When Celestia banished her sister to the Moon with the power of Harmony, she swore that she would never allow anything so terrible to happen to Equestria ever again.
Harmony, unfortunately, saw fit to grant her wish.
Inspired by Pegasus Rescue Brigade's Infallible.
Unconnected to my main story, Dusk.
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Very nice!
Definitely explores the darker side of the matter that "Infallible" examined the lighter side of.
I'll send you the more in-depth critique you asked for in private message.
If you truely need evil to once again stalk the land, just remember that you are the Princess, after all.
Send out some tax collectors...
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Except everypony is perfectly taxed according to their means, and the money is perfectly utilized in programs that support everypony's needs.
Celly tried to upset the economy in year 643 after Luna's banishment. They used the extra bits to throw her a thank you party.
The past tense of think is not thunk it is thank
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"Thunk" is colloquial. Besides, do you think a being of chaos is going to conform to rules of grammar?
I fucking love this fic.
they have conflict. You don't have to lose to have conflict. If fact if you lose that may be the only conflict you ever have
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It's "thought", but "who'd have thunk it" is idiomatic and in character.
Oh my god, I love this idea!
Please tell me you're going to make more.
so FEW people understand things that this story underscores, perfection is death! a SLOW, PAINFUL, ETERNAL death that you will not die from, you will just endure until the end which perfection will alway keep at bay
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that comment is totally contradictory and illogical.
The biggest thing this story underscores is Celestia doesn't understand change. She calls her ponies simple minded because they don't react the way ponies would in her youth. Well things were different in her youth.
Shunt you or me or any person reading this back to the dawn of humanity and we wouldn't be able to deal with the problems then either. Does that mean we're simple?
You don't like this place? The answer is simple: get something not from this place. A creature that hasn't been exposed to Harmony for very long. A true beast, an uncontrollable, evil, disgusting creature from the deepest depths of- not Tartarus, that's at the border of Equestria, Harmony can leak in- Hell. THE Hell. Better yet, pull in the Kishin from Soul Eater, Asura:
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He literally CREATES Madness and instability... just by BREATHING. There, problem solved. Can I have a cookie now? Ooh, that's a good idea... MINE!
Let humans
in-that'll disrupt things.
2432633 Got it in one. I'd offer you a prize... well...
2432754 Pinkie would end up teaching Asura to face his fears by laughing at them. Problem solved.
2434299 The humans arrive, form their own town, and live in Harmony just like every other race.
>One-shot
>Incomplete
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This type of reasoning always makes me smile... people sometimes tell me perfection is boring, bland, dangerous, staling progress... it can't be!
Perfection does not = an unchanging state, if what is perfect now would be dangerous later then it either stops being perfect or changes to remain so, if perfection would become boring then it will adapt. Perfection can't be anything less than itself, stating the opposite is a logical impossibility, you might as well be squaring circles or ascending down... whatever.
2434430 Heh heh... thanks for catching that.
There's some good food for thought in this story...I like that
Nice, made me think a lot.
Just strange that Celestia wouldn't tell Twilight about this. Trust issues? I guess perfection doesn't reign after all
Oh dear Monolith. This is the most disturbing thing ever.
2434353He was an example of any possible solution. Something that's not of this dimension, because apparently it's protected by a thick, glossy coat of Harmony, limiting anyone's levels of killing intent. Doesn't even have to be a crossover, maybe an OC evil demon-beast or whatever. Do what you'd like, I'm just giving examples.
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You know what? I borrowed this idea from PRB, why don't you borrow the idea from me?
It's a fairly decent start for a fic - the standard "extradimensional visitor visits Equestria" fiction, with the twist that he's there to break the world instead of adjust himself to it.
I'm a tad busy with Dusk. If you (or anyone really) feels up to the task, go ahead.
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thanks!
'The world refused to change'? That sounds like Chrono Trigger, just a little.
Well, it seems the world has passed Celestia by. She could always try to steal a MIRV from another universe and destroy a good part of equestria. That would deharmonize things pretty quickly.
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The resultant destruction would band the nation together in a global relief effort. Heroes would be born. Legends would be created. And more than ever, the world would come to appreciate the power of Harmony.
lol harmony wins forever etc etc.
2431086 Thank!? Thank you, but even though thunk might not be a word pertaining to thought, neither is thank.
Hmmm . . . some interesting ideas you've proposed here regarding the seeming perfection of Equestria, and how said perfection can be representative of stagnation, eventual decay, and death. I'm reminded of Frank Herbert's Dune, where the hero actively tries to avoid the "safe course" that Celestia (seemingly) unwittingly took, for "that path leads ever down into stagnation" (not that the path that Paul Muad'Dib actually went down was all that much better, just not stagnant). Consider other fictional civilizations that have attained a level of perfection--Krypton, Cybertron, Gallifrey--only to grow complacent and eventually face obliteration because so many of its citizens simply could not change.
A very well done and thought-provoking one-shot. Keep up the good work!
Cheers,
Mares Guyver
Very interesting take on it. Ultimately it boils down to boredom and paranoia an old war goddess experiences in piece - though with Twilight in Place, Celly and Luna could go on an interstellar adventure instead.
This reminds me of a Batman crossover fic by Onomonopia "Dark Knight for Equestria", where the Mane Six and Batman had to face their ultimate fear.
In short, the Mane Six's sessions doesn't involve death or blood or even the color black. So when it's Batman's turn, well let's say it's insta-nightmare of life-scarring quantity.
The worst part about everlasting peace is you will lose the idea of what "un-peace" is like, and your mental strength with it. Atrophy, indeed.
2531106 APATHY IS DEATH!! LOL!!
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Welp..........the world has ended.........till death decides enough is enough that is!! MUAHAHAHA!! no seriously!!
Well, SpookTober is coming so might as well read some of the Darker sides of ponies, and every single day until finally nightmare night will arrive and I will Read Smiles or Cupcakes to revisit the good old stories that will give me nightmares.
Hmm, am I forcing my self to get nightmares... Nah
Still, this pretty good story when it was released in 2013 and if I was 16 back then I would enjoy every moment of my life being a brony oof I was born to late for that now
Now I'm reviewing the past, well that's a blast. (hay that rhymes)
10/15/2019 by Roy
(although im just a grain of salt in the community. Might as well enjoy it while it last because im going to fallow the heard until were gone)