Delays and Requests

Ohai there fellows. Good to see you again.

To cut a long story short: due to life being life, the second act of P&P will be ever so slightly delayed. Maybe 2 weeks to start coming out or something. Sorry about that!

Part of that delay is also due to the fact that I shipped P&P off to EQD last week, and today they responded to tell me that I need to work on the pacing and the grammar (namely overusing commas, em dashes, semicolons, saidisms... Basically, I just throw too much stuff in). I'd like to get the first chapters all re-polished before I go any further with the story, so that'll be taking up a fair amount of my writing time.

I'm a bit surprised, since I can't help but feel that I've come a heck of a lot further than my last story (Everypony Loves Rainbow), which was accepted, but I suppose I'm just more comfortable writing in first person or something. Still, if I want to have a hope of pursuing a career in fiction, I want these stories to reach as many people as possible; that way I can get as much feedback and personal opinions on what and how I write as I can, which with inevitably lead to improvement. That almost always means getting it on EQD.

With that in mind, I'd like to come to the 'requests' part of that title up there. If any of you reading this have any of your own opinions you want to hurl at me, please do. If you're feeling generous enough to actually help me out, maybe suggesting how I can edit these (and future) chapters down and stop throwing grammar around like it's a damn beach ball, even better! I promise to pay you with your choice of either a bag of peanut M&M's, or an equivalent monetary donation to a charity of your choice.

...That's fair payment for hours of wading through my prose for review purposes, right?

And for everybody else who came here and can't help out, no worries. I appreciate your support anyway. Here, have some Neon Pegasus.

You're welcome.