Celestia assigns the Mane 6, Spike and Trixie to go find the Alicorn's Stone, a mystical object tha
NOTE: I, Bronyman1995, DID NOT write this. My younger brother, who is also a brony, wrote this by himself, and I'm doing him the favor of posting it here. Constructive criticizing is welcome, but remember, this is his first EVER story...so please be kind.
The rating is for action violence and language...the "Romance" tag is for the human characters.
Twilight Sparkle is a student under Princess Celestia who runs Princess Celestia's School for Gifted Filly's.
When Celestia hears news that Discord is looking for one called the Half-Blood Princess, Celestia assigns the Mane 6, Spike and Trixie to go find the Alicorn's Stone, a mystical object that may be able to defeat the evil Discord.
But when trying to escape some attackers, Twilight accidently teleports them to Earth. Now they must find a way to get home and stop Discord before he finds the Alicorn's Stone.
Obviously inspired by "Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows" by J.K. Rowling.
This is more of a parody of the "Harry Potter" franchise. No offense to any fans.
Twilight Sparkle rubbed her eyes and yawned. She looked around the room and then looked at her clock. 7:00, only an hour to class, plenty of time. she thought.
She walked down the stairs and looked through her bookshelf. She selected a book entitled History of Equestria. She levitated the book to the floor, sat down and flipped to the page she was looking for. The page told the story of how Celestia and Luna defeated Discord the first and how he might return one day to wreak havoc once again.
“Catching up on our reading now are we?” said a very melodic voice. Twilight zipped her head around to see Celestia herself.
“Oh!” she said as she put the book away. “Good morning, princess! I didn’t hear you come in.”
“Yeah, I should have knocked.” Celestia said. “Anyway, we have some new students and I was hoping you could teach them.”
Twilight couldn’t help but smile. She’d graduated from Celestia’s personal prodigy to teacher of young fillies. Total win.
“Of course!” Twilight said. “I would be honored.”
“Good.” Celestia replied. “See you in an hour.” With that, Celestia opened her wings and flew towards her castle. Twilight then closed the door and rushed upstairs to Spike’s side.
“Spike!” she yelled. “Come on! We got to eat breakfast now if you expect to get to school on time!”
Spike yawned and rubbed his eyes. He cracked his back and slouched slightly.
“Okay. Okay. Hang on.” Spike said groggily.
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In a deep forest many miles from Canterlot there sat a two-story mansion. An iron wall surrounded the house and above the gate a sign read “Azkaban Manor”.
About 70 years before Twilight was born (and you should know Celestia was at least 2,000 years old), Starswirl the Bearded first held classes for gifted fillies in his mansion. No one knows where the name Azkaban came from. Nonetheless, he decided to move to Canterlot and left his mansion to Zecora, an old friend of his.
Now that you know a little back-story on this house, let’s continue. In the dining room of the house, there was a creature sitting on the main chair.
The creature sitting in the front chair was a truly grotesque creature. It had the head of a pony, the tail of a crocodile, the right arm of an eagle and various other body parts of various animals. He was draconequis. He was Discord.
And he was relaxing…for now.
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In the courtyard of Celestia’s School for Gifted Fillies, four unicorn fillies were trying to levitate four heavy rocks.
“Remember,” Twilight said “focus.”
The filly’s focused real hard and the rocks started to levitate. One was only a few inches of the ground. Another was a little higher. The other lifted even higher (to about Twilight’s height). The other levitated a few feet higher.
“Okay, stop.” Twilight ordered. “Very good.” Three of them dropped their boulders but one still was trying to levitate hers higher (already it was about as high as Twilight).
“Um, that’s quite enough for today, Dinky.” Twilight politely said. “Put the rock down now.”
Dinky sighed a sigh of relief as she sat in the grass and the rock hit the ground.
“Now, then class…” Twilight said. “Shall we try cooking next?”
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Trixie scanned the room as she approached the throne room of Celestia. Celestia had called her for who knows what, but Trixie’s thoughts were interrupted by Celestia’s voice.
“Miss Trixie.” Celestia said. “I have another mission for you.”
“Yes, princess?” Trixie said.
“Your infiltration into Discord’s army has gone well so far.” Celestia said. “He thinks you are spying on me when you are giving all the info I need to track him and imprison him once more. Nevertheless, he bound to get suspicious. For you must get Discord to explain his plan to you. Though usually he does that himself.”
“Your majesty, I will not let you down.” Trixie said, with real enthusiasm in her voice.
“Good luck, my little pony.” Celestia said. Trixie wasted no time in rushing out the door and through the gate and to the direction of the forest.
Halfway through running, she transformed into a raven and flew off. It not only looked cool and was a fancy trick but it also helped her get to her destination faster.
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Trixie re-transformed into her normal self in mid-air. She landed comfortably on her feet and walked from there. Like a boss.
There, right in front of her, was the gate of Azkaban Manor. She knocked on the gate for entrance. The gate opened and a Diamond Dog porter stuck his head out.
“Why, Miss Trixie, what brings you here?” the dog said.
“May I see Mr. Discord at once?” Trixie said.
“Why yes! Why yes! Welcome back, Miss Trixie! Right this way. Hang on, let me open the door.” The gate opened and Trixie walked through towards the mansion.
The dog opened the door. It looked just how it was the last time she was there. Cobwebs were everywhere, there was a painting of Starswirl the Bearded on the wall and the hall had two statues of cats (Starswirl owned at least 10 of them) and a staircase.
She looked to her right and there was the dining room. At the 15 foot long table sat Discord with Zecora and several other creatures.
“Ah, Trixie, my dear” Discord said. “Come on, pull up a chair.”
She walked into the room and sat down on Discord’s left side.
“Okay, now to business” Discord said. “Now that our forces are stronger, we shall strike Celestia tonight! Our spy has informed me that the time is right. And the Half-Blood will be mine.” The crowd cheered.
“Um, excuse me” Trixie said as she raised her hand. “But I don’t think that’s a wise choice.”
Zecora suddenly stood up. “You know not what you do! Don’t question the master, you stupid fool!”
“Explain” Discord said, holding up a claw to silence the zebra.
“Well,” Trixie said, “I really don’t think this is the right time. Have you trained your forces?”
“Sorry,” Trixie said, “but if you don’t train them, you and your army will die tonight unless you prepare yourselves. If we are to take down the princess, we must train ourselves and we must eliminate any completion.”
“Hmm.” Discord thought. “You, the red dragon.” he said while pointing to a red dragon with a yellow underside.
“It’s Garble.” the dragon said.
“Whatever.” Discord said. “And you too, Zecora. Take note of this. The army will train for another week. Also, send some men to take out any possible resistance. Meeting adjourned.”
With that, Discord snapped his fingers and the creatures got up in unison. Trixie walked towards the door.
“Mrs. Trixie,” Discord said, making Trixie turn around. “I must be the one to kill Celestia.”
Trixie nodded. With that, she transformed into a crow and flew through a crack in a window.
Zecora watched as Trixie flew away in raven form. She then waited until everyone had left the room.
She whistled and a bat flew in and landed on her shoulder.
“Go, now the little friend” she said “and seal her end.”
The bat nodded and flew out the window and followed Trixie.
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Celestia had called Twilight, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Pinkie Pie and Fluttershy in her courtroom and she paced the floor. Suddenly a raven flew in and it transformed into Trixie.
“Ah, you’ve come back.” Celestia said as she wiped the sweat of her forehead. “What news?”
“The plan worked. He has gone to train his army for three days. This will give us time to prepare for his attack.” Trixie replied. “But there was something else.” The look on Trixie’s face changed to a very serious look.
“What?” Celestia asked.
“Well,” Trixie said, “he said ‘the Half-Blood will be mine.’ And something about a spy in your midst."
Celestia gasped like a soap opera star.
“Your majesty,” Fluttershy asked. “Who is the Half-Blood?”
Celestia sighed. “The Half-Blood Princess is a descendant of Discord. We don’t’ know that much about Discord’s family line. Apparently, he was young and somepony was foolish. I fear that it is one of you."
The ponies gasped.
"And with this spy in my household, the kingdom is more danger then ever.” Celestia said. “I need you to take this.” She levitated a box and opened it. Inside it was a necklace with the shape of a unicorn on it. It was the Alicorn’s Stone. “The Alicorn’s Stone is the thing that can perminanty stop Discord. Find him and use this against him.”
Oh my goodness. Twilight thought to herself. If I fail, all of Equestria is doomed. But I can’t back down. Not now.
“So, my friends” Celestia said again. “Will you deliever Equestria in her hour of need?”
Twilight looked up at the princess. “Upon my word…and upon my life.”
“May good fortune ocompany you on your journey.” Celestia said. “The fate of Equestria is in your hooves. And don’t worry about the students. Spike will take care of them while your gone.” No one noticed the bat flying away the minute she said that.
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Discord sat comfortably in his chair napping. He was having dreams of grandeur and all that stuff when suddenly he was awoken by a familiar voice.
“Master.” Zecora said. “There is a traitor in disguise.”
“I don’t want to hear it.” Discord said.
“Who has hid herself” Zecora replied “from prying eyes.”
As if on command, Discord suddenly jerked his head up and turned toward her with obvious anger in his face.
“WHO IS THIS SPY?!” Discord asked rather angrily.
“It is Trixie.” Zecora answered.
Discord eyes widened. He then proceeded to get out of his chair and teleport to the back of Azkaban Manor. Zecora then heard him faintly scream and then he teleported back to the room with full-fledged rage in his face and eyes.
“YOU LIE!” Discord yelled. The bat then flew in the room at sat on Discord’s shoulder
“No, it’s true. I saw it myself. She is working for Celestia.” the bat said.
"THAT’S…..” Discord said as he calmed himself down “…really stupid.” He then whistled and three Changelings appeared. “Trixie is working for Celestia. Find her and her friends and bring them to me.”
