What I'd like to do here is to see if anyone has any critical thoughts regarding Archives of the Friendquisition. Sometimes when I'm down in the fiction mines, I worry that I'm losing sight of some bigger writing principals. I get insecure like that. Is there anything you, as a reader or (if applicable) a fellow writer, have noticed in the entire story thus far, that you think I could improve on? More specifically:

Plot: Does anyone feel like the plot right now is confusing or incomplete? Does it feel slow or lacking momentum? Does anything feel "accidentally" unresolved. Obviously, it's a mystery-heavy part right now, so new revelations are always right around the corner, but does anything strike you as missing?

Characters: I'm really trying to "show, not tell" about my characters. The first step is to "not tell" you about them, which I think I'm doing okay with. But sometimes I feel like I'm forgetting to then actually do the "show" part. Which characters do you get a pretty clear characterization from? Do any of them seem bland, or too similar to one another? Am I overdoing anything? Does it seem like the action and plot are done in compliment to character development, or at its expense? I'm mostly concerned with the "mane 5" (Caballus, Roughshod, Mystic, Fyzzix and Hairtrigger), but thoughts on secondary characters are good too.

The comments I receive to the story are, of course, always welcome and encouraged. It's just that it feels like all the feedback I get is mostly praise (again, always welcome and encouraged), and sometimes specific praise, which is more useful. To me, specific critique is the most useful comment of all, so that's what I'm after here. I figure I have all you guys following me, so I might as well take advantage of you.

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That came out wrong. Just... uh... let me know what you're thinking.