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    How do I read in third-person?

    Dear FIMFiction,

    I am new to reading stories in third-person and I would like to write one of my own. The issue I have right now Is trying to understand events from different stories.

    If anyone finds this blog, I need advice on what to think about when reading certain passages of text. Below in an example of said text from a story I've been following.

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Jan
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How do I read in third-person? · 10:23pm Jan 18th, 2015

Dear FIMFiction,

I am new to reading stories in third-person and I would like to write one of my own. The issue I have right now Is trying to understand events from different stories.

If anyone finds this blog, I need advice on what to think about when reading certain passages of text. Below in an example of said text from a story I've been following.

Extract from I Will Be Your Daddy by DoctorDizzy:

Fletcher growled as he watched them leave. In general, ponies were the nicest, but just like every other race, there were always a few rotten apples. It was taking every bit of self-control he had to keep himself from tearing that snooty jerk a new page. Especially after that ‘thank goodness’ comment. What was that supposed to mean?

His thoughts were interrupted by a quiet mewling from his back, as the filly shifted in her sleep. You’re right. Fletcher took in a deep breath, then let it out as he let his frustrations go. He had bigger problems. When the filly woke up, she would need milk, and if the nearest orphanage was as far away as the pony said it was, that was a problem.

The stallion had also made a pretty good point about reporting the murder. Somepony would find the scene eventually. It would probably be best if it was the Royal Guard, rather than some mare or foal, but then he’d have to tell them what happened to the gryphons. He could try telling them he was just a passerby that found the scene as it was, and found the foal crying in the middle of it.

Deciding that was probably the best course of action, and hoping they could possibly help him with his first problem as well, Fletcher turned towards the castle. But not before stealthily smearing a bit of mud on the back of a certain pony’s suit. I love magic.

This story is not bad, but I don't understand the events taking place in paragraphs like these. I've been left confused at moments like these because I feel like nothing is happening at these moments. If this was taking place in a flashback or highlighted in italics to represent thoughts I would understand these events more easily.

How do I interpret passages like these?

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