One is Silver Summed up in Song · 6:03am Mar 21st, 2013
To take a leaf out of Horizon's book (also, spoilers are overrated):
It seems my time is almost up, gotta think up something quick,
I can feel my beating pulse, hear my heart's racing tick.
Though I many not go on, he still can't touch what's me,
This is not the end of me;
I know that's what the shield is telling me.
It looks like we are all we've got, seems this is our final stand,
We must stop them here and now, or they'll devastate the land.
The odds are looking grim, we're outnumbered scores to three.
What a lousy destiny;
But I know it's what the blade is telling me.
Our numbers have been squandered, these people plagued by greed,
Blessed are we that each of us has the other's need.
I've seen their land, their ways, their world, what a sight to see.
We must set each other free;
I know that what the cape is telling me.
I know that this is war, but I can see it isn't right.
Who are we to say who is left to see the light?
They can still be spared, I'll see to that they'll be.
The lives of all depend on me;
I know that's what the staff is telling me.
I'm tired of her guile, getting sick of this routine.
Her tricks are spreading thin, I'm sure that that is clearly seen.
I know that she's somewhere here, no doubt that she must be.
The roots are what uphold the tree;
I know that's what the suit is telling me.
She told me in the riddle it was not enough to know.
Now I understand, I should have seen it long ago.
But now my destiny--it's plain to see,
They've been standing right in front of me;
I know that's what my heart is telling me.
Did this really to clear my head before attempting a particularly delicate chapter.
I love this — and it's a great teaser for OIS, to boot! Now I'm really looking forward to reading those chapters.
You've done a good job for the most part wriggling through a difficult rhyme scheme (a whole lot of lines constrained to a terminal "-ee" sound), although the "me"/"me"/"me" of the first verse feels like cheating. Can I suggest "This is not the end of me" --> "I'll survive calamity" perhaps? You might be able to play with the first of those three lines and a rhyming dictionary to excise the other "me" as well, but off the top of my head nothing comes to mind.
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Well that's kinda the thing. It's really more about how death isn't the end, as it doesn't change the life you've had. It's kinda like it's the end for her, but not of her.
But... not really, I suppose.
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Something something "identity" maybe then? "Scores to three"/"destiny" was the most magnificent of the lot; you could probably play with the first verse a little and come up with something similar.
Anyhow, nice work!