Cleaning up Ain't Done With These F****** · 10:30pm Apr 22nd, 2016
When I wrote that, I was an angsty, angsty teen whom's mother had recently left, so I took my frustration out on that. As a result, I rarely even re-read what I wrote. I've done the first chapter, added more flair to the sentences, given Alice an actual, proper personality, stopped with the semi-mary sue bullshit I had going on (Trust me, I'm going to fucking curbstomp her power. I'm talking Hexes in DS2 level of nerfing.)
I'll also attempt to steer away from LoHAV, and make the story Its own.
Aaaaand I'm going to change the name of the story, somehow. Maybe call It Mr Poopybutthole.
Expect the edge to reduce, It'll probably not go away, and the story'll still operate on the Rule of Cool, but, compared to then? I actually know how to write now. Shall be fun.
Well, i'll give the new version a shot, but if your really going to nerf her power that much then i'm not sure i'll keep reading. this was one of the stories i read when i wanted to see major ass kicking and what not. Personally, i don't see anything wrong with the current version, but it's not my story, so i guess what happens happens.
3889758 Bah, she could harm gods. Too powerful for my tastes.
They'll take a hit, but she'll still kick major ass, so don't y'all worry.
3889783 like i said; i'd give the new one a try. it's just me being me, i guess.