Time for an Update! · 12:19am
Hello everyone! Not too much going on right now. I am happy to announce that I'm really getting into my new Rainbow Dash story "Making the Rainbow Shine". It took a little time, but I'm really connecting with Rainbow Dash and the story has been moving along nicely. Currently I've got 4,496 words so far. Originally I thought that maybe this one-shot would reach 10,000 words. Well, after starting it, that estimate has gone up considerably. I'm now projecting a length of roughly 12,000-14,000 words, give or take a thousand.
I've started this story out a little differently than some of my other 2nd-person human x pony stories. This time I have a flash back in the beginning that shows you meeting "your" mare. I also include some brief back story (not as much as I did in "More Than Their Customer") but it should be enough to give you some idea about "your" relationship with Rainbow Dash as well as some of your experiences in Equestria. In addition to this little blurb, there will be little notes about your time in the pony world as the story goes on. I feel doing it this way will keep things flowing at a nice pace, rather than bombarding you with a huge chunk of back-story all at once.
One other thing this story has going for it is this. I think I've finally got a new approach for really spicing up my dialogue, so my characters sound more emotional as they talk. I was given some good advice in a comment on my new Twilight story "She Will Always Be Your Twilight", plus I've been reading some other stories on here, and getting some great ideas toward improving my dialogue. Now, I can't promise the cheesiness will leave their words, but hopefully the added emotion will help. Besides, I know many of you enjoy the excessive fluff of my love stories, otherwise, you wouldn't be here. lol
This new story should be a very good one when all is said and done. It has a similar storyline to that of "Her Gentle Hooves" in that there is a love scene near the beginning, as well as near the end. I'm also hoping to add a little more sensuality to the love scenes in this story. From the fan art of Rainbow Dash I've seen, I think she can pull off sensual in a very sexy way, and that's considering that she is quite the tomboy. Though one thing I'm tackling in this story (besides her - lol) is that even though she comes off as a dare-devil and a tomboy, that under all of that, there is a mare longing to be loved and treated right.
Well, before I go, I have some more Rainbow Dash art to share with you. Thanks as always for your support! Take care!
I love her "Come Hither" eyes in this pic!
To quote Sweetie Belle in this one - "I really like her mane!" Plus, Rainbow looks so beautiful, even though there is a strong anger in her eyes.
This one is titled - "Can I Sleep With You Tonight?"