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Blaze Chaser


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After an unexpected event I travel to the world of our paradise... Equestria. Landing there, being greeted by fictional characters, suddenly fall in love and find out an unexpected secret, it was... strange. This follows the multiverse theory if you are familiar with it then you know what I'm getting at. Equestria is out there but not in our grasp.

This is how I journeyed to another world, this is the story of how I died.

"We live, we die and yet the world stays the same" ~ Blaze Chaser

Cover art by me: http://blazechaser.deviantart.com/art/Hand-In-Hoof-403341603?ga_submit_new=10%253A1380304748

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 23 )

I'm... not sure how to react to a blatant self-insert.

But I like the cover art, at least.

hey iv taken a copy of this for a review if you would like to see what I think heres a link
https://www.facebook.com/pages/Slash-wing-my-little-pony-FIM/339895572794546

3275065 Hey I read your review and yeah the two chapters will explain the situation and what will be happening so yeah I understand your view, just give it a few chapters :twilightsmile:

This is how I journeyed to another world, this is the story of how I died.

A Doctor Who reference.

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Is it? I'm a whovian where is that from? :pinkiegasp:

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When Rose get left in the alternate universe before the doctor runs into Donna for the first time.
She keep saying this is how she dies then her last lines explain how she swapped worlds and died in one but was born in the other. If that makes sense.

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Oh yeah! I remember that! Bad Wolf Bay! Ah right. Wow I didn't really think about that. And it was a sad day :fluttercry:

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Ya things happen, but hey what are friends for?

I really like this story :pinkiehappy:

I REALLY like where this is going, only if there were more detail into the story, as well as more of a description of where the area is and what it looks like.
Other then that, good idea.
"If a wish is strong enough, then it will come true."

I like it so far, impress me, and you'll earn my follow!

"In nature it is out purpose in life to find our soul mates, and being human doesn't mean you won't. Take a deep breath, and look forward for a brighter future."

BTW All of my posts will have quotes in them, feel free to copy'n paste them!

A bit... rushed, this chapter was.
You really should have taken more time with things.

Twilight giggled and said "How do you know that?". I then explained about the story of how I got here.

Instead of telling us that, why not show us through dialogue.
Have him go; "Well I am from a differant universe with these things called TV shows. Your lives, are one of these TV shows."

You could word that better, but it would be better than; "I then explained about the story of how I got here."

Perhaps getting a pre-reader would help with things such as this.

Otherwise, I am enjoying this story.

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Yeah I see what you mean. I just didn't want readers to agitated of when another chapter comes. And as well I will edit this further to broaden its story thanks for the input and I will do my best to make the future ones better :twilightsmile: Again thank you for your opinion and I will get back onto it :rainbowdetermined2:

"Another day, another drag,"

Haha, Naruto references to Shikamaru.

Good story. Medium amounts of grammar mistakes, and characters seem realistic. The mustache is all yours. :moustache:

4149957 I haven't watched Naruto lol XD Is that really in Naruto?

4150064 Shikamaru's famous quote is "Such a drag", yeah. Well, that or "What a drag". I can't remember well, it's been a long time since I last watched it.

I like it!.jpg
There is a few mistakes here and there though.

Why is this story still tagged as cancelled?

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