3
0
1
Joined February 2012
41
765
After another failed attempt to ask Rarity out on a date, Spike finds a ruby which, supposedly, gives Dragons great power and courage. Of course, he eats it. But will his newfound courage become a blessing or a curse when things take an unexpected turn and old enemies return with more power?
Very nice intro to a story that could open up in many different directions. I wonder what will happen with Spike and Rarity in the next chapter? I would expand more on my thoughts, but this first chapter kind of lacked anything worth going into detail with. Just keep the flow going and try not to jump into things too fast. Not much else to say here, but I will be keeping track of this one for funsies. Hope to see the next update soon. 
>>239563 Truly... I don't know. I'm writing off the top of my head, meaning I have the general structure all worked out and I'm just typing up how I see it in my mind. I can try to write more per chapter but I ain't promising anything.
>>240130 Well thanks a lot... I really try not to make them sound too cheesy or anything but not to cliché and boring at the same time... hope I'm doing good for now
Well, what do you know? I didn't manage to write an awful lot more today, but it sure feels like I've updated early.
So yeah... chapter 4 is up. Don't worry, this ain't the end of the perfect date chapters. It's a little insight into some thoughts and mind visions of other ponies (and a dragon)
I like that part about Dragons cowering under fear of their mothers. I just picture a giant dragon with a name like Murderkill Von Bloodfist, and his mom is this tiny wrinkled up old dragon, "How, come you never call?!?!!!" and he's all scared shitless.
This fic is fantastic.
peace Out.
I really want to see Spike jump out and attack the dogs Liam Neeson style.
Maybe you can use my favorite line from Rambo 3:
The colonel "It's not me you have to worry about, it's Rambo."
The evil russian dude "What is he god?"
The colonel "No, God would have mercy, he won't."
Idea: They take the girls into the deeper into cave once the spike appears. The Master interrogates Rarity.
"Spike is gonna mangle you ruffians."
"What is he a god?"
"No, The princesses would show mercy, Spikey Wikey will not." All of a sudden the ground start shaking as Spike tears through iron bars and sounds of the blood curdling screams of Diamond Dog infantry being taken out.
What was that - 10 days? I've been working on 7th chapter for 10 days? I've been kinda out of muse for the last few days, so pardon the possible momentary decrease in quality. I have a one-chapter side-project going on as well, hope you'll be interested enough to check it out once I'm done. But Heart's Flame comes first.
Super Saiyan Spike.
Reset Password
Resend Verification Email
765 ( 5,579 )
More
Less
Post Comment
Refresh
. Good stuff.
Image: http://images.wikia.com/meme/images/4/47/Over9000.jpg
Cancel
Send