Dat prologue. · 12:51pm Mar 18th, 2012
Howdy y'all!
It's never been a big secret, but my prologue was really the part that hurt in my story.
It's lack of a solid hook and reliance on the thoughts of a rather erratic character as well as the reader's natural curiosity over what happened during his reign just made it bad at catching the eyes.
Also, shit paragraphing in some spots.
At some point, I tried to rework that, but after numerous re-reads of it, I just couldn't see anything I could improve.
That's changed.
I've gone over it again recently, and I've changed stuff.
Made the flow smoother in a way and added in a LOT of hints about Discord's relation towards Celestia and the Mimic as well as their origin.
Also added in one detail that gives the tone of the crossover and what it'll all be about :p
Hopefully, all the added mysterious stuff will make it more catchy and give the reader some incentive to read on!
Peace&Love,
Yours Truly,
SweetHolyHell.
