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Ninestempest

Joined July 2011
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Stories (10)

  • Right
    Twilight and her two friends go out drinking, but one of them is not what they seem...

    8,072 words · 8,816 views · 875 likes · 18 dislikes
  • Faith
    Fluttershy, with the help of Twilight, plans to tell her friends that she's a changeling, but when Fluttershy and Twilight are teleported to a mysterious forest, it seems the two won't be able to find their way home.
    14,679 words · 5,713 views · 689 likes · 20 dislikes
  • Pink Dream
    Twilight goes out on a date with Bubble Berry, but not all is as it seems.
    15,321 words · 6,706 views · 503 likes · 16 dislikes
  • Persona MLP: The Nightmare Hour
    A Persona crossover. An architect from Canterlot and the Mane 6 team up to investigate a string of kidnappings and murders in Ponyville, as well as a new, mysterious world that only appears just at midnight...
    29,704 words · 4,100 views · 124 likes · 12 dislikes
  • Burning Bridges
    18,153 words · 1,290 views · 131 likes · 15 dislikes
  • Out of the Blue
    51,608 words · 1,475 views · 61 likes · 5 dislikes
  • With a Spark
    9,352 words · 4,769 views · 105 likes · 13 dislikes
  • Epiphany
    27,577 words · 3,514 views · 94 likes · 16 dislikes
  • A Change in Scenery
    12,236 words · 395 views · 26 likes · 2 dislikes
  • A Vivid Twilight
    6,783 words · 898 views · 29 likes · 5 dislikes
Feb
25th
2013

I read it this morning, not remembering it was tagged as a sad fanfiction, and ultimately payed for it.  Also I wish it had accents.  It's bothering me.

That is the tl;dr version anyway

While the story in question (seriously are you clicking this?  It's been top story in the feature box for like three days) is a great sucker punch of emotion that doesn't rely on simply "the premise" to deliver the sad, with an amazing cohesion of events and good scene changes that keep the information relevant and interesting, I will say that is still forever rushed.  Much life Fires of Friendship, of which I hold one of the few dislikes of, and that one really weird thing about AJ being racist slightly, it is a one-shot that is simply rushed beyond all belief.  Maybe it's an issue with Ponydora's writing.  As you can see on my profile, I consider Flight of the Alicorn to be one of my favorite fics (if not tied with Blood is Thicker than Friendship), and I think the pacing in that story is even slower than it needs to be, somehow.

Now, the story in question is still amazing.  I haven't felt my heart clench like that in a long time, and the lack of awareness of the genre (well, tagging I guess) didn't help.  But... well, it isn't a spoiler to say so: when you have such a perfectly wrapped up time-line of events like this story, each step another possible "fanon" interpretation that is done so cleanly that it's believably canon, just because of how well it's presented, it's astonishing that I'm even concerned about the pacing when he fit all of the fic's information into a mere 15k words.  I doubt I could write something like this in such a short order.  It would turn into a 30k multi chapter epic.

It is a GREAT story; I cannot reiterate this enough.  It sounds like I'm just spouting praise, but really, I am.  I mean, I'm not just a Dr. Who fan because of the sci-fi nature of the show.  The only other sci-fi I remotely cared about before Dr. Who was Stargate SG-1 (seriously that crossover needs to update sometime).  No, I like it because of the themes of what are right and wrong, what is necessary or a pointless risk, that come up when you involve time travel.  I really do love it.  So in a way, the fic preys on my

But if there is something I take from this, it is that Ponydora, in my opinion, has one vital weakness, one that, should he shoot down, he could become one of the best writers in this fandom, without equal.  One flaw that still doesn't detract from the spectacle or experience, but one that is nonetheless all too recognizable.

You don't gotta go fast, Ponydora Prancypants.

