I made changes to the final chapter of my first story to make the Cakes sound more desperate for their child; and also the last scene so it will definitively show a good reason of how long Pumpkin's sanity recovery will take. Thinks it seems better?
It definitely is. I'm starting it tommorrow if not today.
Your story is amazing I'm surprised it hasn't gotten more attention and as the ending goes... It's absolutely amazing, its sweet and sets it up for the sequel (which I hope is in development)
Abraham the 3rd
You were quite eager to find out how my first story ended.
So... what's your thoughts on the conclusion?
Somewhere beyond the sea..... Somewhere waiting for me.... my lover stands on golden sands and watches the ships that go sailing.....