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A mysterious pony emerges from the forest wearing armor and wielding a mace of epic proportions. As he attempts to find his meaning in life and why he was created in the first place can friendship help shape his life in a positive way or is he doomed to destroy all of Equestria? My first fanfic, constructive criticism is much appreciated.

More characters will be added as they are introduced. Also there is some gore in it but I don't feel it meets the 'mature' standered yet and will keep it teen for now but that may change depending on how the story goes.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 16 )

Long text, but not a mistake. Interesting concept, and few mistakes. Tracked.

Alright,great first chapter. 2 things I noticed, 1 I dislike first-person(pony) perspective (only my taste, not really a criticism) :coolphoto:; and 2: “Well let us just hope that this was just a freak incident and that nothing will come of it“ :trollestia: I don't know if you intended this to be funny, but man did I have a laugh.

I've been waiting for a story like this to come out!

Should I track this big mac?

:eeyup: "Eeyup."

Should I eagerly await more?

:eeyup: "Eeyup."

Should I give it a good rating?

:eeyup: "Eeyup."

Do you approve?

:eeyup: "Eeyup."

Than so do I. Good day sir, and good luck with your story. :moustache:

How would you say the name?

190678
Thanks, hope i don't disapoint.:twilightsheepish:

190693
glad to have at least captured your interest with a first person story, and no Celestia's comment was not intended to be funny but I'm glad that i was able to get that reaction. :pinkiehappy:

190731
oh that big mac, thanks I hope I'm able to keep this up:pinkiehappy:

190925
You would pronounce it Syel-ek-val. It's Norwegian. If you're still not sure throw it up on google translater and there is a button to pronounce the word.

Wow, that was very descriptive for a stroll around town. I like your writing a lot and hope you continue writing!:twilightsmile:

193612
Well my intent is for people to truly know what it is this pony is going through and how these discoveries shape his future actions.
I've always seperated a good story from a great one by the amount of detail and character development the writer bothered to write creating a connection between the character and the reader.
Considering this is my first 'story' based writing in god knows how long, you saying that you like my style is a big boost to my ego and I thank you.:yay:

Wow, I never thought I'd see another Norwegian brony, especially here!
If I may ask, do you watch mlp dubbed or English?

199583
Sorry bro not really Norwegian:fluttercry:
I'm half Norwegian from my dad's side for the family, i've just always been really proud of it and thought that using some of the language would cause people to be interested in checking out my story.

199663 That's still cool though, I'm not Norwegian myself, but I've lived here for as long as I can remember.

hey look, it's mordekaiser(pre-reading coment)

199715

thats wat i thought bro

awww, the pic you used for the story made me think it was going to be a League of Legends story with Mordekaizer.

I'm sad now

199715>>199795>>199987
Mordekaizer was the origonal insperation for me writing this story.

200041

man, never realized how op and gay jungle shaco is... i love him now.

ylmore now nOW NOW NOW NOOOOOOW!!!!!
IT,S SO GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD!!!

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