TENOUTTATEN

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Feb
19th
2013

I WAS READING PINK DREAM BECAUSE I WAS PLANNING ON WRITING A REALLY SMALL SEQUEL FOR IT

BUT THEN I NOTICED IT DID NOT HAVE ANY INDENTATIONS OR BLANK LINE SPACING

THEN I NOTICED NONE OF MY FICS DID EXCEPT OUT OF THE BLUE AND EPIPHANY

GOOD JOB TELLING ME GUYS

/me flails

Updates:

Lots of planning still being done for the Persona crossover.  It'll be mostly based on 4, but there are some things that were in 3 as well (that special hidden hour is a thing).  That's moving along really well.

Oh yeah, Pink Dream sequel coming too.  It'll probably be nsfw.  First pony clopfic? MAY AS WELL!

Despite the hiatus it is in, I'm making progress on Out of the Blue.  The next chapter I expect to be done relatively soon.

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Feb
16th
2013

I actually don't have a lot to add.

Like our opinion on Spike At Your Service (which was an awful fanfiction), Wanderer D and I are in agreement again.  His post has some vital information that help explain parts of the episode (new magic mostly).

TL;DR I really liked the episode.  But I think two episodes would have made the princess-ing disgustingly boring, and what they did with a musical episode was REALLY good........

Now, in regards to pacing... I think the first part was fine.  All of the cutie mark switcheroos, everypony looking sad, I think what they had was paced okay, but it could have been it's own episode.  Twilight's emotional response is very sudden, and since when has "reading a few sentences" meant casting a spell?  I think it should have involved more investigation, realizing what she had done, then solving it, and then, as someone else said, have a vaporized Twilight at the end.

My problem with reaching such an emotional level would be that you have an entire episode of... "twilight becoming a princess," which doesn't really have much of a plot in of itself!  I don't think that would have been fun to watch, unless we actually saw her dealing with new responsibilities or something.

So, as a series of events? I think the first 18 minutes are really good.  Up until Twilight falls from the stars as an Alicorn, I think the episode is paced well from the perspective of flow of events.  The connection isn't built up as well, and you can always show a little more, but that's what the songs were for.

Musicals.  I've heard weird complaints about this episode's musical status.  "Why did it need to be a musical?"  Well, aside from being a very fun creative venture (EQUESTRIA SHIMMERS), it packs a lot of emotion and information into very compact poetry, which I think is great.  If this had been a regular non-musical episode, we would have had MUCH worse pacing issues.

My problems really come in the last six minutes, when she is an alicorn.  It's sudden, her friends reply in really weird ways (in the coronation itself especially.  Why are they randomly announcing that they love each other?  Are they giving us the six-way-ship?), there's celebration, there is very little ACTUAL explanation as to why this happened... I'm sure it's explain in the S4 premier (and I hope it undoes it), and it's just all a bung of information that no one wants to deal with.

The worst part is that this doesn't seem to expand Twilight's character.  Her initial reaction?  GOTTA READ A BOOK.  Cliche joke of the character, I get it.  But let's see here: Luna had the book in the S3 premier, so that means they were planning this to some degree.  They give her the book, probably expecting her to immediately cast it and ruin all of her friend's lives for an entire day.  When she then accomplishes her goal, she's thrown into the twilight zone and, without permission, given wings, and thrown into being a princess.  I don't think she wanted this, was ready for it (I Wasn't Prepared For This, anyone?), or is going to keep on wanting to be this princess, if she can't be with her friends.

As such, it is my hope that the S4 Premier undoes her status as a princess.

GOD I LOVE RAMBLING

WRITING UPDATE TOMORROW

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Feb
16th
2013

I loved the episode, though the lack of proper third act/denouement (though not because of rushing!) is a problem.

I'll need to rewatch it in 1080p.  Many times.

EQUESTRIA SHIMMERSSSSSS

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Feb
14th
2013

I promise you, you do NOT want to watch it.  Wait for the episode.  Two days!  You can do it.

It'll be so worth it you don't even know.  This episode is going to be crazy, and watching 10% ahead of time will not help.  You can always have the experience of watching it with having prior knowledge (as in, every time you watch it after the first time), but don't ruin your first time of watching it, while you watch the events unfold without any prior knowledge.

