natural born ponies

this is my review of natural born ponies it had some grammar problems like "baking a launch" and "be Becoming a dad" their should only be becoming a dad no be there it was interesting though the aspect of the main character died and being sent to a hellish limbo place were their was a portal to be brought back alive that was a interesting aspect the opera chapter was kinda meh but it was interesting though. but i thought Alicorns can't die but the part i didn't like was racism to Pegasi oh and a misspell of pegasi to "Pegusai".

so this was a review of natural born ponies this is my first review of it so I'm kinda new at this goodbye.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/76104/natural-born-ponies