Chapter one Updated.

So, with much thanks to Kestrel, we worked on editing Chapter one a bit.

For all of you who have read the story, nothing has changed and the story is still the same.

What has changed were all the small grammatical errors, and the character voice.

Each letter now can be read as if the subject pony wrote it. Here is an example.

From Pinkie Pie

I can’t take this anymore! Twilight HAS to smile, and stop looking so doomy-gloomy. I had Maud come over to visit today, and even she saw the sadness in Twilight. Of course, Maud is really, really sensitive to these types of things, so when she says Twilight is sad, then Twilight is sadder then the saddest thing in the universe.

Now, I can't express enough gratitude I feel for Kestrel's help. He went much farther than I expected of him and didn't only point out the grammar errors, but also made heavy suggestions to how each thing should be said.

Mr. Flare