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Feb
6th
2013

Past Sins is a fic · 7:58pm

I, uh, hmm.

I'm not really sure how to say this.  So let's start with some background.

I read AbsoluteAnonymous's "Games We Play" over about a three-four day span.  Yes, the entire thing.

I read Ponydora Prancypants's "Flight of the Alicorn" over... well, chapters prologue-3 a few months before I read the rest of the story, which I read over three days.

I read Cloudy Skies's "Lost and Found" over two days.  I read it on the bus, went to school for 3 hours, read it on the way home, got home and read the rest of the night.  I had a snack between 3 pm and midnight.  Didn't even eat.

This is the reason I don't read incompletes.  It has nothing to do with trust in the author's ability or fortitude, but more with my habit of reading things I deeply enjoy at ludicrous speeds.  Well, not speeds, but in bursts.

So you may have noticed I haven't made any, like, Past Sins blogs or anything.

That's because I just finished to today.  I started reading past whatever I had blogged previously, on Saturday, and any moment I wasn't studying or playing 10 hours of Xcom, I was reading Past Sins.  Actually, I've come to finish it.

There are words I have to say about it.  But I have to go to Cultural Anthropology right now so let me say some things.

1) I really enjoyed it.  I am not at a time where I can equate personal enjoyment with overall opinion of the piece, but I had a great time reading it.  I wouldn't have rushed through it if I didn't like it.

2) I think it has some issues, which I'll get to.  I think most of it comes down to long summaries of events/thoughts (which is a style I still use and therefore am conflicted in citing it as an issue) and how Twilight/Nyx were formed at the start of the story.

3) If 5/10 is my "average" rating, then 7/10 is where I'd put this story, rating wise.

Since this is a blog and I'm arrogant/vain, I'll post more thoughts on it in a bit.   Either tonight or tomorrow, idunno.  Calc 2 exams need studying.

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Feb
2nd
2013

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/6881/two-ponies

So Twilight Snarkle is back and posting an early work he did not press submit on!

I can't really praise this story enough.  When it came out, it was easily my favorite story in the fandom.  Of course, it is also from the start of July 2011.  It's pretty old.  But it's still just as great.  I'll have to make room on my top 5 fics on my profile...

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Feb
1st
2013

I THOUGHT I SHOULD DO THIS TOMORROW BUT I WILL FORGET SO I WILL DO IT NOW EVEN THOUGH I AM WAY TIRED

TL;DR FOR THOSE IN A HURRY:

>BURNING BRIDGES OR PERSONA?  ALSO EQD FAILED IT BUT WHATEVER

>OOTB ON HIATUS UNTIL BRAINSTORM ROLLS SUCCEED

>PINKIE/RARITY SHIPPING STORY STILL KIND OF A-GO

NOW ONTO WORDS

So I have been busy with school this week and I thought I should mention some things that are happening.

First off, Burning Bridges is... well, here's some history.  The last thing I wrote was Pink Dream.  I really like how well Pink Dream did, and I think it's still my best writing.  The fact that I can look back on it six months later and still like it is pretty crazy, and I think most writers envy that sometimes.  So, for six months, I thought I was a pretty cool writer.  I needed a reason to write, because the last two things I wrote were for deadlines, and that seemed to get me up and writing.

But a lot of Burning Bridges was really rushed.  In order to get it into the contest on time, around half of it was written over 3 weeks or so before the deadline (which was Sunday, Jan 20th), and then the last half was written about, oh, from Thursday night until that Sunday night deadline.

To say it was rushed in writing and execution is not only not a stretch, but a perfectly accurate way of putting it.  For some reason I thought it was superb at the time, but I don't even have to look back at the document to remember the liquid stream of dialog that is most of parts 2 and 3, as well as a deranged amount of focus on Apple Butter, Applejack's mother, in an Appledash fic.  It lacks focus, has a couple OoC moments, and it is definitely rushed.  I lost all focus of my writing, didn't bother to edit much beyond proof-reading errors, and it looks it.

