>>Says Cutie Mark Crusaders in the description

>>Cutie Mark Crusaders not in the tags

What's the deal with that?

Okay, nitpicking off, time to actually read it.

Well I can't read it now but the concept has definitely caught my attention!

I actually read quite a few grimdarks or well you know fics with death in them (i think that makes it grimdark these days with how pussy the bronies are getting these days) but i liked it ill make sure to follow you and look forward to some more chapters.

This fic is very promising I hope to see more from you soon!

this is some very manly and cool shit.

Congratulations.

Ah, a decent war, no moping around like you get in darksiders

I'll be tracking this one.

Pinkie Pie just made the Fourth Wall her female dog.

But seriously though, your mix of comedy into the story is a great change of pace and your characterization has given me food for thought on my on story I'm working on.

Yep, I like this.

Why aren't these in the story more? Well, they get the ball rolling, but are more side characters than anything else.

AND EVERYONE LIKES THIS!

"'Beatles reference for the win!' shouted Pinkie Pie, splashing in the spa across town."

Rolling Stones.

"Hardened leather covered their flanks and shoulders; boiled, soft leather covering their forelegs and bellies."

Boiling leather hardens it.

Oh noes! Pinkie is sad! Now I'm sad.......

Can't get enough of this story. Tracked, watched, and favorite.

>>199155199155

I'm not that well brushed up on music!

>>199156199156

...Crap. Look, let's just assume there are some things I don't know and leave it at that.

This is so great. I just wanted you to know that. So great.

Twilight is a fucking retard.

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>>199204199204

To be fair it sounded right to me at the time! :D

“Oh, it that case,” Rarity opened the door and stepped out, “Let me apologise for my behaviour earlier, it was simply awful!”

I think you mean "Oh, in that case" right?

But i loved the chapter good work.

Also i keep wanting to think of him as a space marine in my head.

The anthromorphic personification of war huh? Nice.

*slaps on a tracker*

>>199993199993*Rips off your tracker and puts his in its place*

Ares has graced you mortal ponies with his presence bow to him!

On another note great fic keep it up.

Daem.

>loss for words

>tracking

>>208499208499

Hope thats a good loss for words...

>>208759208759 Indeed it is good sir.

The word is Anthropomorphic, not Anthropermorthic.

MOAR!

........Wait......Did....you....just....make....derpy...A STALLION?!?!?!

>>382413382413

No he was talking about somepony completely different. Also YES AN UPDATE

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

>>382630382630

It's been a while, hasn't it?

lol love the discord memories, i would love to see that encounter.....

it would probably go something like:

Discord: "listen to my evil and unnesisarily complicated plan..."

Excolotis: "DIE BIATCH!"

You made me a happy man.

>>384428384428

How so?

Wow, I had almost forgotten what this story was about, Very happy to see an update.

>>384750384750 The new chapter.

Loving the crazy antics of a badass war. Keep it up.

Things have in fact begun to get real!

.....Crap........Wait...Did pinkie just speak german,or are Griffens German in this messed up universe?

what happend to celestia?

>>437485437485

The Gryphons are german.

Huh.

I may not have a full picture of what's going on with Celestia, but the story's interesting nonetheless.

Thinking about it, if Excolotis exists as an anthropomorphic personification of War in this universe then that could mean that other forces have personifications, like death, famine, and pestilence and they are put away similarly to the way War was, so his presence might cause the others to awaken or something. After all, I see no real reason so far to fear Excolotis at the moment, and no real reason he would kill anyone just on Friendship or weakness. He just doesn't seem the type to senselessly kill over nothing and so far there hasn't been any reason for Celestia to worry and Luna was happy. Unless Excolotis' mere presence is enough to spark a war between empires or awakens some other primal force, I do not know why Celestia is worried. Maybe I just missed something or the answer isn't in the story yet.

Anyway, it is an interesting story so I'll be upvoting and tracking it.

Hello mister gun. Meet Gryphon face.

Get the kinks out Exo. Time for you to upgrade from things that go swish slice, to things that go krack boom. Maybe even Dakka.

>>438249438249

Excolotis could use firearms, yes.

The problem is that if Excolotis spawed a firearm, the bullet would dissipate the moment he pulled the trigger.

Read the section on bows and arrows.

>>438418438418 OH! That was this fic...

To tell you the truth, I had forgotten about his little spawning ability and it's limits (if the above wasn't enough). I was thinking he goes to sleep in the time of the lance and sword. He wakes up in a time when someone, most likely gryphons (they seem to be the main antagonists for many stories don't they...), had developed firearms.

>>438495438495

Firearms haven't been developed by Gryphons, Ponies, Buffalo, or Diamond Dogs. Don't fret about that, it's still very much sword and crossbow age here.

>>438064438064

The sun rises in the east.

>>439015439015

I wish I knew what that meant. Unless you're referencing Dawn of War or alluding to a dawn of war I have absolutely no idea on what you're talking about. Maybe Celestia promised War wars when he next woke up? A "Save us today doom us later" type of thing? Anyway good story and I want to see more of it.

This reminds me of the personification of Destruction from Neil Gaiman's Sandman series.

