First chapter rewrite · 1:46am Apr 25th, 2023
The first chapter of this story has been freshly rewritten from scratch. The cancelled tag remains for now.
This does not promise that the story is coming back, all I know is that the first chapter was bothering me and I hated how it was written, so I revised it.
The main thing you need to know is that watchful wings = ellura.
Ellura never meant anything and didn't make any sense as a company name, so I revised it to some vague ponification of Umbrella that still makes sense as a company name in g4's universe. That's the only significant change made so far, everything else is retained as it was, it just reads better.
If you want to read the original chapter as it was, you can read it here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DvvZ5jNPqZgLIW438kg4JQm339Mmpk1bnBRB1Kg3hBo/edit?usp=drivesdk
I know there are probably some errors on the chapter, as I am posting this from my phone I'll take a second pass of it when I get home.
That's all. Thank you for reading.