And as such, it was rejected from Equestria Daily.  There are some points the reviewer made that I disagree with, and... well, to the best of our abilities, I think we hashed them out (for those who don't look beyond story pages of mine, I'm also an EqD Pre-reader, so this hurts a little bit).  But I've always preferred writing for EqD, given that most of EqD tends to, like, read good.  Usually.

So I'm at an interesting place, because I used to care about EqD readerbase, but now I just don't.  Having a goal like that feels artificial when I should enjoy writing, but that's the problem.  Writing has been really hard with increased school work and just a kind of lack of interest.  Part of me wants to edit it into something really great, but part of me also is just really interested in the other thing I'm working on, my Persona crossover.  Which is just... dumb... because I shouldn't leave a blemish of a fic just sitting on my page, but man I really enjoy Persona 4 and writing it would be super fun augh decisions are hard.

So I just... I don't know, need something to work with.  Would you guys prefer I just work on re-writing most of Burning Bridges into not-shit, even though I know many people that I wanted to read it already read it, or should I try and focus on my first REALLY LONG adventure fic that, according to this website, has only been done once before?  Regardless of which option I do, I'll get to the other one eventually.

OH RIGHT

Out of the Blue is on hiatus until I can figure out a better ending.  Nothing to do with canon, but I realize I'm not setting up the story very well for the ending I've had in mind since the start.  It would be kind of sudden and weird because I originally wanted to do ANOTHER fic after that to finish that arc/plot/thing involving the elements, but now I'm not sure if I should or if I want to.

THE FIC NO ONE CARES ABOUT AKA "Pinkity" AKA "Pinkmalion" will resume at a random time and be written periodically with my prereader and maybe when I have some of it I'll post some but I have no real desire to focus ONLY on it or to COMPLETELY ABANDON IT so yeah take those as you will.

ALSO WHAT THE FUCK MY FIRST RARILIGHT FIC STILL HAS MORE VIEWS THAT BURNING BRIDGES?  YA'LL ARE JUST CRAZY SERIOUSLY THAT FIC IS SHIT

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Feb
1st
2013

Nines reads PS 1 · 6:08am

I read this a few days ago so I promise I'll be more prompt about the next update

But that chapter was kinda silly.  I know it's still up to season 2 canon but peewee mentions just made me laugh because of how he was apparently returned to his parents according to the recent pets/spike episode.

Also oh man Nyx got some new origins.  Am I going to be the only person who likes Nyx because of Creeping Darkness?

Oh hey you should all read Creeping Darkness it's really really good.

fanficfanfic

I'm tired

TENOUTTATEN

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Jan
26th
2013

Burning Bridges is finished.

A few things to say about it.

First off, oh lawd it has less views that my Rarilight story that was my first fanfic ever and is pretty utter shit.  Le epic fimfic face.

Second, while not based on the lyrics of these songs, it definitely is intended to evoke some emotions that these songs give me, both of which are where the titles are taken from.  The songs are Burning Bridges and Uneasy Hearts Weigh The Most.  I kind of title drop the first one, and the second one is just a bit of a motif-theme-thing.  It's especially odd because neither of these are actually even close to being my favorite song by each band, but oh well.

Third, I'm at a bit of an impasse.  I'm looking back at Out of the Blue now, and the last thing I want to do is really work on it.  Especially when two nights a week are basically used up entirely in my Calc II night class, and night is basically the only time I can write.  Not only that, but I need/want/really should get to work on my Persona 4 crossover.  And Pinkity (sorry Avery!).  And whatever else pops into my head.  Oh and I want to read Past Sins.  And Romance Reports.  And Fallout Equestria.

Fuck so much to do

Oh well enjoy the shipping with heavy familial themes bleh.

Maybe I should do another poll.

Oh yeah, Burning Bridges was also submitted to the Appledash contest.  As cool as winning MIGHT be, I do not have much use for such a commission, so I kind of hope it doesn't.

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