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whiskeycharlie141


real name wesley connor, military fan, hollywood undead fan, skillet fan, martial artist, make stories, make posters on the computer

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    I'm Done With Everyone Here

    I'm tired of being bullied here. To make you all happy. I'm leaving. This website and the people here are really freaking stupid. Giving me bad reviews and putting my stories in the bad fics groups. I was trying my freaking best to make good stories, even though I have bad grammar, but none of y'all freaking care and wants to be a bunch of jerks to me. This is not the first time I've been

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    What's going on?

    I've tried so hard to make good stories so that people could like it, make fanarts, fanfilms and maybe do a audio read, but y'all still hate my story and I don't know why. It's so stupid. What am I doing wrong? I thought making Kitchi was a good idea but ya'll hate it for some reason. Why do you hate it? It talks about a black ops assassin who quit his job and trying to lay low and start a new

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    Important Announcement To All Authors

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Oct
7th
2015

What's going on? · 2:51am Oct 7th, 2015

I've tried so hard to make good stories so that people could like it, make fanarts, fanfilms and maybe do a audio read, but y'all still hate my story and I don't know why. It's so stupid. What am I doing wrong? I thought making Kitchi was a good idea but ya'll hate it for some reason. Why do you hate it? It talks about a black ops assassin who quit his job and trying to lay low and start a new life and then fell in love with Sunset, but suddenly the Griffon Mafia came and kidnapped Sunset and tries to kill Kitchi. SO what's the freak'n problem? Do you don't like my stories because I made them and for some reason y'all don't like me? Just freaking tell what's the problem.

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Comments ( 6 )

Okay, I may as well get in some honest advice before anything directly harmful fills the comments.

First off, getting angry won't help you on Fimfic. In fact, it will only bring up more problems for you. If someone is insulting you, do not insult them back; that is giving them what they want: a reaction. Regarding those who give legitimate criticism, it isn't wise to have an attitude with them since they aren't obligated to help you - they simply choose to.

Now, onto why Kitchi doesn't work:

1. The cover. Furries are not exactly the most well-received community around these parts, usually seen as the butt of jokes, especially those whose arts depicts them trying to look badass. Your cover pic is a great example. Few on here can take that seriously, most laugh at it.

2. The grammar. I'm sorry, but with the internet having so many resources to improve your use of the English language as well as several groups on the site for those looking for the help of editors ( Here, here, and here to name a few), saying that your grammar is bad won't save you. A harsh reality here on Fimfic, but mercy isn't usually shown to those who make excuses for where their story isn't the greatest despite having all sorts of ways to improve it (editors, online articles, real life peers, etc).

3. The story itself. You have a typical badass guy (who probably has a miserable, dark past) who can pretty much take on these griffons without any trouble going to save a damsel in distress. It has been done before on here - usually with poorly written pony OCs - though this time around it appears the pony has been replaced by a fox. One rule you will need to learn: nobody likes a Gary Stu. In other words, nobody likes the ultimate badass who has essentially no flaws (no, a dark past is not a flaw. That just usually makes it more laughable when paired with the edgy-guy persona). This group is very helpful for those starting out in the writing community here and can also provide access to people who can help you improve.


The most important thing I can say, however, is don't let this get you down. So you write a dud, everyone has to start somewhere. Just keep at it, use some of the advice and links I've provided, get to know people who can help you get better, and you can become a good writer. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Westbrook87 deleted Oct 10th, 2015

Oh, look, deleting comments again that don't spoon-feed you criticism like a child. When will you learn? Censoring criticism does NOT FUCKING WORK.

Rappers are not well-received. They're often seen as annoying, dickish, and generally awful people. and from what you're showing me, you're not trying to subvert that at all. Also, there are too many grammatical errors. Yes, this is important. One simple error can change the meaning of a whole sentence.

Here's an example of a sentence that has another meaning with incorrect grammar.

Correct: I really like to eat, Mom!

Incorrect: I really like to eat Mom!

See, it went from funny to morbid just by removing a comma!

I'm not going to go in length here as 3448981 said it best, but I will leave a link to a helpful guide, that might be of use to you.

http://www.fimfiction.net/writing-guide

This will show you the proper way to use grammar, and help you improve the quality of your stories.

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