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Loves to read and write, I decided to try writing fanfiction after a long hiatus thanks to ponies

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Jul
7th
2016

Stories left untold vol 2: LEgend of the dragon · 12:38am Jul 7th, 2016

This story is...interesting. I say this because at one point something happens in this story that I did not see coming. It was a pleasent surprise and a teriffic thing that happened to me. IT was something that told me that I could make some pretty decent OCs if I try hard enough. In this story based on...

OH shoot, this one is bad. I mean, really bad. As in I wish the Critic did reviews of whole series and I wish I had the money to pay some reviewer to riff it into oblivion bad. The characters are badly written, the plots are stupid, the morals are badly written, and it feels like a cheap knock off of better cartoons. I haed this show, I utterly hated it and...

I have seen all of the first season. Though not by choice. IT was the only interesting cartoon on at 7:00 in the morning at my town and I had no choice but to watch it with my little brother. That, and if I am not attracted to riffing bad things like a moth to a flame.

So, what is the basic plot? Two twins name Ling and Ang are two martial artists who get the power of mystical bands to fight evil. For a little while one twin was evil while the other was good.

However, let it never say that I can't see potiental in bad things. While I despise the show, I hated the idea that the show had to potiental to be good but it kept squandering it. The charaters could be good, but the writers seemed to fail to make them any good. The plot was based around martial arts , wich is something that I love. So see all of these elements put together in such a horrible way kind of ticked me off. So, I rewrote it!

What comes from this is a very plesent surprise, in this story called...

Legend of the Dragon: Rebirth.


Our story begins in the realm of the fates: The MAtron, the MAdie, and the Hag. Here they watch over the fates of mankind and hold dominion over life and death. The most important thing they watch over, is the tapesties of fate. IT is here that the three notice something has gone horrifyingly wrong with one of the tapistries. One world is slowly being destroyed because of a misake in the destiny of one person. This has caused rammifcations that led to one man decimating the entire planet. So, they go to the point of time that caused the destruction, the appointment of the Goldne Dragon.

This, to me, was the first and worst flaw of the entire show. See, the story had Ang become the golden dragon, while the master rejected the sister. Why? Well, think of it as a poorly done version of what happened to Sunset Shimmer. Only instead of being rejected for princesshood because she was vain and had no desire to help others, Ling was...arrogant. Yeah, that was the only reason for why he rejected her. She actually was conifdent and proud in her abilities. Imagine if Rainbow Dash was proud of becoming a wonderbolt and then they said no. Only magify it by a 1000, because it gets worse.

The master basically lied. Yeah, he did. See, he says in the beginning that there is only room for one golden dragon and this leads the sister to becoming evil and take up the mantel of the shadow dragon. But wait, we find out at the end of season 1 that there always has been and meant to be two golden dragons, he just had us sit through 26 episodes of total BS because he had to teach her a lesson. OH, and he kept harping on stopping Ling throughout. Bascially all of this could been solved if he had jsut said somethig in the beginning. The mentor is the worst since Grandpa in Jake Long! OH, I will be getting to this one shortly.

So, here is where the story changes.

Ling still brags about being the strongest of the two siblings and is ready to take her place as the Golden Dragon. But, she is rejected, and the main bad guy of the series, the Zodiac MAster shows up to fight Ang. Ang fights and he loses, hard. The Zodiac master breaks Ang's legs and leaves him a cripple. Ling goes to save her twin brother and takes the golden armband for herself. Upon becoming the Golde dragon, she hands the Zodiac master his butt and drives him off. The master, upon seeing this fight...

Orders her to give up the armband and return it to the brother. Ling is, of course, incensed by this idea nd refuses to give up the title. The master again orders her to give it up and challenges Ling to a fight. The two fight and Ling wins, ticking the mentor off. The mentor then works with the zodiac master in order to defeat Ling and regain the golden armband. Their plan, use the twin brother as a weapon. However, this plan also fails and this takes us to our second arc.

(This is actually my second story to use arcs...interesting.)

The zodiac master becomes distress and hunts for a new way to win. This is when he meets, Drago from JAckie chan adentures. Drago, who had taken all 12 medallion powers, has heard of the armbands and has decided to take them for himself. However, he knows that there is an even greater power lying within the wings. A powerful secret.

