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UNDEAD · 7:18pm
Hollywood Undead tonight.
If I don't survive, then I apologize leaving you all with a half-done fic.
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Cry for Eternity
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97,297 words ( 17 chapters ) · 10,292 views
· A terrible new day rises when a tragedy, foreseen only by Celestia but preventable by none, occurs right in the middle of Canterlot, turning Twilight Sparkle's world upside-down. Now, all of Equestria is looking to her to hold the broken nation together, all while she tries to pick up the pieces of her shattered life.
Coverart used with permission from: TheX-plosion
A/N: Yes, the title was based of the Dragonforce song of the same name, you may stop postulating about it now.
This story is going to be a sizable one. Expect to see some delays as well as corrections and retroedits as future episodes air.
Constructive criticism may be sent to my inbox on this site. Formatting/pacing suggestions may also be sent to my inbox here.
Plot suggestions can be sent to asylum1388@gmail.com where they will be read (maybe) and more than likely ignored.
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A Precious Gift
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· The Princess of the Night has called Twilight Sparkle to Canterlot, but what for?
Coverart by : fatalerror328
A/N: Just a short one-shot I wrote while trying to brute-force my way through writer's block while working on CfE chapter 4. The TwiLuna romance in CfE is going off a low slower than I originally intended, so I decided to publish this to reward your patience.
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The Elements of Discord
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28,394 words ( 12 chapters ) · 369 views
· A force as old as time itself rises from the ether with one purpose: to end all life in Equestria.
Twilight Sparkle is called on once again to lead her friends against the darkness, but how do you fight against something you have no hope of understanding?
To Twilight, the answer seems simple: any way she can.
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>>429715
Sure thing, sir.
On a note, if you ever feel there is something wrong with my review, just tell me and I'll mention it in the next episode
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((I start every review reading a few lines of the fanfic))
"However, none of this is the reason I called you here." Surrounded in a midnight blue glow, a rather small envelope floated up from behind the desk as Luna sat down. "While Celestia was unable to change her own fate, she took steps to ensure that the same would not happen to me."
The envelop opened and the stationery inside floated over to Twilight. She reached out with her own magic and took it gently. "Luna, what's this?"
"Twilight, my sister wasn't training you just as her protégé, she was training you as her replacement."
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"Cry for Eternity", written by Asylum388, is one of the many fanficts born when it was known that Twilight was going to be transformed into an alicorn.
The story starts, and I'm not venting any spoiler, with Twilight running throught Canterlot towards the hospital to find Celestia. The princess, dying, tells her how proud she is of her apprendice before passing away.
After the burial and the ceremony, Luna reveals Twilight the truth behind her training: Celestia was training her as her substitute, as the future pricess of the Sun, to reign together with princess Luna.
Using the "Slice of life" format, the story is told by narrating concrete moments in Twilight's life. Without a trully defined central plot, the story is centered in how the changes in the new princess' life affects her friends, Spike, herself and Equestria itself.
I think that he (Asylum) does a very good work developping Twilight. In no moment you can tell that she is out of character: she meditates every political decission, confronting the inner debate of doing what must be done for the good of the nation, although it may affect her friends.
However, in my opinion, this story is lacking of a truly obstacle to make the plot makes sense. Until the moment there are a few antagonists that oppose the new princess. But their attempts of stopping her, or even putting an end to her, remain as a mere anecdote. If there is, really, a complot to kill Twilight, until the moment, it is very well hidden.
I think this story has a lot of potential, but it all depends on how Asylum388 will develop it. For the moment being, and due to the lack of a real central plot, I can't give it more than a six over ten. It's a very entertaining lecture, yeah, but for the moment it doesn't really move anything inside you, except for occasional tearful moments.
Well, I leave you for a while with a song I discovered some days ago: "Long way from Equestria", by Mandopony and Acoustic Brony.
...damn, those two are coping all the songs of this radio!
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>>426780
I speak two languages (well, technically three, but American Sign isn't really spoken...), unfortunately, Spanish isn't one of them
That being said, I'd love a translation
Hello Asylum!
I wanted to tell you that I have made a review about your story "Cry for eternity" in my podcast "Volgrand, Música y Fandom".
Unfortunately it's an spanish podcast, so I'm afraid you may not understand me :S. But if you want, I can provide you a written translation of what I said, so you can punch me if needed
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Here's the link:
http://www.spreaker.com/user/5615814/ep_2_steam_punk_y_batallas_aereas
The review starts in the mark 'Extracto "Cry for eternity" esp'.
EVen if you don't speak spanish, I have cool brony music in the podcast, so you may enjoy it :).
Best and thanks for your stories!
Thank Celestia that they notify you of chapter updates now in the Feed, cause when I went to find it in the unread chapters list, CfE was not showing there...
friggin glitches
Disturbed... my favorite band ever. awesome profile pic.
>>308149 Ah cool, I was wondering where I had seen it before.
>>308084
No, it's from "The Sickness" by Disturbed.
More specifically, Stupefy.
I thought your profile pic was off Pray for Plagues done by Bring Me The Horizon.
>>237688
Rofl.
When first I saw that you posted here, my immediate reaction was "oh god, what'd I do this time?'
Guess who's about to work on Rainbow Dash...
Not this guy I am working on the cmc chapter