The Changelings nooded and flew through the roof, making three holes in it.
“They could have used the door.” Zecora pointed out. Discord then clamped her mouth shut.
“Shut up.” he said.
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The ponies were now far from Canterlot. The sky was growing dark as night approached. They had been walking (though it Rainbow’s case flying) for a while now.
“Is it nearby?” Pinkie Pie asked Trixie.
“Well, I don’t know.” Trixie replied. “It takes about three hours to fly there so I don’t know how many hours it takes to walk there.”
Pinkie just gave her a blank look.
“What? I’ve never walked there! Honest!” Trixie said.
“I believe you.” Pinkie said. “It’s just that…”
“Look there!” Rarity yelled pointing behind them all. The three Changelings Discord sent flew out of the forest and circled, ready to attack them from behind.
“Quick! Run!” Twilight yelled.
The ponies wasted no time in running like mad towards the forest. In the distance, the Changelings headed towards them firing beams of magic as they turned. Of cousre, we all know it’s harder to hit a moving target.
“Hang on!” Twilight yelled. “I’m going to try to teleport us out of here!”
“Hurry!” Rainbow Dash yelled.
Twilight Sparkle enganged her teleportation spell. As the spell started to take effect, the Alicorn’s Stone suddenly started to glow inside Twilight’s saddle bag. Suddenly the sky started to grey. Thunder roared.
Suddenly a beam of light shot of Twilight’s bag and headed towards the sky as a lightning bolt headed towards the ground. Both beams met and a light surronded the ponies.
The Changelings were blinded by the light and didn’t notice the ground. WHAM! They slammed into the mud of a nearby lake.
As for the ponies they shot up into the sky and the beam followed. Then, all was quiet.
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On an old English road, a van traveled down the road. On the vans side was “Wilfred and Kyle’s Countryside Tours”.
“You have very nice farm land.” said a brown-haired woman named Lily Benson. “Yes we do, Mrs. Benson.” Wilfred said (Wilfred was the driver). Next to Wilfred was his best friend Kyle, who was eating a Twinkie.
“Thank you for taking us on this tour, Wilfred.” Lily’s husband ichael said. “My pleasure.” Wilfred responded.
As Kyle finished his Twinkie he looked out the window. Sky looked cloudy but overall normal. Yeah, the tress looked good. The houses looked good. The storm clouds forming into a tornado looks good…wait.
“Oy, dude.” he said as he tapped Wilfred’s shoulder. “Look.” Kyle pointed towards the tornado.
“Huh.” Wilfred whispered. “That’s odd.” He then cleared his throat. “Hang on everyone, we’re taking a detour.”
Suddenly a flashing light blinded them for a few seconds. The van swerved but Wilfred re-gained control once he regained his sight. He turned towards the tornado and saw seven faint silouttes hit the ground. The tornado then went back into the sky and vanished.
Wilfred then drove the van towards the crash site only to be met by a rainbow colored pony slamming into the window.
The car stopped with a screech and the humans got out the car.
“What did we hit?!” Michael asked.
“How am I supposed to know?!” Kyle said.
Rainbow Dash got up and shook her head to get the dizzy-ness. She blinked her eyes to see Wilfred in her face.
“My word.” Wilfred said.
Rainbow, on the other hand, screamed and tackled him with a strange look that had both fear and anger.
“Who are you?!” Rainbow said. “Where am I?!”
“Whoa! Whoa, hey!” Wilfred said with a mix of fear and curiostiy. “Who are you?”
“Rainbow Dash!” Twilight Sparkle said faintly. The other ponies arrived and gasped when they saw the humans.
Rainbow calmed down and let Wilfred up. “My name is Rainbow Dash. That’s Twilight Sparkle, Applejack, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Rarity and Trixie.”
Kyle leaned towards Lily.
“Am I stoned?” he asked.
“No.” Lily replied with a slight annoyance in her voice. “Because I’m NOT, I’m seeing this too.”
“Okay.” Wilfred said as he tried to comprehend the fact that seven candy-colored ponies were standing in front of him. “I’m…I’m Wilfred. This is my best friend Kyle and these two are Michael and Lily Benson.”
“Y’all related?” Applejack asked.
“No.” Michael replied. “They’re showing us around England.”
“You mean ah road trip?” Applejack replied.
“Uh…yeah.” Kyle said. “Let’s go with that.”
“This is very kind of you.” Trixie said. “But we must be going.”
“Right.” Twilight said.
The ponies all stood in a circle and Twilight tried to use a teleportation spell, which caused the clouds to swirl again. Only this time a lightning bolt struck the center of the circle, startling everyone and making them fall over.
Twilight then zipped her head towards her bag. She opened it but couldn’t find the object she was looking for. She then turned towards everyone with a terrified look on her face.
“The…” she said. “The Alicorn’s Stone. It’s gone.”
Everypony gasped.
“The what?” Lily asked.
“Listen, ma’m,” Rarity said calmy. “It appears we are trapped here for the time being.Would you be so kind as to give us some shelter?”
The people just gave shocked looks. The ponies gave questioning looks.
“No. I’m sorry.” Michael said. “It’s just that you’re ponies. Talking. It’s just weird.”
“Okay,” Rainbow said “besides that fact can you give us a lift?”
The Bensons looked at Kyle and Wilfred. They looked at the ponies and then each other.
“I guess.” Wilfred said warily. “Get in.”
They headed to the van and the ponies followed. Fluttershy turned around and looked at the hillside.
“What are we going to do?” she whispered.
She proceeded to climb into the van with the others.
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Discord tapped his feet as the three mud-coated Changelings stood before him.
“So? She escaped, huh?” he said frustratingly.
“Yes.” one Changeling said.
“Please don’t kill us.” another one said.
“She tried to teleport and then poof! Gone!” the third Changeling said. “We tried to-”
“Wait!” Discord cut him off. “No pony can produce that kind of power. Unless…”
“Unless what?” a Changeling asked.
“OF COURSE!” Discord yelled. “The Alicorn’s Stone! What I need is to get where they are. But where?”
“I can help you.” Zecora said.
“How?” Discord asked.
The zebra walked toward him and motioned him to lean so she could whisper.
“Remember, my master” she whispered “when her majesty Lauren died? Celestia told her men to find her mother’s staff a good place to hide.”
Discord smiled. “Go on.”
“You see, the staff is powerful.” Zecora continued “Maybe as much as the stone, if you use it, you can strip Celestia to the bone.”
“What?” he asked. Zecora gave him an “oh come on” look.
“Use the staff to take over the country and kill the bitch.” she said.
“Oh.” he said. “You broke your rhyme.”
“I am capable of breaking my rhyme but most of the time I choose not to.” she answered.
“Okay.” Discord said. “And as for you three…” pointing directly at the three Changelings. “To the pit with you!”
He pushed a button, the floor under the Changelings opened and they fell through screaming. Yet a couple seconds later, one peeked his head up.
The pit was after all only four feet deep.
“Oh. Not so bad.” The Changeling said.
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Spike walked into the classroom that was packed with fillies.
“Good morning, class.” he said. “Since Miss Twilight is not here, I have been tasked by Celestia to teach you all.”
A little colt raised his hand. “Excuse me.”
“Yes, Truffle Shuffle?” Spike said.
“I was wondering” Truffle Shuffle said “why are we wearing Miss Pinkie Pie’s umbrella hats?”
Spike looked at the candle chandelers.
“Well” Spike said “it’s to protect your heads from being burned by the candle wax. Plus the designers of those were idiots.”
“Oh.” all the fillies said at once.
Spike rolled his eyes. “This is going to be a long day.”
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“You’ve never heard of Freddy Mercury?” Wilfred shocked at Rainbows’ question on the music they were hearing.
“No.” Rainbow said.
Wilfred facepalmed.
“So, where are we going?” Fluttershy asked.
“We’re going to…” Michael said when a logical question hit his mind. “Yeah, where are we going?”
Wilfred sighed. “I don’t know but there’s a town nearby where we can hide you guys.”
“Isn’t that kind of dangerous?” Pinkie Pie asked. “I mean the minute people see us they’re going to scream and hide their children and pull out guns and what not.”
“I have some handbags in the back.” Kyle piped up. “You could hide in those.”
Lily turned to him “Yeah, why do you have so many of those?”
“For safety reasons.” Kyle replied. “You never know when a zombie apocalypse will come. I’ve also got a cricket stick and a shovel.”
Everyone gave Wilfred a questioning look.
“He’s just like that.” he answered.
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At the London police station, Roland Carter and Jerald King walked into then room of Comisoner Victor Aaron.
“Sit down, boys.” he said in a very deep voice.
They sat down in two chairs.
“You called here, chief?” Roland asked.
“Yes I did.” Victor replied. “Apprently, reports are coming in from the countryside that a torando caused some aliens to invade the countryside. Roland, I need you and Jerald to go investigate these reports and see if they are valid.”
“Alright, chief.” Jerald said.
“Good, you are dismissed.” The two agents walked out.
The Bensons, Wilfred and Kyle walked into the hotel with their bags. At the desk sat a very old lady.
“Can I help you?” she asked.
“Yes, we’d like a room.” Michael replied.
“Alright.” the old lady said. “Names?”
Michael cleared his throat. “My name is Michael Benson. This is my wife Lily and these two gentlemen are Wilfred and Kyle.”
“You related?” the lady asked.
“No.” Lily said. Why does everyone ask that? she thought.
The lady then looked behind the group and saw their bags. They were awful big for bags she’d seen.
“What’s in there?” she asked.
Wilfred searched the room with his eyes. “You know. Nessceties.”
The lady shrugged. “Fair enough.” She reached into her pocket and pulled out two keys with room numbers on them.
“Here are you’re room keys.” she said, handing Michael and Wilfred the keys. “Enjoy your stay at the Shire Inn.”
They nodded and walked towards the elevator. The old lady returned to her book.