Nice guy, is friends with a talking dog, sucks at anything related to creating things. Bad paintings and sculptures all around. Quit his job and just sort of wanders the world. Tries not to stay too long in one place, or bad things happen.

>>459948459948

I have never read that series.

I've read Fables, though.

Revolution?NOPE.Hate these storys!NOPE NOPE NOPE.

>>547373547373

It's not a revolution. Revolution implies a change in leadership. This is a push towards war, much like what happened in MW2 with the Ultra-Nationalsits.

>>547382547382Then More Nope!Nope!Nope!Nope!

Heheheh, "Holy damn shit"? Well I guess that's one way of putting it mate. Started from where Dashie entered the story, but this looks interesting. Let's give it a go.

>>547387547387 Ah quit ya whinging. No-one's forcing ya to read this.

>>547479547479

Second. There are alternitives. And unlike Horsefly, I'm not the only option.

Trying to make the God of War go all Warry? Yeah... that's a good plan.

“Oh that’s real nice, your majesty,” said Spider, making the title sound like an insult, “Why don’t I just get down and eat out your fucking pussy, huh? That makes you happy?”

Wow, this douche is in the story for an exceedingly short period of time and I already hate him. So why is he allowed show such disrespect for Princess Luna? I mean because her just letting such a vulgar statement just go by is rather jarring. Isn't this dude looking at a prison sentence?

>>674080674080

He is a dick. You're not supposed to like him.

Put in a line making Luna's distate more apparent.

dude hes a total boss snapping Gryphon's necks cant wait for the next chapter

spike's such a bro.

is it weird that i was singing "mad world" to myself earlier today?

>>686571686571

Not really.

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Continue

He knows...

Meanwhile at Sweet Apple Ares

Sweet Apple Ares eh?

Soon to be renamed Sweet Apple Kratos when the management changes.

i am liking this story. As the horseman of the apoclypse destined to take this man's place i would request that you make more if you would be so kind. This is a really fun story especially since i was getting bored of no new updates with the others, then i saw the title on this and thought "I have got to read this!" Looking forward for more!

Get out of fluttershy's shed.

>>946724946724

Whoops.

Fixed.

I was listening to this the entire first chapter.

also, Excolotus is "twelve feet tall and three feet wide at the shoulders... I'm also three feet wide at the shoulders, but I'm only six feet tall, soooo... I guess that means I'm even bulkier than war incarnate!  

i like where this is going

Fluttershy: "Stay outta my shed!"

>>948985948985

Goddamn, you're a big mofo!

>>949359949359  I've had people trying to get me into sports since I was born.  I think it was integral to me becoming a basement troll.  and I mean troll as in I look like a troll.

Pfft...

>>12739831273983

What? The fuck does that mean?

>>12739841273984

Laughter.

>>949359949359

Actually, four feet shoulders would make more sense. Sorry, just giving my opinion

Also, are you going to capitalize the "am" in your title?

I didn't know that this was the God of War. I thought that Kratos was the God of War or Ares.

>>12740661274066

There are dozens of warrior gods.

Freyja, Odin,Thor, Týr, Ullr, Bellona, Honos, Lua, Mars, Minerva, Nerio, Vica Pota, Victoria, and Virtus to name a few.

>>12739891273989

I bumped up his shoulder width after it was pointed out how thin that was.

>>12741431274143 All those names sound like they come from a depressing place.

>>12741501274150

They're from the various religions of OUR PLANET.

>>12741781274178 All depressing places, none of them are in the America's.

maybe it's a bit late but after i read the chapter where the griffins speak german i was like . Especially this part : “Ich sagte bin leise, sie ärgerliches geschöpf,” shouted the griffin leader, “wenn sie nicht ich töten sie ruhig sind, wo sie stehen!”. It sounds like you have used google translator or something similar. Would you mind if i correct the german sentences in this chapter ?    Sorry if that sounds rude but my english is just to bad for anything else than practical things.

>>12741821274182

Mostly Eastern European. Scandinavia has never been a happy place.

I only made it to chapter two, but then- things went so OOC that I couldn't continue.

I'm very sorry; I tried to, but, well, it just doesn't work for me.

>>12741891274189

Yeah, help would be nice. Just send an Email to my account.

>>12742501274250

Fair enough. I am rubbish.

>>12742861274286

No no no!

You, sir, are definitely not rubbish! Don't let my words drag you down like that!

And so War reinged supreme! BEST ENDING EVER! LOVED IT!

Celestia tightened around the eyes as her rump gave another twinge as the wind blew across it............

did celestia just fart???

Ohhh. Sounds interesting. I've gotta read this :D

Ah realism.  To be fair, I doubt the changelings would have done so well considering that the elements of harmony defeated what, four hundred of them?  That, and Celestia and Luna are both in fighting shape, they no longer have the guiding influence of their queen, and excolotis and the royal guard are on high alert.

I think it would have progressed basically as the show showed.

wait what happened to Celestia

I don't harvest the meat myself

O rly?

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>>437545437545 Well, I don't have any way to confirm this. But it's hinted that Luna as NMM really screwed her up.