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Words cannot express how sorry I am · 3:37am
They really can't. I know that there is absolutely no excuse to puck up and vanish for almost two months, and I am so unbelievably sorry.
I am still working on Immortality first and foremost, that story needs to be finished. I am also working my way through the next Her Mother's Daughter chapter as well as doing some other stuff on the side. However, and this is the major reason for my absence, these will essentially be written from scratch.
I accidentally deleted my entire Pony folder in gdocs when trying to save them to my hard drive, which lead to a minor mental breakdown as I sobbed my heart out, and screamed, in that order. So, while they are being worked on once more, they will take some time to begin posting again. I ask that for those of you, especially those of you still waiting for the conclusion of Immortality, to be patient for a little while longer, and I want to thank you for, well, as cliche as it sounds, for being there for me. Whether you know it or not, this really is the most important aspect of my life, its the only thing I have that is worth doing. I've kind of forgotten that lately, and I want to make up time. So thank you, for being there, and (hopefully) not finding out where I live, breaking down the door, and beating the living hell out of me for doing this to you.
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>>428235
kk i just ask once
sorry
>>427204
Umm, currently, on a break. Went to scout colleges this weekend, and have been catching up on schoolwork since. I should be able to get more done this week, maybe even finished. (cross your... Hooves? Wings?) SO LEAVE ME ALONE!!!
hey man, how's my request going?
I used to have life mauling me with a brick wrapped around a lemon, then I shot it.
>>235787
Chapter one introduced the basics of the setting and introduced the characters. The next is:
- Get them out of the cliffhanger situation.
- Get them through their first trip together.
- And come up with a reason for them to not go their separate ways as soon as the trip is over (cause then you would not really be able to tell a story about them together... unless something comes up that brings them back to each other soon after in terms of plot).
All in all I would say the story seems like one where the characters still need to find where they are going. I would give it five to seven chapters (two to three small adventures) before the first clues to a main plot line.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/43416/paraplexed-beta
>>235787 Well since you put this out in the open, and I happened to see this, I'll throw in my two bits.
It's rare that I come across a story that I instantly start liking entirely from the world (So far, the list includes just Hunting Rainbows, My Choices: Twisted Tales Through Time, and FoE), but you really are very good at world-building. No comments on the plot or characters yet, the story is still too early in.
I'd just suggest using the next chapter to primarily get them through the hunt they're on, and secondarily to start building their relationship with each other. Just get things written, and ideas will probably come to you. The long-term plot and structure can be worried about after the introduction is finished.
>>235787
I can't write (or plan) creatively for my life. So I can't help you there.
>>235646
THANK YOU *Glomp*
Somepony finally gets it. To be fair, a lot of that is because when I wrote Immortality, I...
Well, I would like to stroke my ego and say that now I am a much better writer. There actually is a hell of a lot of foreshadowing in Immortality, just like in HMD. But its foreshadowing for things that I later changed my mind about.
Ahem, on that note. You know, since I have you here, what do you think about Hunting Rainbows? And umm, where it should go next, because I have tried to write that next chapter about fifteen times.
>>235408
Probably because Immortality is, to be honest, not your style. It's almost the polar opposite of Her Mother's Daughter pacing wise, and it doesn't feel natural. The unpredictability comes off as forced because of lack of foreshadowing and causes the plot to feel aimless compared to Hunting Rainbows and HMD.