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Lily opened her suitcase as Michael was taking a shower and Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy and Trixie jumped out of the suitcase.
“Jeez, that was a tight fit.” Trixie said as she cracked her spine.
“Well, here you are.” Lily said as the ponies looked around the room. “Soft beds, a TV and room service.”
“Sounds lovely.” Fluttershy said.
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In the other room, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Rarity and Twilight got out of their packs. Rainbow flexed her wings and strecthed.
“Man” she said as she cracked her wings “that hurts.”
“Take a look around.” Wilfred said. “This is where your staying.”
They looked around.
“Kind of small.” Twilight Sparkle said.
“It’s a hotel room” Wilfred answered “not a mansion.”
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Spike walked through the hall while eating a sapphire stone. Suddenly a letter appeared in a puff of green smoke. He picked it up and read it. His eyes widened and he quickly grabbed a pen out of hammerspace and wrote down his response.
He then breathed fire and the letter vanished. As he turned Dinky appeared. He gasped.
“Mr. Spike” she asked “who was that?”
“It was Celestia.” he replied.
“Oh, okay.” she said. She then galloped away.
He sighed and followed her.
Back to hell he thought.
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At the landing site, Roland and Jerald got out of their car and stood in the spot where the lightning struck last night. Roland leaned down and put some dirt in his hands. He then rubbed it.
“Still warm.” he said.
“Wait, look!” Jerald said, pointing nearby.
Roland looked, saw what he was pointing at, and was surprised. Tire tracks. From a van. He then pulled out his phone and dialed the police.
“Chief” he said “I’ve got some new evidence. Apparently, they have hitchhiked a van or have accomplices. I’m going into the next town to get more evidence.” He hung up.
“Let’s go.” Jerald said.
The two men got in their squad car and drove towards town.
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Wilfred drove up to a house and pulled over. He opened the door to let the ponies out and they walked towards the house.
“So, this is where were staying?” Rarity asked.
“Yes.” Wilfred said. “I know the owner.” He knocked on the door.
The door opened slightly to reveal a very pretty brown-haired woman.
“Hey, Amanda.” Wilfred said.
“Oh.” Amanda replied. “Hey, Wilfred. Nice to see you again.” She opened the door all the way and saw the seven ponies.
“Hi.” Pinkie Pie said.
Amanda screamed and slammed the door shut.
“Wait!” Wilfred said as the door cut him off. He turned to the ponies. “Wait here.” he walked inside the house.
It was a nice two story house with a straight-stair case and nice furniture.
“Wilfred, is that you?” Amanda asked from behind the kitchen.
“Yes.” he answered.
She then walked out of the kitchen with a frying pan in her hands. She looked at him, then the frying pan and then put the pan down.
“Sorry” she said. “You can bring them in.”
Wilfred then proceeded to open the door and the ponies walked in.
“Hi, again!” Pinkie Pie said.
Amanda blinked.
“Okay” Twilight said “I’m Twilight Sparkle. This is Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, Rarity and Trixie.”
“I was wondering if they could stay here until we find a way to get them back to….” Wilfred stopped. “where are you from again?”
“Equestria.” Trixie said.
“Yeah, what she said.” Wilfred said as he turned to Amanda.
Amanda thought about this. “Well…alright.” she finally said.
Wilfred shook her hand. She blushed slightly.
“Are you okay?” he asked.
“Yeah, I’m fine.” she said.
Wilfred blinked then headed to the door and as he opened it turned around “I’m staying at the hotel if you need me, alright?”
“Alright.” Amanda responded.
He shut the door, got in his car and drove off.
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It was 10:00. Lily sighed and lay down next to Michael and she kissed him on the cheek.
“What if Twilight’s right?” she asked “what if one of them is a spy?”
Michael sighed. “I don’t know.”
A knock came from the door.
“Come in!” the two said simultaneously. Wilfred walked in.
“Dropped them off a while back, had a bite then came back.”
“Who’d you leave them with?” Michael asked.
“A friend of mine, Amanda Joyce.” Wilfred replied.
“Oh okay.” Michael said.
Wilfred then sat on the bed.
“What’s on TV?”
Michael flicked the TV on.
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Discord looked at Zecora as she brought a box in.
“How is this supposed to help me take over Equestria?”
“It’s not to” the zebra answered “it’s to find and kill this Half-Blood and her friends.” With that she opened the box.
Suddenly smoke came out of the box. But unlike normal smoke, this kept it’s form. The smoke separated as it changed into bats, crocodiles, ravens, wolves and horses. The smoke monsters then opened their eyes and mouths. Both were the color of fire.
“These are my shadow monsters.” Zecora said. “They can go to places nopony can and they do the job faster.”
The things growled.
“Impressive.” Discord said.
“Go, find the Half-Blood and her friends and kill them.” Zecora said.
The creatures roared as they headed into the sky and then teleported, well, up.
Amanda sighed as she sat on a chair by the window and saw Wilfred drive off.
“I saw that.” a voice said.
Amanda gasped as she turned around to see Rarity. She sighed a sigh of relief.
“What do you mean?” she asked.
“The way you blushed when he shook your hand, the way just now sighed. Your in love with him.” Rarity replied.
Amanda did some searching with her eyes then sighed an embarrassed sigh.
“Yes” she finally said “I am. I don’t know I just feel so secure around him.”
“What would your husband think?” Rarity asked.
“I have no husband.” Amanda replied. “At least, not anymore.” It took a few seconds for the gears to turn in Rarity’s head. “Oh. I see. Died?” she asked. Amanda nodded. “Well, has Wilfred friend zoned you? If not it’s not that big-”
“Don’t say that!” Amanda cut her off “you know nothing of the friend-zone!” she calmed down. “Sorry. But hey, you apprently have dealt with this before. You have to help me.”
Rarity thought about this. Hmm, a little weird but she seems to be telling the truth. Time for those lessons from mother to pay off. She cleared her throat. “Okay, first of all, ask him if he’d like to go out with you.”
“Um, shouldn’t he ask me?” Amanda logically asked.
“Well, not this time.” Rarity responded. “If you don’t act no you’ll be eternally friend-zoned.”
“Okay.” Amanda said as she cleared her throat. “I’ll ask him out tomorrow.”
Rarity tapped her on the shoulder as if to say That a girl.
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The next morning the old lady at the desk was busy reading a magazine when Roland and Jerald walked in.
“Can I help you?” the lady asked.
“Yes, my name is Roland Carter. This my partner Jerald King. We’re from the police.”
Suddenly the lady dropped her magazine with a look of fear on her face.
“Did I do something wrong?!” she asked.
“No, madam” Jerald replied “we’re looking for the blue van in this picture we got from an eyewitness. Have you seen it?”
The lady looked at the picture. “Well, I saw one drive into our parking lot. But I don’t know who owns it. It’s certainly not mine.”
“Thank you for your cooperation, Miss...” Roland said.
“It’s Judy. Judy Crane.” the lady responded.
The two officers blinked in surprise.
“Well, thanks anyway Miss Crane.” Jerald said, stiffing back the urge to laugh.
The two officers walked towards the door.
“Now what?” Jerald asked.
“We find the blue van.” Roland responded “There can’t be that many.”
Oh, they were so wrong.
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The shadow creatures arrived to Earth and hid behind a tree. Their entrance to Earth had caused a muffled boom sound. A farmer then came out of his house.
“Hello?!” he yelled “Any more of you aliens out there?” The farmer looked around. “Alright then.” he said as he lost interest.
“Meredith, when’s tea?” he asked as he went inside the house.
The creatures then slid unto the street and quietly made their way towards town.
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Wilfred, Michael, Lily and Kyle walked out of the elevator and towards the hotel door.
“Morning, ma’mm.” Kyle said.
The old lady just nodded, intrigued by her magazine.
The four people rushed out the door and headed towards their van.
Suddenly, Kyle stopped them. “Look!” he whispered. They looked.
Sure enough, Roland and Jerald were looking into a blue van (not theirs of course).
“Jeez!” Jerald said faintly “how many blue cars are there?”
Actually there were six blue normal cars, one blue truck and at least ten blue vans. Wilfred and Kyle’s was the tenth van. Roland and Jerald were on number seven.
The group slowly backed away and hid behind a black truck. After five more minutes, they heard footsteps.
“We’ll check back later.” Roland said. They headed towards their police car which was parked near a hedge. They drove off.
“Okay, go!” Michael said.
They ran towards the van as fast they could. The got in with lightning speed and drove off likewise. Wilfred turned to the street that lead to Amanda’s house.
“Right.” Wilfred said out of breath. “Let’s go to Amanda’s. How ‘bout that?”
“Seems legit.” Lily said.
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A few minutes later they stepped out of the car and knocked on Amanda’s door. When the door opened, a little girl with brown hair awnswered it.
“Oh, hey Grace.” Kyle said. (Grace was Amanda’s daughter.)
“Hey.” Grace responded. “You looking for mum?”
“Yes.” Michael said “Is she home?”
Grace shook her head. “Off teaching.”
“Alright then.” Lily said. “Oh, how are your guests?”
“Fine.” Grace answered “the rainbow ones kind of messy though.”
“Well, see you later then.” Kyle said.
“Right.” Grace shut the door.
“So, where is she?” Lily asked as they headed to the car.
They got in.
“At the university.” Wilfred said. “I heard she teaches mythology.” The van drove in that direction.
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Twilight was in Amanda’s room writing on a piece of paper.
So far, the people we have taken up residence with are kind people. We pretty much have house to ourselves. Our tenants daughter is rather playful though a little weird. A trait her and her mother share.
Her writing was cut off by Rainbow Dash whooping at a soccer game on the TV. Twilight walked towards the staircase and leaned down.
“Rainbow Dash!” she yelled.
Rainbow flew over. “What?”
“Keep it down.” Twilight asked.
