Updated A Stupid Plan · 11:54pm Apr 22nd, 2012
I should probably mention that I added a very short passage to A Stupid Plan's second chapter in an attempt to slow down the cliff scene and allow it to read smoother. I'll post the excerpt with the part before and after it below in case you're interested but don't want to read back through. I italicized the new part:
"Pinkie stepped forward, hoof extended, but Twilight jerked back and suddenly found her back hoof slipping out from under her. She fell forward and slammed her chin on the grass; her lower half began slipping off the edge of the cliff and she scrabbled frantically to grab a hoofhold, but the last thing she saw before gravity claimed her was Pinkie racing forward, panic stricken. Too late. Twilight tumbled off the edge and careened towards the brutal ocean below.
“TWILIGHT!” Pinkie’s voice echoed around her as she plummeted and time seemed to slow.
The pink earth pony fell to her knees, staring in horror as Twilight plunged head over hooves towards the rocks below. She was helpless to save her; all she could do was watch the fall while the image of a heartbroken unicorn burned in her memory along with the sounds of a callous dismissal.
As Twilight fell, she felt an odd sense of peace wash over her. There were less poetic ways to go, she decided. Plummeting off a cliff after having the most asinine proposal of infatuation in the history of equine-kind rejected was surely one for the novels. She closed her eyes, not willing to watch as the rocks drew ever nearer. Hopefully somepony will take care of Spike."
Pretty short, but I think it helps at least a little.
~BSB
Good idea, and it fits in perfectly.