OK, ok... the stuff you guys should know about · 3:05pm Feb 21st, 2014
1st off, Caboose IS NOT MY EDITOR, he is just a good friend that I have, who gives me input
2nd. Writing is hard. Like very hard, Just so you guys know I am pulling this all out of my head,
3rd. I am balancing, School, Bad Grades, A Girlfriend, This story, and My Parents hating me, so ya I got a lot of shit going on.
4th. I want an editor, if you want to be mine then send me a PM.
5th. The reason that it looks rushed is that I want to not forget anything.
6th. Internet at home, shit, internet ANYWHERE ELSE is ok though.
7th Bagels
8th A few comments are 'Stop just stop writing' or 'I have read better' Guys I know that i'm not he best writer, nor am I the worst, My FIRST story within a day was in the Feature box. So while I read your comments, I think that everyone has there own opinion, but if you don't like the story then don't read it. But if your trying to force your opinions and comments to get me to stop writing for all of the wonderful people out there. Well you can go and do that somewhere else. I write and I like to write. So, I wont stop and you really can't make me. And if you try, well,
FIRE.
Hits the haters
Yes, yes I do
Not a hater myself, but I did give you some constructive criticism on your story.
As for the "Rushed" bit, I had the same problem with my writing for awhile, which is why I know it is a problem. My advice on that is to jot down all your ideas on a notepad or something so that you never forget inspiration or the direction you want the story to go into. It helps you remember everything so you can avoid making your story go through too much content too quickly, or dump a ton of exposition onto the reader through your dialogue.
Because I can tell you now, as I said before, you have everything necessary to make a great story. But if you continue doing things like you did with the second chapter, where you explain an entire chapter or two of information in a paragraph in such an unnatural and clunky way. It will not only hold back your own writing skills, but it will hold back your story from getting the recognition it deserves.
1859230 would you like to be my editor, because you seem perfect
1859242
Sure, I can give it a shot.
1859265 thanks the internet went down at my school and surrounding areas. XD Fuck you Charter.
1859883
Alright, just send me whatever you need looked over and I'll get to it as soon as I can.