Can't Be Saved

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MLP: FiM
Romance
Dark
Slice of Life
Vinyl begins to worry nopony cares about her. The nightmares she's having aren't exactly helping matters.
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Jimmy Lethal · 4.3k words · 12 2 · 941 views

Can't Be Saved

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I can't see anything. I can't smell anything. I can't feel anything. And all I hear... is beauty.

They don't understand it, though.

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Silverstein

Silverstein #1 · Apr 1st, 2013 · · ·

I'll be back with a real review!

Silver out!

Silverstein

Silverstein #2 · Apr 1st, 2013 · · ·

Short and sweet.

Silver out!

LDSocrates

LDSocrates #3 · Apr 1st, 2013 · · ·

Hm... overall, I really like the basic concept here. This could be a very powerful short story about the nature of obsession. At first I didn't really understand it, though, since I'd never heard the song before. Even then, my tastes in music are different. That's when I saw the end of the nightmare, though, and the recording that's sent her into her paralytic paradise breaking was just deliciously poignant and cruel. I think there's the seed of a really great story here, but it needs a lot more meat to it and time to develop.

ThunderChaserCreate

ThunderChaserCreate #4 · Apr 19th, 2013 · · ·

Simply amazing

Mai Oates

Mai Oates #5 · Jun 16th, 2013 · · ·

Wow. I'm even sure where to start.
First, being inspired to write this brilliant fanfiction, only by a song and a picture is simply incredible. Very well written too. I've read it 5 times already! Definitely one of the best fanfictions I've ever read.
More please!
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