Feb
29th
2016
Dramatic Reading: "Rerouted" by FanOfMostEverything · 5:01pm Feb 29th, 2016
Hey all! I've decided to try my hand at dramatic readings. If you haven't yet checked out Rerouted by FanOfMostEverything, you totally should; it's short, tense, and quite clever.
Given that I'm new to this whole dramatic reading thing, I'd also love to hear any feedback! As I've said before, it's possible to hurt my feelings, but it's highly unlikely that you're going to do it with feedback about an audio recording. 
Cool! You're good at this. I suggest reading a little slower, but otherwise it sounds pretty good. Love the background sounds/music. You should do more of these.
I wish I had headphones so I could listen to this at work...
Solid first effort. It was fairly easy to understand you throughout the story. Your use of dialects to show the different characters worked for the most part (though I must admit when Derpy spoke I immediately thought of Harley Quinn). If I had any criticisms it would be as follows:
Understand the pacing of the story. When reading anything whether it's acting, a speech, a story, telling a joke, know where your pauses are. Remember it's not a race. Let the moments sink in and go with the flow. If you have to, "mark up," the story as it were do so. If you don't know what that means it means essentially print it out and mark it up to where you know how you are going to say each line and what emphasis you're going to place on them and why.
There are times it sounds almost as if you read this in one take. I could be wrong but, there were moments it some like some of the accents bled through from the dialog to the narration or vice versa. It also felt like you stumbled a little on a couple of lines. Multiple takes and edits can fix those.
All in all though I'd say you didn't do that bad of a job and that it's worth coming back to when you feel the urge to do it.
I enjoyed it.
I love the voices.
The enunciation is well done.
The music is well chosen and evocative.
But... You... need... to... slowwwwwwwwwwwwwwww... down.
You read quickly, too quickly in places. This is perfect in some places, where the action speeds up a bit, but there are a few places that call for a much slower read. I don't even know any advice on this, timing is a hard thing to figure out.
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Thanks guys, this is great feedback. I knew that pacing would be a challenge going into this, and it seems like I need to do even more than I already tried to do to address that. Marking up a printout of the script might be a good idea.
I learned a lot doing this... especially about using the various tools needed to go from a raw recording to a YouTube video. I did some really really amateur voice recording like 20 years ago but of course everything is different now.
I'm going to do more of these eventually, but I think I'll stick with even shorter stories until I get into a groove. I might also record all the different characters on individual tracks separately from the narration, as there was indeed some bleeding between voices--which also made it harder to keep the pacing even.
Oh, and the Harley influence was somewhat intentional. Maybe it's just me, but I swear, the "Muffins" voice from Slice Of Life sounded like a toned-down Harley Quinn.