas on what rating it should have if I go ahead with it or a title and cover would be appreciated too.
The Gdoc is here: Hello, I'm the horror story! Boooo...
Seems quiet spooky indeed.
Really good, but I hope she makes it out okay
I like it! I think maybe I've been reading too many 200,000+ word stories though because this feels like a prologue to me. You should post it!
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I hope she never makes it out, because if she does then she has doomed wherever she goes. She won't even try. Luna is a good pony.