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MrAlterad


A brony living in the states that really likes Fallout.

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  • 228 weeks
    Trioverse Vs Canon Changelings

    Spike is friends with a changeling named Thorax.
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    Spoilers...

    So with that episode, a lot of new information was given on changelings:

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  • 228 weeks
    Down Time

    Sorry for the silence and lack of updates for last few weeks. A lot of things were going on, take your pick:

    -Work was extra busy.
    -My love for Pokemon was reignited.
    -Latest WoW Expansion went live.
    -Been in a minor depression. (still am)
    -Lacking motivation to work on Teal Changeling. (lacking motivation on all fronts actually)

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  • 234 weeks
    Teal Changeling: One mooore thing!

    Regarding tags:

    Adventure: Chrys and company are seeing the world and growing for it, while facing adversity. While there are slice of life moments heavily sprinkled in, at its core, this is an adventure story.

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    3 comments · 373 views
  • 235 weeks
    Teal Changeling Polish: The Second Half

    There was surprising little I needed to do to the second half of the story, compared to the first. There were a lot of chapters that were fun to read all over again. I’m really proud of 14, 19, and 21. Hopefully 27 will be on the same tier of quality.

    Nothing of note was added or changed in chapters 14 through 20.

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  • 237 weeks
    Teal Changeling Polish: The First Half - New Scenes.

    I've worked over half of the story so far, which means chapters 0-13 have been looked over :twilightblush:. I've added a few things. Tweaked this and that. Fixed big derps. All changes and additions are live, though there are bound to be grammatical errors in 7-13.

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Jul
21st
2016

Teal Changeling Polish: The Second Half · 8:30pm Jul 21st, 2016

There was surprising little I needed to do to the second half of the story, compared to the first. There were a lot of chapters that were fun to read all over again. I’m really proud of 14, 19, and 21. Hopefully 27 will be on the same tier of quality.

Nothing of note was added or changed in chapters 14 through 20.

A short scene was added to the beginning to chapter 21: Smiles and Snowfall. It’s basically a Sledge being Sledge scene that alludes to his encounter with the dragon in Equestria. Since it concerns Sledge, I don’t really feel like posting it here, since it doesn't tell us anything we didn’t already know.




Breezing right along to 25. The scene where Luna talks about the hardships of being a queen to Chrys. I added more to it. She mentioned that it’s easier to gain contempt and mistrust, but she also added that it’s also just as easy to gain love and respect.

Considering the greater story I have in mind for the Trioverse, Luna seeing queen-dom being mostly negative made no sense. The original way her line was given would have fit better if Lores had said it, but coming from Luna’s mouth was a total mistaek on my part.

And yes, the meeting between Luna and Chrys was a little too short considering it was their first meeting. An excuse was added into the chapter, which was eluded to in 24. Chrys’s gang reached Canter Town a little ahead of schedule.




In 26, there’s a scene where Chrys almost loses her temper against Ghost, and Aegis and Momo calm her down. Considering what happened the last time she was goaded (chapter 6), I tweaked the scene. In the edited version, Momo mentions the goading, and Chrys pulls herself back before getting to hot.

I tried to make the transition from the guest room to Ghost’s room less clunky. Still not satisfied with it. :applejackunsure:

Overall, chapter 26 had a lot of unneeded lines. Like, there were a number of redundant things in 26 that I had to clean up.




I touched up on all of Pestle’s dialogue. The character’s personality is more obvious. (shy)

And that’s just about everything that went into the second half of the polish. After finishing chapter 24, I felt it was a good time to look over the whole story again and make sure I remembered everything correctly before writing the big meeting between Luna and Chrys.

However, I was in a good writing mood, and threw caution into the wind and wrote 25 first, which I kind of regret. Oh well.

On a related note, I was going to unveil new cover art for the story, but my commission fell behind schedule. Guess it’ll be done when I release chapter 27, hopefully.

As an aside, are any of you willing to fill me in on something? Has the story lost steam? Is your interest waning? If it is, it might be a good idea on my part to get to the end sooner rather than later…

Anywho, polish is finished, so it’s back to work writing. Gonna take my time with 27, so it’ll probably be a week or two before its up. Thank you for your patience!

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Comments ( 3 )

I am a fan of your Trio-verse as a whole, but this has been my favorite story set in it. I am still very interested in it and trust your judgment on how long to make it. Though, I would like to see you continue some of the other stories as well, especially Shadow's Flare.

Jeez, you polished her so much I can see myself in her chitin.

Story seems to flow fine for me, it's still keeping my interest and I still love each new chapter.

Though I kinda wanna see more of Shadow's Flare, too.

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