Story Recommendations #2 · 6:39am Nov 5th, 2013

Lately, I read quite a few interesting stories. I have been making my way through my read later list, so this is to be expected. I also managed to get to a story for Twilight's Library, though the verdict will be withheld. Anyway, shall we continue?

Mares of Tomorrow

This story is currently still updating, and, in fact, just started. If any of you are dissuaded by this, then just put it in your read later list. Anyway, this is probably one of the cooler stories I have read. Basically, this is a steam punk future where, and we are thrown into the story from Rainbow Dash's POV. There are a lot of finicky details I would like to mention, but for spoilers sake, I shall keep them out. Basically, she is trying to become a Wonderbolt, and in this future, they are an expertly trained air force of sorts. A good parallel would be the Rangers.

The first chapter proved extremely well-written and literally clear of all grammatical errors. The story is setting up to be one hell of a ride.

TRIGGER WARNING: TWIDASH
On the Subject of Weather and Mentality

In case you didn't know, I am an avid fan of TwiDash. And this story is extremely original. Twilight is draw up with the dilemma of this massive question: What is a storm? This is a recurring idea throughout the story, and it is even cooler to see that it was written like a journal. This really made reading it a joy.

With this story, there were some small, technical errors. It was also odd to see dialogue as a journal entry, but I can certainly cast that aside for the story. If I were to rate the story, a solid 9/10 would be my choice. Give it a read!

TRIGGER WARNING: TWIDASH
Nightly Rendezvous

With the TwiDash contest having ended, I have quite a few of these stories left over. Sorry about that.

This story is probably one of the more interesting in terms of how he made the story work. Basically, he kept true to the show, making the "nightly rendezvous" in between major episodic events. Usually, this would be a hard thing to work with because it would render it almost an alternative universe, but the way he does it fits perfectly with canon. Of course, the epilogue threw me for a loop.

There were quite a few grammatical errors, but that comes with its size. Unfortunately, I don't make that distinction. With the grammatical issues there, I have to give it an 8/10. The story is amazing, but the grammar needs some work.

TRIGGER WARNING: FLUTTERDASH
Her

This was quite the story to read. Similar to the style used in On the Subject of Weather and Mentality, this was almost journalistic. I got the feeling it was more of a note, though. But scenes later on in the story beg to differ. This story offers one of the better examples of an amazing conflict. Truly, I haven't seen one this well-made in quite a while. You will be taken through an emotional ride, no doubt, and the ending will leave you dumbfounded.

But there is just one problem. Instead of writing this out again, I am just going to copy the list I made.

I am not going to sugarcoat this for you: your grammar is atrocious. I will list out the errors for you:
. "To" and "too" confusion
. "Its" and "it's" confusion
. Comma errors
. Unnatural dependent clauses (happened not often, but there may have been one or two at
the most)
. Capitalization of "you" and other pronouns after dialogue
. Punctuation confusion and errors at the end of a dialogue line
. Misspelled words
. Inconsistent ellipsis form
. Unsightly formatting (there were times when you making a sentence one line was utterly
annoying)

Yeah . . . it was pretty bad. The story was simply amazing, but the grammar was terrible. Like, truly terrible. If he had an editor, I would have given him a 10/10 in a heartbeat. But, because of this, I gave him a 6/10.

And that is all I have read so far. I'll be starting on some more stories soon. See you guys then!