Rainbow rolled her eyes. “Yeah, yeah, I’ll try.” She flew towards the couch. “Oh come on, my grandmother can play better then you!” she yelled.
“Back to my studies.” Twilight said.
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Wilfred and Kyle walked through the hallway of the university until they heard Amanda’s voice. They headed towards her door and heard through the wood.
She was giving a rather interesting talk about some legend about St. George and the dragon. The bell rang before she could finish her talk. The door opened and students flooded out.
Wilfred and Kyle pinned themselves against the wall. The students didn’t seem to notice. They were busy talking about video games, hair, nails, the latest movie buzz and all that stuff.
Finally, the two peeked into the room. Amanda sat down and sighed.
“Hello.” Wilfred said. Amanda turned and looked at him.
“Hello.” she responded while twiddling her fingers. “What are you doing here?” she asked.
“We wanted to know where you were.” Wilfred responded.
“Oy” Kyle said “is there a soda machine?”
Amanda pointed down the hall. Kyle was off in a flash.
“You coming with us?” Wilfred asked.
“Sure.” Amanda said. “Just let me get my things.” Alright, she thought to herself, it’s either now or the friend-zone. She cleared her throat. “Wilfred?” she asked.
Wilfred turned around. “Yes?”
“Well” she said “I was thinking you and me could have dinner at a restaurant. Alone?”
Wilfred blinked. Did she just ask me out? he thought. Wait, play it cool. “Yeah, alright.” he finally said and he closed the door.
Amanda then dropped into the chair. “Yes!” she said. With that she picked up papers. Then she opened a drawer in her desk and pulled a necklace with the shape of the unicorn on it and stuffed it in her purse.
At the school, it was nearing early evening and all the students had left. The teachers were busy collecting their things and headed out. At Canterlot Castle, though something was amiss.
In a room in the castle sat a coffin. The moon shone brightly through a window. Suddenly something black leaked through one of the cracks in the wall into the room. The black mist then transformed into a hodded figure.
It then proceeded to remove the top of the coffin. There, inside it was Queen Lauren. Or what was left of her anyway. And there right beside her was her staff.
The figure reached in and gently grabbed the staff, making sure not to make to much noise. It then proceeded to close the coffin quietly. It was just about to leave when a flashlight lit it up.
“Halt!” the guard said. “Identify yourself!”
Suddenly the figure turned around and ignited the staff. Before the guard could yell or do anything, a beam of red magic flew out from the staff and disintergrated the guard.
All that was left was a patch of burnt ground and some blood on the wall.
The figure then returned to smoke form and went through the crack it came in.
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Amanda quietly brushed her hair and put on her earings. She walked down the stairs and looked towards the ponies who were watching a movie on the TV.
“I’m heading out.” she said.
“That’s nice.” Rainbow Dash said, totally immersed in the movie as were Grace and the other ponies.
Amanda just turned around and walked out the door where Wilfred was sitting in his car waiting. She then got in the passenger seat and they drove off.
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“Well, gentelman” Victor said to Roland and Jerald “that’s all the evidence you have?”
“Yes, sir.” Roland said.
Victor glanced back at the pictures and evidence. “So far, you’ve done well. But we need to catch these accomplasyes. Go back to that hotel and see if they return.”
“Understod, sir.” Jerald said. The officers walked out and headed towards their car.
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At the resturant, Wilfred and Amanda were enjoying some nice spagetti.
“Good food.” Wilfred said.
“Yes.” Amanda replied.
“So, is this a date?” Wilfred asked.
Amanda took a bite of her food. “Well, yes, isn’t it?”
They were both quiet for a minute.
Wilfred’s cough broke the silence. “So, how is Grace doing after…you know.”
Amanda knew what he meant. “She’s been doing fine. Still misses him but she’s fine.”
A waiter interupted their talk. “Can I get you anything else?”
“Some more water please.” Amanda replied.
“Alright.” the waiter said. He walked away.
“So, who’s the teaching job going?” Wilfred asked.
“It’s going good. I’ve only had to send two students to detention.” Amanda replied. “How have you been doing?”
“I’ve been doing good.” Wilfred answered. “I’ve got pictures, hang on.” he said as he reached into his pocket. He looked into his pocket. Nothing. So he looked towards his other pocket as he reached into it.
During this breif interuption, Amanda decided to make her move. She leaned towards Wilfred to kiss him when he poked his head up.
Moment ruined.
“What are you doing?” Wilfred asked.
Amanda slid back into her chair. “Nothing.” she answered.
“Alright.” Wilfred said suspiciously as he showed her his wallet full of pictures.
“Damn it.” she whispered.
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As the movie on TV ended, Grace went into kitchen to re-heat some leftover pizza from her and her mother’s dinner last night. The ponies got up from the sofa.
“That movie was weird.” Pinkie said.
“Yeah, they have schools for wizards?” Twilight said “Who the hell would make a school for wizards? It makes no sense. The police would be hunting you down.”
“And the costumes were just horrendous.” Rarity said.
Grace was standing by the microwave, tapping her foot. She looked around the kitchen. It was a nice kitchen with white tiles, cabinets and a yellow wall. It had a big, grey fridge with a creepy bat shadow under it.
Wait a minute.
She double taked but the second time she looked the shadow was gone.
It must be the movie. She thought. Just my imagination.
She walked out into the living room but didn’t notice the shadow was hanging on the kitchen wall. It slid down the wall into a soda bottle. It would have been fine if Fluttershy hadn’t been thirsty.
She poured the soda into the cup. She was just about to take about a sip when the thing decided to do something it was good at: possesion.
The thing flew out of the cup before Fluttershy could do anything and she fell flat on her back spilling the soda. The noise caused everybody else to run towards her.
“Fluttershy, are you okay?!” Rainbow Dash asked. Fluttershy blinked. Suddenly, she shoved Rainbow to the ground.
“How did she?!” Rainbow asked in surprise.
Fluttershy suddenly growled. “Give me the half-blood, little one.” she spoke in a frightning semi-demonic voice.
Everybody gasped.
“Give her to me!” Fluttershy repeated.
“No!” Applejack said. She threw her lasso at Fluttershy but she flew up and clinged to the wall like a gecko. She then let go and landed on Applejack. It hurt. A lot.
“Hey!” Rainbow Dash said. She launched herself at Fluttershy but Fluttershy flipped and made sure her back hoof hit Rainbow in the jaw.
It did. And Rainbow flew out the kitchen window.
Everybody left backed away.
Fluttershy growled angrily. “Let the half-blood come to me now or you all shall perish!” she roared.
It’s must be me. Twilight thought as she remembered what Celestia said about it being “one of them” It wants me.
Twilight started to walk forward. Fluttershy gave an evil smile.
“A wise choice, little one.” Fluttershy said.
Trixie suddenly jumped on Twilight.
“Trixie!” Twilight said.
“No, don’t!” Trixie said.
“But it’s me she wants! Remember, Celestia said it was one of us!” Twilight yelled.
“But it’s not you!” Trixie responded “It’s me!”
Everybody’s jaw dropped. Even possed Fluttershy was surprised.
“Wait!” she yelled “YOU’RE the Half-Blodd Princess?! And you never told me this before we got stuck in this situation?!”
Everybody glared at Trixie. She blushed and smiled embarrisingly. Suddenly, Fluttershy grabbed a knife and jumped on Trixie.
“Prepare to die, half-blood.” she said with an evil smile on her face.
Suddenly she felt something hard hit the back of her head. She turned towards her attacker with siliva dripping angrily from her mouth as if there was food being placed in front her face.
Grace had thrown a food tray to see if they could get the spirit…thing out of Fluttershy.
Suddenly, she flew towards Grace with full-fledged rage in her eyes. Grace ducked and Fluttershy slammed into the counter, spilling all the dishes. Fluttershy twisted in the air before she hit the fridge and turned her attention to Trixie.
And then…frying pan to the face. The shadow thing left it’s host and flew through the wall. Fluttershy limply fell to the ground.
“Frying pan.” Pinkie Pie said “Always works.”
Fluttershy shook her head and blinked her eyes. “What…what happened?” she asked in her normal voice.
Everybody sighed with relief.
Suddenly the shadow creature burst through a window, breaking a lamp. The bulb short-circuted and set fire to the rug. Applejack poured her soda on it.
The thing growled. “Now” the thing said “you will all die.”
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Wilfred’s car stopped at her house. They walked towards her doorstep.
“Well, good night.” Wilfred said.
“Yeah” Amanda said “I had a nice time. Good night.” she then leaned towards Wilfred and kissed his cheeck.
Wilfred blinked in suprise as Amanda sorted through her purse to find her keys. She did and opened the door.
Suddenly Grace and all seven ponies burst out screaming.
“Mrs. Joyce!” Applejack yelled “Run!”
“Why?!” Amanda asked.
The answer came a few seconds later.
The shadow monster burst through the door and floated above them.
“Shall we run for our lives?” Wilfred asked.
“Oh yes, let’s.” Grace responded.
Everybody screamed and headed towards the van. They drove like mad towards the hotel. Behind them the shadow whisteled and the other shadow monsters followed.
“Drive faster!” Amanda yelled.
“I am!” Wilfred yelled.
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Michael and Lily were fast asleep and Kyle turned off the TV.
All they’d been doing since yesterday. Wacthing TV.
He turned it off and got ready to go to his room. As he opened the door he turned around to look at the sleeping couple.
Such nice people. He thought.
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The shadow things pursued the van in the most bizarre manner. Many of them dove into cars and the cars either exploded or flipped over. Or both.
The street cracked as they pursued the van.
“Do you see the hotel?!” Rainbow Dash yelled.
“Yes!” Wilfred said “the lights are still on!”
Everybody looked at him dryly.
“How else was I supposed to find it?!” he yelled.
A horse shaped shadow monster pulled the trunk door of the van clean off and it rolled through the street.
