The 2.0 Eh? · 11:54pm Nov 10th, 2014
Hey Everybody, it’s the update you didn’t even know you wanted. The best fanfiction to ever besmirch the name of MLP: FiM has just undergone major renovations!
Oh wait, that's not it. It’s (cue Drum roll):
WHEN THE EVERFREE BURNS: 2.0
THE LP RELEASE
I had a bit too much fun making that.
So now, discerning and very intelligent reader, you have two choices!
A) Go back and read Act one to appreciate the true genius I have made manifest
or
B) Read the sparknotes version I’ve made for you below.
MAJOR SPOILERS FOR ACT 1 BELOW. DO NOT READ FURTHER IF YOU DON’T WANT TO BE MAJORLY SPOILED
This is the summary of changes I’ve made in the LP release
1)OHYGOD THERE’S A NARRATOR.
His name is Long Play, and he’s a old fart living in the grand year of 1119 SS. That’s right, he’s from the future!
So you, my charming an attractive reader, are now asking “Hey! SpiritDutch! Are stupid? What in the hell is going in with this story?” Never fear! I shall explain.
‘When the Everfree Burns’ story is a historical fiction, which Long Play is releasing as a series in a local newspaper. He communicates with the readership in the author’s notes from time to time, talking about life or the events in the chapters.
This has some implications! Firstly I, SpiritDutch esquire, cannot be blamed AT ALL for plot holes, spelling errors, grammar failing, and general stupidity in my story! It’s all Long Play’s fault! As his editor, I will be endeavoring to fix as much as possible of course.
2)IT’S A BETTER STORY IN EVERY WAY.
Boy did I ever struggle to fix the litany of mistakes in the first couple of chapters. BUT I DID. It reads better, there are fewer spelling problems. If you were eh-ing yourself the first time through, you’ll love how it isn’t utter crap now.
3)IT’S WAY LONGER!
I added like, 40,000 words in the rewrite. If you, my chaste and auspicious readers, like length, you are going to be very satisfied with the LP release.
4)HOLY JESUS THERE’S NEW CHARACTERS AND BACKSTORY
Two newbies! Both will be important to future plot development.
Evernake, a hippogryph magician from the mountain nation of Maredia, flirts with Rainbow Dash and Gilda while they’re in Clawstantinople and opens a whole heaping can of worldbuilding. He gets on a boat to Equestria thereafter, so look forward to an uncomfortably large amount of Eversnake in your future.
Countess Plenty Song, a member of the Black Horn Council. She has a thing going with Hausseway, but Twilight Velvet frames her for Barely Bale’s murder. She pieces out of Canterlot and runs back to her crappy castle in the west. She's pretty meh, all things considered.
5) MAJOR PLOT STUFF!!!
The dynamic between Twilight and Celestia has been revamped. You know from the start that they’re estranged, and they have had several disagreements and arguments that led to Twilight leaving Celestia's tutelage. Twilight adored and loved Celestia, but Celestia never showed any signs that she loved Twilight back. Gradually Twilight convinced herself that her feelings had been false, and left Celestia’s wardship.
Celestia meets a yellow mare, a former student it is implied, who criticizes her on her treatment of Twilight. Those of you who read ahead into Act Two might be a bit happier now that she gets a bit more introduction.
There’s that stuff with Eversnake and Plenty Song. I pretty much captured them above.
Some more interaction between Twilight and the Mane 6.
Twilight finds references of an ancient cult in Ponyville that worshipped Nightmare Moon, and a pony called Solemn from pre-ponyville times.
The Danhoof River is renamed to the Dneighper River, because horse puns.
Campfire between Lyra and Vinyl makes it abundantly clear Lyra hates Vinyl.
Celestia the 100th HATES ponykind. A lot. Yeah, I played ‘I Have No Mouth and I Must Scream’
More things I’m probably forgetting.
More Astral Nacre, as Celestia foresees her return, though she can not understand how.
Actually I’d like to digress on Astral for a moment, because I changed less with her than I thought. I considered briefly making her introduction way different, because she would appear angelic instead of hideous. She’d have been like an angel from Bayonetta, covered in white porcelain, but a disgusting flesh monster underneath.
I decided not to go with this for several reasons. First, Astral is a very honest character. She’s goddamn crazy, but has no pretense to anything besides what she is. She wouldn’t be the kind of pony to hide all her luscious, sinuous curves.
6 )IS THAT ALL?
Yeah, unless I forgot something. I’m going to add an interlude chapter between Acts 1 and 2 before I restart on Act 2, so you have that to look forward too.
Until next time, my precious and truly delightful readers.
