Jan
21st
2014
Discussion blog: Guardian of the Everfree · 11:27pm Jan 21st, 2014
I just wanted to thank everyone that has favorited, commented, liked, or even disliked my story "Guardian of the Everfree".
This blog is meant to be discussion blog. If you have questions or suggestions about the story. Leave a comment and I will answer if it doesn't spoil the story. Need clarification on something as well, just leave a comment. These can also both IRL questions or in-story questions.
So ask away.
Suggestion
can it talk?
Gasmask=protection from gas. Therefore he should be able to use all kinds of gasses (tear gas and the like) without any reprucusions.
Questions
What will Dante's first goals be?
What happens if Dante jumps into the box? Will it be like the tardis and act as a home or does it just spawn random stuff whenever it pleases? Also,
One more thing, how does one go about making a story? Any process or tips?
I'm thinking of doing a s.t.a.l.k.e.r. CoP crossover, but I'm not sure how to go about it.
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A. Gas mask will come into play in a few chapters
B. Dante's first goal will be to survive, and prosper. Become the Top Apex Predator of the Everfree. Act in his capacity as a Marine (protecting those that can not protect themselves). His largest goal however, is to get home.
C. The box acts as a connector between worlds. However, it has limitations. Organic tissues such as Dante can't jump through the wormhole. If he jumps into it, it'll just be a box. It however is more than just a box. This will be explained in later chapters.
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Honestly, I just write. My brain is weird. I'll think of a plot while on my way to school, come up with characters, plot points. And once I've refined it, I just write. Pretty much every new chapter is an improv. My plot is broad, but I know whats going to happen. I don't have an outline or a plan. I just have a broad plot in my head.
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I'm trying to lengthen them as we speak. I understand how you feel. I hate being stuck with short chapters.
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Hah! I use an Ipad!
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When Dante figures out how the box works I expect him to do the following:
Look for critical components of Russian Nukes.
Look for critical components of Chinese Nukes.
Look for critical components of North Korean Nukes.
Look for critical components of Indian Nukes.
Look for critical components of Pakastani Nukes.
Look for critical components of Rogue/Missing Nukes.
Look for critical components of other WMDs.
Look for a direct line to the POTUS/CNO/Direct Superior in Afghanistan.
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Dante: Sir! I'm in alternate dimension full of talking colorful horses. I ha
(Hang up)
Dante: Asswipe.
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Just out of curiosity...What's Dante's rank?
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Meanwhile on the other end...
AHHHHHHHH! MY RADIO IS HAUNTED BY THE GHOST OF A DEAD MARINE!!!
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Oh… fuck. I hadn't even thought of that.
I'll make it realistic. He is a private.
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Which kind?
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Oh, Dante isn't dead.
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I know that, You know that, Dante knows that, but his CO doesn't.
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I'll say he was in the young marines program and graduated basic as a PFC.
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Oh, no. His situation is much more complicated. If you want clarification, I can PM you. But this was going to be a major point in later chapters when I reveal how he was brought to Equestria.
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No thanks, I can wait.
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Alright than.
I got nothing to say but I just have a felling that wont's to say something so... hi.
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Allo!
1745487 that was fast and I do have a question for you " what do you think of your story?"
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Yeah, I have a tendency to spam my notifications. And I like my story. Why?
1745533 I wonted an idea of how far you will take it I guess it will be 20 more give or take 10 is my best guess.
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Chapters?
1745626 yes but I don't no I mite be completely wrong.
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A new chapter should be up in a little while.
1745690 YAY!!!!
Please tell me you'll make a chapter called "Pills here!"
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I was trying to avoid saying that outright.
1748137 Hey, he's going to get high on pills. Sweet.
IDEA:
PFC McClure encounters a minotaur. Minotaur bows in reverence and proclaims that the Gods/the Minotaur Messiah has returned.
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Neeehehhe, that would seem a bit too… dream wanking?
Its a good idea, I just don't think it fits the story very well.
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It could just be a throw-away joke. The minotaur tells everyone he knows about the experience and is treated like a madman (madcolt?). Sort of like how we treat people that claim they have seen/talked to/been abducted by God/Angels/Satan/Demons/Aliens.
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Hmm, maybe.