A Chapter to Half-remember Kind of Like That Dream You Had · 6:19pm Jan 25th, 2013
After some thought I've decided to go for less of a sledgehammer approach to altering the chapter.
The changes to look for:
References to 'Sweetie's mother' in the prose replaced with Twilight's name, hopefully to make it a little clearer that Sweetie doesn't quite have it down. She also slips up when she's upset.
I added a scene at the start from Twi's POV. It's still after the 8 month skip, because I don't want to have a large time gap in-chapter. Hopefully it'll better set down Twi's attitude towards the whole scenario. I'm a little loath to have two chapters in a row start with breakfast, but switching up the POV might make it work.
I extended the argument and the make up scene to hopefully work better.
Some minor tweaks to Spot Light as I nail down his character. He has gotten less development than I'd like (Apple Crisp tends to steal scenes), but I got a suggestion from my editor for something I can do that I like, though it'll be a bit.
Sweetie's little time travel quip is staying, screw the haters.
i.imgur.com/9stzJnY.jpg
Changes already up, or is this what will be changed ?
I liked the time travel quip XD
750845 The changes are already up.
So...safe to read now?
750857
Awesome.
Woop woop
good, I liked the time traveler bit.
I actually prefer to full remember my dreams — especially when I dream of equestria. Pegasus flight is out of this world.
I hope this didnt cause the problem I thought it would -- rewrites always derail things.