“Stay back!” Twilight yelled. She blasted a beam of magic at the creature. The blast hit the creatures head and the head flew clean off and the thing bleeded lava.
The headless horse hit the ground and evaporated. Twilight realized what she’d done.
“Quick!” Twilight yelled “Rarity, Trixie! Lower the seats!”
They did just that.
Twilight jumped on the seats and started blasting at the creatures. For every hit there were five misses but most of the creatures were annihaliated. The only one left was the bat from the house. It growled feriociously and spun in the air.
“Prepare to die!” Twilight yelled. She fired and the thing was hit directly in it’s heart.
The creature growled in pain and hit the ground evaporating like the others.
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The van drove up to the hotel and pulled into the parking lot. Everyone got out and headed for the hotel. What they didn’t notice was the police car.
“Is that them?” Jerald asked.
“Oh yes” Roland said as he lowered in binoculers “they’re the ones.”
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Amanda, Grace and Wilfred walked in. The ponies quietly crouched down on the floor. The group walked past Judy Crane who was too busy watching a TV show.
“Evening.” she said totally ignoring everyone. Suddenly, she caught a reflection of Rainbow Dash on the TV screen. She turned to the elevator but the door had already closed.
She shook her head and returned to her TV show.
“No, Rodrick! No!” Judy said as something important happened.
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As the elevator opened on the third floor, Wilfred, Grace and Amanda headed towards their rooms. Wilfred into his room and Amanda and Grace headed into Lily’s room.
Wilfred sighed as he slammed the door shut. Kyle turned towards him.
“Hey, dude. How’d it go.” Kyle asked.
“Uh, yeah. Went well.” Wilfred said “Can’t talk. Evil monsters after us.”
“It’s true!” Amanda yelled muffled by the wall.
“But at least we’re safe.” Wilfred said.
“We’ll be hiding in the bathroom in case someone comes.” Pinkie Pie said.
“Fine.” Kyle said.
The ponies went into the bathroom.
“So, what’s on the TV?” Wilfred asked.
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In the bathroom the ponies looked back to Trixie.
Oh yeah. Trixie thought as she remembered what transpired at the house.
“What is going on?” Twilight said “and I want the truth.”
Trixie sighed. “Alright. Before you were born, I had an afiar with your father.”
Twilight’s jaw dropped while all the other ponies gasped.
“You mean I’m the illiginamte child of you and my dad?!” Twilight yelled.
Trixie blinked. “What?!” she said surprised “No! What is wrong with you?!”
Twilight blushed. “Well, sorry. Continue.”
“Okay” Trixie said “I fell in love with your father. We dated for a little while and kissed only once. But then your father met your mother and well, we broke up. Then, your mother died when you were little and he secretly asked me to guard you and take care of you. What he didn’t know was that my great, great, great, great, great grandmother was Discord’s…um…girlfriend.”
Rainbow Dash looked at Pinkie Pie with confusion. Pinkie Pie shrugged.
“Anyways, I got a job at Celestia’s School for Gifted Filly’s and Celestia appointed me to be a spy. I had already told her who I was, the half-blood. It is my fault we are in this situation.”
Trixie turned her back to the other ponies and cried softly. Twilight then put her hand on Trixie’s shoulder.
“Trixie” she said “it’s okay. Okay, so you dated my dad and apprently you’re my guardian. But you saved me from that spirit back at Amanda’s house. You saved me from Celestia knows what. And for that, I thank thee.”
“As do we.” Rarity piped up.
Trixie turned and sighed with relief.
“Besides” Applejack said “it can’t get any worse.”
“I’m from the police. Reports are coming in from the countryside and we suspect your harboring aliens.” Roland answered.
Kyle laughed. “Aliens? Really? You must be joking.”
“Yeah” Wilfred said nerviously “nothing here but us nerds.”
You’ve got to be kidding Roland thought to himself.
Suddenly, Jerald came up behind him.
“Nothing in the next door room.” He said.
“Mind if we look in here?” Roland asked.
Wilfred was about to say something but then he remembered Never try to out talk the police.
“Fine” Wilfred finally said.
The two officers walked right in the room. Jerald looked through the main room whilst Roland headed towards the bathroom. He opened the door and pointed his gun. Nothing.
He then pulled the shower curtain back and sure enough….nothing. He looked up towards the wall. Same there.
He sighed and walked out. “Nothing. You?” Roland asked Jerald.
“Sorry.” Jerald said.
As they walked out the door Roland turned to Wilfred and Kyle.
“We’ll be back, okay?” he said.
“Sure.” Kyle said.
“Yeah, no problem.” Wilfred said.
The cops shut the door and headed for the elevator.
“Back to the house?” Jerald asked.
“Yeah.” Roland replied.
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Twilight ceased her invisibility spell and the ponies became visible. They sighed sighs of relief.
“Are they gone?” Fluttershy asked through the door she was cautiously opening. She saw Wilfred and Kyle packing furiously.
“Yes” Wilfred said “but the police will be back so we got to hit the road now!”
He pointed towards the suitcases. “Get in!” he said.
The ponies shuddered at the thought of going back in their suitcases.
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Judy Crane snored heavily as Wilfred, Kyle, Michael, Lily, Amanda and Grace rushed towards the door.
They had made sure the cop car had left. They left, got in the van and headed in the other direction: towards the forest.
Judy Crane awoke just as the van left.
“I didn’t do it!” she yelled. She looked around and went back to sleep.
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Roland peeked through the binoculars as the van headed to town.
“They’re heading out of town toward the forest.” He said.
“Do we go after them?” Jerald asked.
“No.” Roland replied “we need backup.”
He picked up a phone.
“Chief” he said “I’ve got them.”
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The van had stopped in a field nearby the road and everybody was busy getting ready for bed. The ponies got out of the suitcases and were stretching. Amanda tapped Wilfred on the shoulder.
“Wilfred” Amanda said softly “can I talk to you?”
“Sure.” Wilfred replied.
They walked outside the trailer.
“You see…I…I…” she started to say. Oh, I can’t stand this! she thought.
Without warning she turned towards Wilfred and kissed him. In that moment it was just her and the love of her life. Alone. She then broke the kiss and turned her back towards him.
“I’m sorry, Wilfred.” Amanda said “it’s just...you remind of my husband. And….I love you.”
Amanda sighed disappointingly and was about to turn around when Wilfred put his hand on her shoulder.
“Amanda” he finally said “I have to say…I do think you’re very pretty…”
Amanda’s face lit up. “You do?” she said with hope in her voice.
“Well” Wilfred said “yes. I do like spending time with you. And I love you.”
So he returned the favor and kissed her back.
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At Azkaban Manor, Discord and Zecora waited. Sure enough the smoke from the castle came and turned into a figure.
The figure gave Discord the staff and Discord smiled like a kid in a candy store.
“At last…it is mine.” he said in a very creepy voice. “You had no trouble, did you?”
The figure smiled evilly.
“No problem at all.” Spike said.
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The van traveled down the road as the sun rose. The human were busy listining to a good song while the ponies were discussing their plans.
“How do you think London will be?” Twilight Sparkle asked.
“I must see the crown jewels” Rarity said “they must sparkle like the best fire rubies.”
“I don’t think we’ll have time to enjoy it.” Trixie pointed out “The other humans will fear us. And that fear will turn to hatred.”
The ponies decided to relax. Besides, no police had followed them or seen them.
Except for the cop car hiding in the brush on the side of the road.
“Suspects traveling on highway bound for London” Roland said “should I follow?”
“Wait ‘till there out of sight.” Victor Aaron said on the other side of the phone.
The van then disappeared over the horizon. The car started, drove out of the ditch and followed.
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Discord gathered his hundreds of Changelings, diamond dogs, dragons and various other animals around him.
“Now it is dawn.” Zecora said with pride in her voice. “Let the circle be drawn.”
A werewolf walked up and unsheathed his sword and jabbed it into the dirt. He walked in a circle around Discord forming, well, a circle.
Discord walked in it’s center, closed his eyes, sighed and spoke some gibberish. He then stabbed the staff in the circle’s center.
A few seconds later the clouds swirled and lightning cracked. The wind hollowed powerfully.
Suddenly a bolt of lightning headed towards the staff then a red beam of magic shot up from the staff and the two energies collided in mid-air.
A they contacted, a bright light surrounded Discord, Zecora, Spike and the other creatures. They all suddenly shot up into the sky with the beam. The staff was taken as well.
Then silence.
All that was left was some burnt ground and Zecora’s cloak.
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“How could we run out of gas?!” Michael asked.
“I don’t know.” Kyle answered “Bloody thing died on us.”
“Hey, look behind us!” Lily yelled.
Roland and Jerald’s police car came up right next to the van.
“Oh good the cops! We can report this!” Amanda said.
“Freeze!” Roland said as he got out of the car and him and Jerald pointed their guns. “Your under arrest!”
Amanda, Michael, Lily, Kyle, Wilfred and Grace all sat in a room waiting for Victor Aarons to arrive. Amanda quietly tapped her foot.
Then the door opened and Victor stepped in. He sat in the desk in front of them.
“Okay, let me explain why you’re here.” Victor said. “For the past two days, it’s been reported that your van might be containing aliens. See this?”
He showed them a photo of the portal where the ponies came in.
“This was taken by a farmer nearby the location.” Victor said. “Are you or are you not harboring aliens?”
Amanda thought about this but before she could say anything Lily spoke up.
“Mr. Victor Aaron, is it?” she said “we did indeed find some things but we have no idea what they are. They said something about an Alicorn’s Stone and wanting to go home. So if you’d be so kind as to let us go…”
Victor put his hand up to shut Lily up. Bitch he thought let me talk.
“I see.” he said. “Very well then, you are free to go. But we’ll still be on the lookout for your friends.”
“Alright, sir.” Grace said.
The group got up to walk out.
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They walked out of the ploice station when they heard someone whispering.
“Hey, over here.” the voice said.
