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  • EThe Element of Humanity
    Oliver Speng falls deeper and deeper into depression from the horrible people around him However, with a wish and an unlikely encounter with some ponies from a fictional television series, he may learn what good humans have.
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    Elements of Humanity cancelled, starting fresh with a new idea

    So I finished Elements of Humanity in mid 2015. However, I realized that when I was rewriting it, the story completely broke from my original intention. As I had people proofread it in my small group of friends, I did receive the needed grammar edits and contradiction findings, but I also received a lot of "ideas" on what to do next. I ended up liking the ideas and incorporated most of them.

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  • 355 weeks
    Rework on Element of Humanity

    I've rushed the first chapter out of excitement, and I'm wanting to take the story in a different direction. I have the rough draft of chapter 2 almost complete, and Oliver's mood does not match what it should be given what I'm having him go through. I've revoked my submission for now to do some real work on the first chapter, and I want to finish at least 5 chapters that two of my close

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May
8th
2014

Rework on Element of Humanity · 1:32pm May 8th, 2014

I've rushed the first chapter out of excitement, and I'm wanting to take the story in a different direction. I have the rough draft of chapter 2 almost complete, and Oliver's mood does not match what it should be given what I'm having him go through. I've revoked my submission for now to do some real work on the first chapter, and I want to finish at least 5 chapters that two of my close friends approve of. The comment on my story is NOT the only reason for this. I actually took this to my friend, and he suggested starting in a different way.

He reminded me about the time I wrote Paws of Fire on another website, and how I made it 80% through the sequel before people pointed out a lack of detail, rushed action, and non-unique personalities. I reacted poorly to the criticism, and after I tried editing the first chapters of the first book, I lost interest and my heart was no longer willing to carry on with the story. Neither of us want that to happen again. I've talked with him in general about what the story in my head is, and he is interested.

I noticed I have two followers, but I have to ask that you give me time to make the beginning of this story really worth while. I realize that I submitted the first chapter so quickly because I wanted quick fame. However, I need to really put my heart into this...because I want to tell a story worth remembering. The next time you see this book submitted, it will be MUCH better.

Whatever you've read up to this point...forget it all. There are some parts of chapter one that I might keep, but there will not be many. This is the only time that I'm going to pull a story back like this. I also need to have a better general idea of the entire flow of the story before I categorize it. The writing process I learned in school was taught for a reason...and I should follow it.

Thank you for understanding. I look forward to the day that I can put this story back onto FimFiction and be proud of my work.

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