See, back when the first martial arts were invented, they based it off of different animals. But, there is more, there were 24 martial arts masters that could be considered the progendors of all fighting styles as we know them. Each master had trained in each style so well the people callen them, the master of Heaven and Earth. For you see, the 24 were split into two groups, one team was based on the fighting styles of the animals (The warriors of earth) the other 12were based on the stars, what we know as the constellations (The warriors of heaven representing the twelv western zodiac) these 24 masters of the martial arts had each put the secrets of their fighting styles into an ancient vault that can only be unlocked by the twelve armbands and the chi of the warriors of the stars. Drago knows that the warriors of the earth are the eastern guardians, weilders of the arms bands and representives of the eastern zodiac. They are guardians, but what of the warriors of the stars. They were not in China, but in the states, in the west.

Here is the surprise I was telling you about.

See, these western guys were supposed to be one-off villians. I was going to make them one shots who came in, get their butts handed to them and then fadfe away into the night. The problem is, I became more and more interested in writing for these guys than the people I was writing a fanfic about. Yeah,complete opposite of pony. Where there, I am always interested in the six, here, I was more interested in making these guys shine. The thing is I began to like them too much. I enjoyed coming up with their personalities and backstories. I enjoyed making them into a team and I love coming up with their powers.

So, what are the western Zodaic and their powers? Well, lets startt off with how they come to be and who they are. A western Zodiac is identified by an invisable constellation on the back of their left hand. When they need to activate their powers, they place their right hand over the constellation and shout "Zodiac Arise!" and their powers come into being. Each zodaic has a power unique to their stars and each fight in a style that is their own. One becomes a Zodiac by having the previous holder pick a worthy successor (Usually a family member but it can be anyone that is worthy) at the age of 12 and begin to train their successor in the ways of their Zodiac and their style. Each one is then given the power by their mentor.

I kind of also gave them costumes, long tenchcoats with sequins that glistened in the shape of their constlattions that glowed when their powers activated.

So, who are they and their powers? Well..

the first three we meet are: Sage, Gem, and Pike. so here we go

Gem (Gemini, I wasn't that clevr with the names!): Power: He uses the spirit of his dead twin that lives within him to create an excat double that can fight with him.

Sage (Sageitarus): Power: Shadows, much lke Shikimaru he can take control of peopls shadows and use them to his advandage. He can alsoe manipluate shadows into weapons

Pike (Pises) Power: He can absorb weapons: Guns, knivs, and the like, and then turn them into a part of his body. Then he can turn them against you.


Sgae is discovered by Drago outside of a bar and is turned evil by the dragon. Then Sage forces his friends, who suspect something wrong, to go on a quest to find the other 9. Gem takes the middle of amercia, Sage west coast, and Pike east coast. They then each find the other nine

(In no order)

Tau:(Tauros) Power: superstrength

Vitgina: (Virgo) Power: Invinability

Li (Leo) Power: Fire breathing

Scorp: (Scorpio) power: Invinsability

Candece: she was the oldest and the one who was planning on giving up her powers (Cancer) PPower: Ki beams

Aqua: (Aquarius) power: Waterbender

Ari (Aries) Power: Rock hard skin.

Iibby (Libra) Power: Transmutation

Cape (Capricorn) power: Tansformation


When the 12 come together, they quickly figure out the villians plan, because they aren't idoits and try to resolvie things peacfully. However, the eastern zosiac sees them as a threat and the fight is on. the end score is six wins on each side, with Ling winning her fight and then with the help of the westen zodiac takes down the Zdiac master.

Our last arc takes us into a mystery. It seems that someone is killing the Eastern zodiac and Ling's brother is missing. Ling goes on a quest to find out who. Her travels take her deep into China where she meets the Zodiac master. However, Ang appears, weildfing the shadow Dragonband. He becomes the shadow dragon and fights the Zodaic master. There is an explosion as their power clash, and Ling belie ves her brother to be dead as she fights Drago, who now possesses 11 shadow bands and 11 golden bands, pushing him to near godhood. The fight is on, and after a time, Ling managaes to gain control of the golden armbands to fight and defeat Drago. Then her brother reveals that he is alive. The end.

I was planning on a sequel movie that featured the Western Zodiac traveling to hell (because you can in Greek myths) but never could get to writing it.

This was a weird experience for me. I never before had a fic where I started writing for characters other than the ones I wanted to write for and became more fascinated with their lives instead of the main characters.

So next? might have a story featuring Sonic, or Jake Long, we'll see.

And by the way, I wrote all of the above years before I ever watched Saint Seyia or Jojo's Bizarre Adventure. Weird huh?

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