Everybody looked towards the place where the voice was coming from. A dark ally.
“Wait.” Amanda said “who are you?”
The source of the voice poked it’s head out.
“Twilight Sparkle?” Grace said almost yelling.
Twilight wisely shushed her.
“Come here, quick.” Twilight whispered. So that’s what they did.
“Okay, we can get y’all out of here.” Applejack said “Twilight can teleport us somewhere else.”
“But Twilight!” Rarity said “the crown jewels!”
Twilight glared at her. “Okay” Twilight said “here it goes.”
Twilight’s horn lit up with purple light. Suddenly everyone vanished in a flash of light.
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The group finally landed, only to be met a double-decker bus just barley missing them. The driver honked his horn.
“What the bloody hell is wrong with you?!” he yelled.
“You idiot!” Rainbow Dash said “We’re in the middle of the street!”
Everyone screamed when Rainbow spoke.
One person yelled “Call the police!”
Twilight wasted no time in teleporting them somewhere else.
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In the middle of the woods, a tornado formed above the canopy. Then with a flash of light, Discord, Zecora, Spike and several hundred creatures landed (loudly breaking some trees in the process).
Everybody shook the dust of them and Discord made sure the staff was right next to him.
“Now that we’re in the right place” he said “let’s find them.”
He whisteld and a huge silver dragon came forward. The creature had bright yellow eyes, spikes and claws.
“Find them and bring them to me.” Discord said.
The dragon nodded and flapped his wings. He soon was above the forest and flying in the direction of London.
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A flash of light brightned the room as the ponies and humans entered. Everybody brushed themselves off and looked around.
It was apprently a living room with walls, floor, shelves and table made out of wood. It was a cottage.
“Where are we?” Amanda asked.
“We are in a cottage in the country.” Trixie answered. “We’ll be safe here for the meantime. You can see the city you call London from a distance.”
Pinkie Pie meanwhile was looking for something to do. She then noticed something. On the wall near the kitchen door was a key.
Actually, there were two.
She took the closet key and found a door at the end of the house. She twisted the key through the door and opened the door. What she saw something that caught her eye.
It was a motorcycle with two passenger seats. And on a work desk was another pair of keys.
“Hey, guys!” Pinkie Pie yelled “I found our ticket out of here!”
Everybody rushed towards the room and saw the bike.
“Can we all fit in that?” Grace asked.
Suddenly a familiar voice yelled, “This is the police! Come out with your hands up!”
“I say we get in.” Kyle said.
Everybody squeezed into the motorcycle (Grace had to sit on her mothers lap) and they turned it towards the garage door.
“Pinkie Pie” Rarity said “why do you have fireworks?”
“You’ll see.” Pinkie Pie responded.
Rarity shook her head. Typical Pinkie she thought.
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The police had their guns drawn. Victor Aaron approached the garage door with Roland and Jerald behind him.
“I’m not repating myself!” Victor yelled through a megaphone “Come out now!”
Suddenly the motorcycle broke through the door and the blockade of police cars and headed down the road.
“Follow them!” Victor yelled.
The police followed and turned on their sirens.
“Quick, flip the motorcycle over!” Pinkie Pie yelled.
“WHAT?!” Michael (who was driving) yelled.
“Just do it!” Pinkie Pie yelled back.
Sure enough, Michael took a deep breath and turned the motorcycle as if it was to flip over.
Pinkie wasted no time in taping the rockets to the bottom of the motorcycle and lit them on the fire. The fireworks lit up and the motorcycle shot into the sky at lightning speed.
The police cars all stopped.
“What the heck?” Roland said in surprise.
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A news helicopter had been recording the arrest and was high above the house.
“Yes” the reporter said “just now the ploice are surroding the voice. And-wait! A motorcycle has just rolled out of the garage. And now the driver is turning the motorcycle on it’s front wheel and…whoa!”
The motorcycle flew right next to the helicopter just barley missing it.
“It just flew past us!” the reporter yelled.
He then motioned follow them and the helicopter turned to follow them.
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Pinkie Pie was having the time of her life. Up in the sky. Flying.
Nobody else was.
“Oh my goodness!” Fluttershy yelped. “Oh my goodness!”
“Oh relax” Rainbow Dash said “this is fun!”
“So, why are we flying?” Lily asked.
Pinkie stopped whooping.
“Gee, I don’t know.” Pinkie said “Just looked like fun at the time.”
Lily face-palmed.
The news helicopter was hot on their tail and filming all of this.
“It looks like…five people and seven candy-colored ponies…,” the reporter said trying to contain the total bizzare-ness of the situation.
“Hey, whats’ that?” The pilot said.
Something was coming in the distance. Wasn’t flying to fast but it was closing. The shape then became visible first to the motorcycle crew.
“Hey, it looks like” Twilight said as she slowly reliazed what was coming at them “a dragon.”
The dragon growled ferociously as it approached the motorcycle. The dragon prepared to slash at the motorcycle with his claws.
“Incoming!” Fluttershy yelled.
The dragon slashed at the flying vehicle but just barely missed cutting Lily’s head off. It then flew past the news helicopter.
“I…I don’t know what I’m seeing!” the reporter yelled. “It’s like something out of a fantasy novel!”
The dragon growled and then did a dizzying aerial maneuver so he was on the helicopters tail. It then squinted to get a better view.
The cameraman turned out to see the dragon coming at them.
“TURN THIS THING AROUND!” he yelled.
Big mistake.
The dragon then raised his claw in defiance. First he breathed fire at the helicopter. While the inside didn’t catch fire, the tail did.
The motors stopped and started as the thing spiraled out of control as it turned.
Then in one fell swoop, the dragon sliced the helicopter in half, killing everyone inside. It turned it’s attention to it’s real target: the motorcycle.
Twilight Sparkle turned towards the dragon with Pinkie grabbing her tail.
“Fire!” Applejack yelled.
Pinkie twisted Twilight’s tail in a circle and beams of magic flew out machine gun style. The beams headed towards the dragon. One beam blew up next to the dragon and caused it to turn to it’s side.
The beams exploded flak style. Suddenly, Amanda yelled.
“Look out!” she yelled.
The dragon was wing to wing with the motorcycle and open it’s mouth and prepared to fire. Pinkie Pie turned Twilight towards the dragon.
“Duck!” Twilight yelled to Amanda, Grace, Trixie and Rarity.
They ducked.
She fired and Michael forced the motorcycle into a dive. The dragon was hit three times (dragons are hard to kill).
Twice in the back and once in the wing, giving the dragon third-degree burns.
It roared in pain as it followed the diving vehicle. It breathed fire, just scorching a bit of Applejack’s hat.
“You got black in you.” Kyle said.
“I know that.” Applejack replied dryly.
The dragon twisted and turned with the motorcycle. There was a problem: Twilight couldn’t fire right and the constant maneuvering was making both her, Pinkie and everyone dizzy.
“Stop spinning!” everyone yelled.
Michael pulled on the motorcycle controls and it soared back into the air and the dragon missed. It then slammed into a hillside spewing clouds of dirt.
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In the forest, Discord waited. He tapped his foot with impatience. Then, the dragon returned with bruises and third-degree burns.
“Well?” Discord angrily asked.
The dragon shook his head. Discord face-palmed. He whistled and a huge python came from the brush.
“I’ll give you another chance when the time comes.” Discord said to the dragon then he turned his attention to his snake. “Now, Fatine my pet. Go and find the ponies so that I may destroy the Alicorn's Stone.”
The snake hissed and buried into the ground.
Discord smiled.
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The motorcycle drove through the town, the ponies hiding in a coat. Amanda and Grace were dropped off at their respective home and they were heading back to the hotel.
They stopped in front of the hotel and Michael, Lily, Wilfred and Kyle walked out.
They walked in with the ponies trailing behind and Judy Crane was busy reading the same magazine.
“Evening.” Michael said.
“Hello.” Judy said “Oh wait!” she stopped the humans from going any further.
“Did you hear?” she asked “The police tried to chase down a flying motorcycle and a news copter was destroyed by a dragon.”
“It didn’t fly so much as glide.” Michael said.
“How would you know?” Judy asked.
Michael froze.
“The television.” Lily finally said, breaking the awkward silence.
“Oh, alright then. Enjoy your stay.” Judy said returning to her magazine.
That was a close one. Michael thought.
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A police car drove down the road along with three more. The driver of the lead car was Victor Aaron with Roland Carter and Jerald King in the back seats.
“Why are we in the back?” Jerald asked.
“Shut up.” Victor said.
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The ponies sat in Grace’s room.
“We have to find the Alicorn’s Stone now more then ever.” Twilight Sparkle said very seriously. “Now that Discord is after us.”
“But how could he get to Earth?” Fluttershy asked.
“Where we come from, Celestia’s mother died defending Canterlot from Discord.” Trixie replied “So, Celestia hid her mother’s coffin deep in the castle. Alongside Queen Lauren’s body is her staff, which could kill with a beam of red magic.”
“I was reading about that when Celestia appointed me as a teacher at the university.” Twilight said.
“Wait, I’m sorry” Grace said “but why didn’t you take the staff? And what does the Alicorn’s Stone even look like?”
“Okay, first of all” Trixie said “Celestia’s mother, knowing that the staff may fall into the wrong hands, created with the Order of the Alicorn’s Stone: a necklace that can’t be used for evil. Only for good. And it’s just as powerful as the staff.”
“Hold it!” Grace suddenly piped up “Is this necklace a little big and have a unicorn on the front?”
Pinkie Pie suddenly jumped on her.
“Wait! You’ve seen it?!” Pinkie Pie yelled.
“Where?!” Rainbow Dash asked.
The gears started turning in Grace’s head. It took her only a few moments to realize something.
“My mother has it!” Grace yelled. “I think it’s at where she teaches!”
“Where is the university?!” Rarity said.
“At the end of town.” Grace said.
