After defeating Mag Agent:N, Hank, Sanford, and Deimos find an unusual building with glowing light, which was a portal. Hank decided to enter what it was entitled "EQUESTRIA" while Sanford and Deimos do something else in the Nexus facility.
NOTE: Sorry if it's been like a month and I haven't posted a new chapter.
EDIT: Sorry if it's been a REALLY long time, I'ma make another story to keep you people interested while you wait.
EDIT EDIT: I cancelled it since I fortunately managed to figure out my password and this old stuff.
Chapters (2)
I hope dis gon be good.
Edit: Dis gon be good. There's no doubt. Oh, and make sure there's a massacre somewhere. It's unnatural for madness not to have death following within it's wake.
So far, not so bad. Could use alot paragraphs. (People don't want their eyes destroyed. They also won't want to read this story anymore. Please work on that.)
And it's rushed alittle too fast. I would suggest an editor. Or at the very least, re-read your chapters.
But all in all, great story concept, and I would like to see more from this. If you follow my above steps, the story will be great.
Cheers!
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Thanks! I might consider your suggestion. I'm sorry that it was slightly bad. It's my first fiction.
i love it! don't stop! keep goingggggggg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
when is the next chapter