Prologue: "Truth or Tale" and Chapter I: "Enter the Infinite" (Revisions Finished) · 3:51am Jul 17th, 2015
Revisions for Wandering Through Realities, Prologue: "Truth or Tale" and Chapter I: "Enter the Infinite" has been completed.
REVISIONS INCLUDE:
(1) Adrolon has been given more thought process as well as speech in Chapter I, deepening his character.
(a) STORY SPOILER: Adrolon is inexperienced and free-thinking, but is extremely intelligent.
(2) Major paragraph structure changes in Prologue and Chapter I.
(a) Proper indentation as well as paragraph breakage.
(b) Paragraphs have been formatted to be shorter for the sake of not dragging on.
(3) Major sentence structure changes in Chapter I.
(a) More fluidity and less chippy-choppy.
(b) Increased vividness and powerful language put in place of generic wordage.
(4) Minor descriptive changes in Chapter I.
(a) Lack of imagery has been beefed up.
(b) Increased vividness and powerful language put in place of generic wordage.
Well damn, this sounds like an iOS update description. Rereading the revised chapters is not necessary, as the story has not changed. However, I invite you to reread them if you wish to see the improvements enacted.
Chapter II: "Chaos Orb" will be revised in the next day or so, and Chapter III: "The Aeons Torn" will be published shortly after.
Note: Revisions were made in accordance to Ezn's kickass writing guide.
You just sit there and look pretty babydoll,
Zolvy-poo.