Everyone suddenly ran down the stairs towards the phone. Grace ran towards it, dialed the number for the hotel and gave the phone to Twilight who levitated it to her ear.
“Hello, Wilfred?!” Twilight yelled “Drive down here quick!”
“Why?” he asked on the other end.
“I think we know where the Alicorn’s Stone is!” Twilight yelled.
“I’ll be right over!” Wilfred said as he hung up.
Twilight took a deep breath and put the phone back on the hook.
Amanda was busy talking about mystical objects that ancient people thought had magical powers.
“Did they really have, like, magical powers?” some goth teen asked.
“Well, no.” Amanda replied. “But I do have this.”
She reached into a drawer in her desk and fiddled around in it. A stapler, a paperclip, a book about “Pan’s Maze” or something. Ah, the necklace.
She held it up for all to see. “I found this in my yard.” she said. “Isn’t it lovely?”
“Hmm” the goth chick said. “It enlightens my darkened soul. May I hold it?”
Amanda nodded. The teenager walked towards her and yanked the necklace out of Amanda’s hand.
“Oh” the goth teen said as she first put it on her neck then her hand “it works as both a necklace and a hand bracelet! That is so, like, radical.” she giddily said “it has enlightened a dark, desolate, black corner of my soul. Awesome.”
Yeah, you do that. Weirdo. Amanda thought.
But unseen by everyone, a dirt path headed towards the outside wall.
Inside the classroom, Wilfred and Kyle burst through the door.
“There it is!” Kyle yelled.
And then all hell broke loose.
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Fatine burst through the wall of the room, slammed through at least five desk chairs and students, spraying dust everywhere and she aimed for the goth chicks throat, mouth open.
“Hey, what the flying-” the goth chick screamed.
Her terror was short-lived.
Fatine bit the goth chick’s throat with all her might. The student gasped for breath as she tried to pull the snake away. She fell to the ground and threw the snake away, only to have her wound bleed like mad.
Fatine merely bounced of the wall and launched herself at the teenager. She re-bit into her throat and made the killing bite, thrashing on both bites.
During all this, Amanda had been knocked down by Fatine’s tail. She got to her feet and ran towards the door as did all the other students.
The Alicorn’s Stone was practically soaked with blood and Fatine had totally forgotten it in favor of killing this new prey of hers.
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Laurie Francis screamed when the snake re-engaged it’s attack. She leapt to her feet and ran for the door. The would have made it had that jerk student not pushed her making her trip over the snake causing her to drag him down with her.
The two hit the desk, breaking it in half.
Fatine viciously hissed and turned her head towards them.
“There’s a snake, bitch!” the muscle-bound jerk screamed “Run!”
Laurie got to her feet and ran for the door.
“Hey, wait!” the jerk said.
Fatine lunged at him and bit him in the leg. He screamed in agony and fell to the ground, giving Fatine a chance to bite his throat.
Apparently, Fatine had some kind of impulse to bite people’s throats.
Laurie slammed into a mustached student and they both broke the door, tripping a blond-haired female student. Laurie got up and helped the mustached dude up. The third student tried to get up but then Fatine bit the back of her head, killing her instantly.
“Run, Miss Joyce!” Laurie screamed as she passed Amanda, Wilfred and Kyle who were in shock at all this.
“Yes, let’s!” Wilfred yelled.
The five people ran for their lives and ran through the crowd of horrified students.
Fatine just slithered behind slowly. No need to waste energy pursuing those easily-killable humans.
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Mrs. Austin was walking outside when she heard loud noises coming from inside.
What on Earth? she thought.
She headed towards the stairs when suddenly hundreds of students came running out. Screaming.
The mustached man bumped into her.
“Snake!” he screamed.
“I dare say!” Mrs. Austin said with a huff. She saw Wilfred, Kyle, Amanda and Laurie running for their lives. With a part of Laurie’s dress stained with blood.
“To the motorcycle!” Wilfred yelled.
“Mrs. Amanda Joyce!” Mrs. Austin said angrily “What is the meaning of this?!”
Laurie grabbed Mrs. Austin’s arm. “Come with us, Mrs. Austin!” she yelled.
They all squeezed into the motorcycle. Fatine slithered down the stairs.
“Goodness gracious!” Mrs. Austin yelled her anger now turned to terror. “There’s a snake on the grounds!”
“I KNOW THAT!” Wilfred screamed “JUST LET ME DRIVE!”
Wilfred hit the gas on the motorcycle and it raced off.
Fatine hissed angrily. But she now knew where the Alicorn’s Stone was. And more then likely, the ponies. The snake buried into the ground and headed for the other side of town.
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Back at Amanda’s house, Amanda explained what happened.
“He’s here.” Trixie said.
“Oh!” Laurie yelled “No kidding?! First, a giant snake bursts into my classroom, kills three people and get’s blood on my dress and now I have seven candy-colored ponies talking to me! HAVE I GONE CRAZY?!”
Laurie caught her breath and took a sip of water Grace handed to her.
“We now know where the Alicorn’s Stone is.” Applejack said. “Now, we have to get it. Tonight.”
“But what if that dreadful snake is there.” Mrs. Austin asked.
“Good point.” Rainbow Dash said.
“She’s probably gone by now.” Fluttershy said.
“Do you have any spare dresses?” Laurie asked Amanda. Amanda pointed up stairs. Laurie climbed up.
“It’s settled.” Twilight said “Tonight we go back and get it. Any one with me?”
“I’m going!” Rainbow Dash said.
“Of course!” Applejack said.
“I am!” Pinkie Pie said.
“And I as well.” Rarity said.
“Let’s do it!” Trixie said.
“Oh, I don’t know.” Fluttershy said “Seems awful dangerous.”
Laurie climbed down to the middle of the stairs. “I’m certainly not going.” She went back up to change.
“I guess I’ll go.” Wilfred said.
“Yeah, alright.” Kyle said.
“I’m staying here with my daughter.” Amanda said.
“Alright, let’s go!” Applejack said. The ponies rushed out the door.
Kyle and Wilfred followed.
“Good luck.” Amanda said.
“Thanks.” Wilfred said.
He then shut the door.
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The car drove through town as the sun set. Suddenly they stopped.
“Look, at the diner.” Rainbow Dash said pointing in the general direction.
Victor Aaron’s squad car was just parked outside.
“Wait, remember that pack you took?” Wilfred said. “Fluttershy, you’re quiet. Go get the pack from the trunk.”
Fluttershy quietly crept towards the trunk. She was just about to open it when Victor Aaron stepped out.
She ducked under the car.
Victor completely ignored the car across the street and opened the front door of his squad car.
“I can’t believe I forgot my wallet.” he said as he closed the door and held his wallet in one hand.
He walked into the diner.
Fluttershy flew back into the car. It drove off.
“Did you get the bag?” Wilfred asked.
Fluttershy smiled and opened the bag. Sure enough, there was a cricket bat and a shovel.
They patrolled through Amanda’s wrecked classroom. Though the moon shone through the broken window and the gaping hole in the wall, they still used their flashlights.
“Wonder where it could be.” Pinkie Pie said.
“We’ll keep on looking!” Trixie said.
Wilfred, Kyle and the ponies were on their knees looking for the Alicorn’s Stone. They felt around (luckily the dead bodies and blood had been cleared out) but so far all they felt was the wooden floor and the overturned papers.
Suddenly, Pinkie Pie felt something. It felt like pearls. She squinted her eyes and a smile the size of a river came on her face.
“I found it!” Pinkie Pie yelled.
Everybody rushed to her side and looked at the amulet. It looked to in good condition. Twilight proceeded to wipe the blood off.
“Well that went well.” Twilight said
“Extremely well.” said a voice
Everybody turned to see Spike standing in the doorway with a sword in hand.
“Spike!” Rarity yelled, wasting no time in giving him a hug.
“Wait, how did you get here?” Rarity said.
“No time.” Spike responded as Rarity put him down “I see you have the Alicorn’s Stone. Give it over.”
He then pointed the sword at Pinkie’s throat.
“Spike, what are you doing?” Pinkie Pie asked.
“Give it!” he said in a more threatening voice.
“Wait, who is this guy?!” Wilfred asked.
“This is Spike, my assistant” Twilight said “but I’ve seen him so…aggressive.”
Trixie’s face suddenly turned pale.
“The staff.” she whispered. “You used the staff!” she yelled.
Spike smirked. “Obviously. You got lucky thanks to that amulet. Now, give it to me.” he said.
“No!” Pinkie Pie said.
“Oh, very well.” Spike said.
Suddenly he swung his sword at Pinkie Pie. She ducked as did Rarity as the sword just missed her horn.
“You took the staff to Discord, didn’t you?!” Twilight yelled “How could you?!”
“Enough!” Spike yelled.
Spike then blew a fire bigger then any fire he’d ever blown before and everyone was catapulted out the room into the yard.
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Amanda came down from her room upstairs with her purse and holding a kitchen knife in one hand.
“Why are we going to your university?” Laurie asked.
“I want to make sure Wilfred’s alright.” Amanda replied.
“Why?” Laurie asked again.
Amanda rolled her eyes.
“Because I love him!” she said rather loudly.
“Alright” Laurie said “no need to get huffy.”
Grace came into the room with Fluttershy.
“We’re ready, mum.” she said.
Fluttershy gulped.
“Don’t worry, Fluttershy” Amanda said “we’ll be fine.”
“If we live that long.” Fluttershy said.
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Twilight, enraged, pointed her horn at Spike.
“You liar!” Twilight yelled angrily.
She fired a beam but he leapt out of the way, Alicorn’s Stone in hand.
“After him!” Rainbow Dash yelled.
The ponies ran after the dragon.
“I guess” Kyle said “we’ll stay here then?”
“Yeah!” Pinkie Pie yelled.
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Spike ran like heck and threw the amulet to Zecora, who caught it.
