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Chaos Phantasm


A former Australian FIMfiction author. I like to write stories, be they good or bad. I always have an idea in my head just waiting to be used. I love to write and will continue to do so.

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  • 37 weeks
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    Oh boy... this isn't an easy one.

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Mar
28th
2016

Nyx and the Sunset chapter 01 Rewrite Change log and future news! · 3:40am Mar 28th, 2016

As of today, I have released the chapter 01 rewrite of Nyx and the Sunset. It is a premature release as the re-edits haven't been done. This is my fault and I do apologize to Word Worthy for this. While it's no excuse, my impatience grew to a head, I am normally patient with my editor.

So here are the changes:

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Shorter starting paragraph.
Less detail in Sunsets morning routine.
Addition of a competition between Sunset and Rainbow.
Improved Dialogue entirely.
Rainbow on Pinkie's Cell phone.
Addition of EG Twilight (mentioned only).
Changed the song lyrics mid chapter.
Switched the aftermath from the cafeteria to the music rooms (to be retconned).
Addition of the School Festival story arc.
Updated Adagios personality to be a mix of Azula (Avatar Last Airbender) and Cinder Fall (RWBY).
Added Aria's depression to be more prominent and noticeable in this chapter, instead of chapter six.
Fixed all the detail and some of the dialogue in the mall sequence.
Gave Pinkie Pie her car which was omitted in the original version, but present at the start of chapter two.
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Although, not everything is fixed. Pacing is still off, yes, the pacing is still a problem but I can only write what my mind allows.

That's just to name a few, that's not all, I don't think. Why are you checking the change log anyway? Go and re-read the chapter itself ya sillies :derpytongue2:.



that is if you want to. To sum it up, everything flows better than ever. I am absolutely in love with the finished result. I leave the pointing out of punctuation mistakes to the readers. Also, on the note of rewrites, I may extend Chapter two to be longer than originally, just to have some build up to Nyx asking to sleep in Sunsets bed, than again, I think I'll leave that up to whomever thinks I should change that part. Anyway, Chapter 02: The Homeless Child's rewrite will be coming either sooner or later. :pinkiehappy:

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Comments ( 4 )

My advice. Post a blog showing what the original chapter one was like. So readers can compare and contract what made the old one bad/good and what made the new one bad/good because not everything is perfect.

3832196 I don't think the site would allow that. :applejackunsure:

3832217 A shame really. Anyways good luck with the rewrote.

I hope that there is some divergence from the Past Sins storyline like maybe have Flash Sentry come in or show some of the eqg characters that are underrated like the techies or economic kids?

Maybe for the chapter after Nyx is taken in by Sunset. Have the next chapter feature Sunset reading some text messages from her friends concern/asking why hasn't she been in school for a while for better authentic story.

3832235 Thank you. I will be sure to include your suggestions. Also, I went ahead and posted a separate blog for the comparisons, per your advice.

Also Flash is already in the story. He plays a part in it too, bigger than his background roles (still planning that one, he's literally just as unimportant to the story as ever as of now.)

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