The silence...of Mare-Do-Well

The Mysterious Mare Do Well132 stories ·138 members

When the new Mare-Do-Well overhears a plot to con Ponyville, she must use all of her skills and the help of the CMC to stop the Flim Flam Brothers and Diamond Dogs from ruining life for the town.

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The Mysterious begining · 30th Mar 2012 · 1,048 words
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The Baffling Continuation · 26th Mar 2012 · 671 words
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The Confusing Events · 22nd Apr 2012 · 1,265 words
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Scourge012

Scourge012 #1 · Feb 7th, 2012 · · · The Mysterious begining ·

I Like Mare-Do-Wells caracter a lot! I'm also impressed because I think you captured the crusaders perfectly! Keep up the good work!

Aquillo

Aquillo #2 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · · The Baffling Continuation ·

First off (as opposed to second off) your characterisation is brilliant. The Crusaders come off as the crusaders, which might sound stupid but can be something I've seen a lot of people struggle on (sometimes, inexplicably). And then there's Bluebottle: for such a short fic, you certainly managed to characterise her obliviousness. "...moved by her heart of justice" indeed.

Secondly, the mild subtext: Sweetie Bell being good at putting out fires. Scootaloo's "another adventure" (and the intro for that matter: I get the feeling this is part of a series of one of those old radio shows.)

And then there's the comedy: it's a style I gell well with. Pastiche, mockery, irony and finally, plain madness: like having your characters declare the story's going on Hiatus. Wonderfully, mind-bogglingly mad. I raise my hat.

The only thing that irks me about it is your choice of layout: for some reason, even though you've clearly started new paragraphs, it's failed to leave a line space between them, which makes the entire chapter feel like a continuous block of text. If you can, I'd fix that: it'd make the story so much easier to read, and it needs to be read if it's going to be completed.

Shine on you crazy diamond

Scourge012

Scourge012 #3 · Mar 31st, 2012 · · · The Confusing Events ·

HA! That picture made my day.

Aquillo

Aquillo #4 · Apr 3rd, 2012 · · · The Confusing Events ·

When did this update? Why didn't I get a flame thingy? What's going on?

Either way, I've always felt sorry for the Diamond dogs, and this fic has only further enforced that. "Lots of ropes. Like three ropes."

It's clear they're living in poverty. Damn racist ponies.

Themaskedferret

Themaskedferret #5 · May 20th, 2013 · · · The Baffling Continuation ·

Pete Pot's Lots for Lots of Plots.

"Wrote this on own, but now have writers block. I go on Hiatus," explained the obviously very proud dog.

I think I love you..... Seriously, this is bloody hysterical and brilliant.

One small typo: bonified - bonafide

Themaskedferret

Themaskedferret #6 · May 20th, 2013 · · · The Confusing Events ·

Bwahahaha. Nice. Though I warn you the pic shows up before the text finishes. Maybe put the text and then leave a space and put the pic.

Also two typo-type things: dieing - dying
stalagmites are on the cave floor stalactites are on the ceiling. so unless you're honestly trying to say the diamond dog is on the ceiling and feels that peeing on the floor is harder you maaaaay wanna switch them.