Perfection is in the eye of the beholder. Or is it beauty? Twilight Sparkle finds that she's not quite able to tell the difference anymore. Luckily, Princess Celestia is there to help her.
[available both in humanized and pony version]
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Lovely. It may be short, but I still wanted more.
good job on this
I have to agree. I'd love to see more.
Indeed. Short but lovely. Though I don't see the reason for humanization, as ponies it would have worked just as well.
Looking forward to seeing a multi-chapter story.
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I'm really glad to hear that! Hopefully I can make up for the shortness with some longer stories in the future
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The reason for the humanization is that I'm somewhat hesitant at attempting to write actual pony fiction as I'm sure I'd manage to somehow mess up the anatomy. I agree that it might have been unnecessary in this one though.
I have some ideas for a multi-chapter already, but it might be awhile before I can find the time to write them down. But thank you, and thanks for having faith in me
When I saw the tags my first thought was human in equestria. If not with a humanize picture to give the idea, then within the description you should say that the ponies are human.
On the fic itself; it was good but it also felt incomplete, like a first chapter of a longer story wanting to be unravel.
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Oh, I see! I wasn't sure about how the human tag was mean't to be used, so thanks for clearing that up
I originally intended for the fic to be longer, but then realized I wanted to take a different approach, so I turned it into a oneshot instead which might be the reason it has an incomplete feel to it.
2397010 oh don't get me wrong. The tag can also be use when the characters are human, but most often than not, the stories that have them is about humans in equestria; unless the author outright says that it's humanize let it be with a picture or in the description
That was a nice little humanized piece. Swell job.
Nicely written. However i am not a fan of humanized fics.
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A new fic or a continuation of this one?
Anyway i see potential for some good fics here. Hopefully you will try writing ponies.
Even though like many others I am not really a fan of Humanised fiction this was quite an enjoyable read.
This is actually good.
i have nothing with humanized pony and these one was good!
Hmm. Reading later for sure.
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Okay, I'll keep that in mind. I would have to go and ask permission to use some fanart first (because mine is too terrible to use!), so for now I'll just leave it as it is.
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The ideas are for a new one, as I'd want to start the story a bit differently if I was writing a multi-chapter. I'm glad to hear you
saywrite that though. I definitely hope to write some more oneshots soon!In regards to writing ponies, I tried tweaking this story a bit to "pony-fy" it; as long as there isn't too much pony anatomy involved, I think I can pull it off. I don't know if I could manage that in a multi-chaptered story though
See ? writing it in the pony version isn't that much harder.
It becomes even easier when you have a guideline like this.
I'm definitely looking forward to more stories.
Awesome that you released both a Human and Pony version. I don't think I've ever seen that done before, and it's a great idea.
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I can't even begin to thank you for showing me that! *saves instantly for later use*
When (and not if) I write another pony fic, know that it will be almost entirely thanks to you
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Really? Maybe I'll start a trend haha. But thanks, glad you liked my way of doing it
I liked it( Twilestia so i like it by default
), i just read this pony version though so dont know what difference there is between this and the human version.
Now lets get down to business, just one thing really.
Celestia pointing out Twilight and her friends as an direct example, like her and them make mistakes every day or more then the average pony is kind of an insult isnt it?
I prefer stories with a bit more meat on them, so to speak, but it's not bad for its length.
I think the story worked better in the human version, largely because it was written with them being humans in mind and that still comes across to me in the pony version, though maybe people who read the pony version first wouldn't get that impression.
This is really good for such small length. Just go and make a multi-chapter story, I'm sure it will be great.
A cute little one shot and the characters are true to canon as far as I could tell, well except for the whole romance thing going on between them of course.
When on fimfiction, I don't prefer humanized fics, but it won't stop me from reading one that catches my eye. Both versions of this were lovely, CladInPink.