Xavius-WindsongUser ID: 27,169 Registered: 17th Apr 2012
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Well, I'm a 19 year old homeless youth living in Western Washington (USA)
I'm an artist that's also trying to get better at writing, but I'm having troubles with anything more than the one thing I'm good at, which is Character conceptualization and creation.
Uhm, check out my "New Pony Species" article, and feel free to add ideas. It's located here: http://xavius-windsong.deviantart.com/#/d4whyvn
My avatar is made by the awesome Kaitlyn Clinkscales of DA!
I meant that he's actaully bad at other forms of magic. You know, the way bricks are really bad at cross-country hiking marathons, or swimming in pudding.
>>2337223372 well yeah but you could always have him trained by Twilight or something. That would make for an interesting arc. Either way, I will await your copy of the story idea.
I read the first chapter. Pretty unique, which is a really good thing. (I'm all about uniqueness when it comes to my writing.) I like the idea of a human mage, you never see that kind of shit in Equestria!
On the negative side, it needs more meat. As the first chapter, it needs to be long enough to set up the character, set, and other details, but short enough to pull the reader in wanting more. It is good enough to post, but I'd like to see it beefed up and cleaned up a tad.
Onto the main story, I've got some ideas but I'd need your input. What kind of story are you envisioning? Is he going to come to Equestria and become powerful with magic? Is he going to save Equestria from an unknown danger? Or is it going to be like my story Through Struggle and you are going to focus more on emotional growth and character progression?
All in all, its a very good start with a few minor errors here and there. If you want I'll even add a bit to it. (If you don't want me encroaching on your work I understand.) With the proper writing, this story could go places. I leave you with this gif. It's mah favorite
At the moment, the first chapter of the story I'm writing is up on my DA profile, if you might be willing to go take a look at it and tell me what you think, and what I could change about it before I bring it here (once chapter 2 is done, so that it's pony related) I would be most appreciative.
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>>23374
I meant that he's actaully bad at other forms of magic. You know, the way bricks are really bad at cross-country hiking marathons, or swimming in pudding.
>>23372 well yeah but you could always have him trained by Twilight or something. That would make for an interesting arc. Either way, I will await your copy of the story idea.
>>23369
Actually, he's pretty useless as a mage, he's only good at Teleportation magics.
Thank you for the input, when I have my laptop out, I'll send you a copy of the story idea.
The story is going to feature OCs and the Flim Flam brothers.Who have made an inventionthat makes something ponies actually want
I read the first chapter. Pretty unique, which is a really good thing. (I'm all about uniqueness when it comes to my writing.) I like the idea of a human mage, you never see that kind of shit in Equestria!
On the negative side, it needs more meat. As the first chapter, it needs to be long enough to set up the character, set, and other details, but short enough to pull the reader in wanting more. It is good enough to post, but I'd like to see it beefed up and cleaned up a tad.
Onto the main story, I've got some ideas but I'd need your input. What kind of story are you envisioning? Is he going to come to Equestria and become powerful with magic? Is he going to save Equestria from an unknown danger? Or is it going to be like my story Through Struggle and you are going to focus more on emotional growth and character progression?
All in all, its a very good start with a few minor errors here and there. If you want I'll even add a bit to it. (If you don't want me encroaching on your work I understand.) With the proper writing, this story could go places. I leave you with this gif. It's mah favorite
>>19884
well, story suggestions are good, too.
>>19883
Sure I can take a look, but i might be ab ad proof reader lol.
I only see big-medium mistakes instantly
>>19860
Thank you for the offer!
At the moment, the first chapter of the story I'm writing is up on my DA profile, if you might be willing to go take a look at it and tell me what you think, and what I could change about it before I bring it here (once chapter 2 is done, so that it's pony related) I would be most appreciative.
>>19855
thanks,
if u need any help you could contact me