Reviews: A Gift from the Princess

A Gift from the Princess

So where to start with this story is the question considering the first time I read this Fan Fiction was probably just under a year ago if not a year ago. That said I missed some of the words that were used now that I think about it.

The first chapter "The First Step To Solving A Problem Is...", doesn't have any sex or what I would consider not safe for work material in it just a short masturbation that gets interrupted but how that plays out I'll let you read. But the way that the author uses the words and the various meaning adds a lot to what is said and gives some incite to how the main character goes about their personal life.

Very well thought out.

7/10

The second chapter: "Admitting That You Have One", If you couldn't figure out what was possibly in the box from the first chapter then you really are sheltered, but that's beside the point. This chapter is NSFW and for the vast majority of it. There are a few reference errors (as of this post at any rate) where the author says Celestia when it was Luna who sent the package. But seeing how the letter was originally addressed to Celestia I could see how the Author could have used either.

A few grammar errors (1-4) through out the entire Chapter is doing quite well as far as that end goes. The events that take place are in fact quite detailed and I wouldn't recommend reading this if you want to keep your job if you work at a desk. The opening is nice as well as the ending is a nice transition into the next chapter.

8/10

The third Chapter: "Right Under Your Nose" starts off with a bit of an altercation a mild one but still a bit of a argument. But the chapter it self is detailed and very well written. A few reference errors still but again I've already said why the author could have done that. I wouldn't recommend reading this at work but if you do it on lunch brake on a tablet or something out side the job site or the office you should be ok.

I will say that the mount of detail into the positions and movements were just enough to get an idea of what they where doing with out having to really thing about it too hard. The ending was a nice mix of friends with benefits and co workers.

8/10

Over all I liked this fan fiction and even though I remember a different ending (probably cause I remember something similar from a different one) it was really well done and the pacing was smooth.

7.5/10 over all