“Now that we have the stone” she said “we can go home.”
“Not now you won’t” said a oh-so familiar voice.
Suddenly, Trixie football tackled Zecora while the other ponies went after Spike.
Trixie and Zecora exchanged punches and kicks. Zecora’s hoof swung at Trixie but she ducked. Trixie violently kicked Zecora through a wall into the hallway. She hit a knight statue.
“Ha!” Zecora laughed “Not while I’m still-”
CHUNK! The knight’s ax fell and chopped the zebra’s head off.
“Alive?” Trixie said. Wow, that comeback sucked. Trixie thought.
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Spike ran into the auditorium and breathed a plume of fire at the chairs. They fell down and blocked the entrance. The ponies stopped and Rainbow Dash tackled Spike, causing him to drop the Alicorn’s Stone.
Spike retaliated by stabbing Rainbow’s wing. Rainbow yelled in pain. Spike grabbed her by the head and pointed a sword to her throat.
“Don’t you dare do what I think you’re going to do!” Rarity yelled, with a stubborn tear coming from her eye. “This is isn’t like you!”
“Oh, shut up, mare!” Spike said. “Let me go or else the pegasus get’s it!”
“Spike, I don’t want to shoot you!” Twilight Sparkle yelled.
“You’re not helping, Twilight” Rainbow Dash said.
“I’m not going to tell you this again!” Spike said “Let me go or-”
Suddenly, a shot rang out and a bullet flew through the air and went through Spike’s head and Rainbow Dash’s hair. Blood splattered on the floor. Rainbow ducked. Spike fell backwards. Dead.
“Wait, who?” Applejack said as the ponies turned.
Fluttershy stood up holding a gun.
“You left me no choice.” Fluttershy whispered to herself.
Twilight blasted through the chairs and the ponies (including Rainbow) hugged her.
As Twilight headed to grab the Alicorn’s Stone when suddenly Discord broke through the wall, sending bricks down.
“Twilight Sparkle” Discord said “we meet again.”
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Wilfred and Kyle sat in the grass. Wilfred turned his head and saw Amanda running to his side.
“You’re alive!” Amanda yelled in joy. She then hugged him.
“Um, yes.” Wilfred said.
Grace sat next to Kyle.
“You got a Twinkie?” Kyle asked.
“Nope.” Grace said.
“Damn it.” he whispered. “Sorry.” he said turning to Grace.
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Discord pulled the staff out of nowhere and pointed it at Twilight. Twilight put the necklace on her neck.
“Go!” she said “I’ll deal with him.”
The ponies ran out of the room and hid behind the wall.
“Let’s do this.” Discord said.
He fired the staff and Twilight fired her magic at him. The two beams clashed and Twilight looked towards the necklace. It wasn’t glowing.
But how?! Twilight thought.
Twilight flew back as Discord’s beam hit the roof.
“Too bad.” Discord said “Oh, well. Time to-”
Suddenly he was cut off when something slammed the back of his head. He fell to the ground then lifted his head dizzily.
Trixie landed on her feet in front of Twilight, cricket levitated with her magic, then proceeded to put the necklace on her neck.
“Okay then” Discord said as he got up. “Let’s have at it!”
The two beams collided while Trixie looked towards the Alicorn’s Stone.
It was glowing.
The two characters squinted in anger as the beams drew closer. But something happened then Discord did not intended.
Suddenly a beam of white magic flew from the Alicorn’s Stone and joined Trixie’s beam. Twilight ducked behind a fallen group of chairs.
Trixie’s beam drew closer and closer to Discord. Then…FWOOOM!
Before Discord could scream “No!” Trixie’s beam hit him head on. The pain of disintegration lasted only a few seconds. The staff then caught fire and exploded. It threw Trixie back several feet and caused a bright flash of light.
All that was left of Discord and the staff was a pile of ash.
Trixie shook her head and looked towards the Alicorn’s Stone. It’s bright glow ceased and it returned to it’s normal color.
“That was awesome!” Kyle yelled from the door.
She turned to see everyone clapping and cheering.
Twilight walked next to her.
“I think it worked.” Trixie said.
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Discord’s small band of creatures sat waiting, and waiting, and waiting. Their master hadn’t come back yet.
Then, a mysterious white light came from above them.
“Witchcraft!” some dragon yelled.
“Attention, this is MI-6!” yelled a voice “you are trespassing. Put your hands up, aliens!”
They did as they where told.
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The car was parked right where the field where the ponies first landed was. The ponies had drawn a circle where they could stand.
“Well, see you later then.” Amanda said.
“Likewise.” Rarity replied.
“Are you going to come back?” Grace asked.
“Who knows, kid?” Rainbow Dash said “Who knows?”
“I had a nice time.” Fluttershy said.
“Bring back a Twinkie next time.” Kyle said.
“There’s that word again.” Applejack said “I don’t think you know the proper meaning.”
Kyle looked to Wilfred.
“She’ll figure it out, mate.” Wilfred said.
“This was a fun vacation.” Lily said.
She leaned towards Michael.
“Let’s never do this again.” she whispered.
“Agreed.” he whispered back.
“We owe you a debt of gratitude for your hospitality.” Trixie said “On behalf of Celestia and the kingdom of Equestria, we thank thee.”
Trixie, Rarity and Twilight lit their horns. The Alicorn’s Stone glowed brightly. The sky grew cloudy and lightning flashed. Lightning then hit the Alicorn’s Stone and the ponies flew into the sky with a flash of light.
I would like to thank my older brother Bronyman1995 for his help and letting me upload this.
I would also like to thank any commenter’s who pointed out problems I had to fix. I did my best.
Sorry for the ending. Kind of rushed it.
I must admit that Closer-to-the-Sun’s Spike/Sweetie Belle/Rarity fanfic Plush and Portmeirion’s FlutterMac fanfic Hope helped with the romance between Amanda and Wilfred.
So if there’s any similarities to both stories I apologize and thank the original authors.
I will get my own account on FiMFiction.net eventually but before I go I would like to list the top ten mistakes or missed opportunities in my story:
10: The interaction between the ponies and the humans
A commenter named tnuyum pointed out that in my story, the humans don’t interact very well with the characters.
What he meant was that they’re not particularly shocked to see talking ponies in front of them. I’ve tried to put more fear of ponies into the story.
Also, has anyone ever noticed that if Harry Potter were in the real world, wizards would have their own apartheid and wouldn’t it have been cool if Tom Riddle were not a bald-nose less 50 year old Edward from Twilight named Voldemort but a human (think that crazy guy from District 9).
I just thought it was worth noting.
9: The disappearance of characters
Something so far no one has noticed is that characters like Dinky Hooves and Garble appear only to disappear and never show up again.
Sorry.
8: The switching from Earth to Canterlot
This is I think something I was incredibly worried about when posting my story.
I think I cut to Canterlot only five times.
This is probably because as the story progressed, I ran out of material for Canterlot and to be honest I sort of rushed my story.
7: The Ending
Originally, Trixie was going to die but then I realized that Spike is evil…Rarity, at least to the show, knows that Spike likes her and she likes him.
Possible conflict?
So, I decided to change the ending and have a conflict with Rarity and Spike when she discovers the dragon she loves has turned against her and her friends.
Also, Linkara’s opinion of shock deaths avoided me from putting any.
Just classic good vs. evil.
6: Discord being a murderous psychopath
Maybe I made him too evil.
5: Breaking Zecora’s rhyme
Another thing tnuyum pointed out.
I meant for it to be a joke and also I suck at rhyming.
4: The constant cutting
I think I cut to too many locations in one chapter.
3: The violence
I wanted to have actual violence in my story and though the goth chick (who for you wondering was it’s a parody Kristen Stewart) felt needed, I think I made it too graphic.
2: The romance aspect
I really wish I could have done this better.
My brother, Bronyman1995, kept insisting that “They’re both weird and quirky. They like each other for that. That’s it.”
Um, no dude.
While that it true and it shows, I wanted to firmly establish that they’ve been friends for a while and personally feel that I didn’t.
1: I didn’t do the other Harry Potter films
This is admittly something I was afraid of.
Not only because my sister put a “don’t look Harry Potter up” rule, though a friend of mine who is a Harry Potter fan did help, but because I always felt I was squeezing too much into one thing.
I was thinking of this fanfic as if it were a movie plot or script and that be really good or really bad.
So far no one hates my story but they’ve pointed out things I never noticed, like the characters acting out of character at times.
I always wanted to do a parody of all 7 movies (I feel that Chamber of Secrets is the weakest just from it’s premise). If it required doing seven books (or eight) then so be it.
Here’s their plots.
Twilight Sparkle and the Alicorn’s Stone:
Twilight Sparkle and her two human friends Wilfred and Kyle are offered to partake in Faust Academy.
Twilight Sparkle and the Prisoner of Carcere:
The Mane 6 are asked to escort a prisoner to Carcere Prison. When the prisoner escapes, they pursue him whilst Wilfred meets an old friend.
Twilight Sparkle and the Flower of Fire:
When Amanda falls ill with a strange illness, Wilfred, Kyle, The Mane 6 and Spike rush to save her whilst Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are asked to represent Faust Academy in the dangerous 26th magical-animals Olympics.
Twilight Sparkle and Order of the Falcon:
While warnings of Nightmare Moon’s return go unheeded, Celestia and Twilight Sparkle try to stop a deranged new teacher from taking over Faust Academy.
Twilight Sparkle and the Half-Blood Princess:
Applejack discovers a book labeled “this book is property of the Half-Blood Princess” and her and her friends discover more about Nightmare Moon’s past.
Twilight Sparkle and the Friendly Hallows Part 1:
As Twilight and her friends race against to defeat the evil Nightmare Moon, she discovers the Friendly Hallows.
Twilight Sparkle and the Friendly Hallows Part 2:
Twilight Sparkle and her friends reunite at Faust Academy to defeat Nightmare Moon.
