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kalash93

Joined December 2012
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Stories (12)

  • Last One Standing
    From the beginning, it could only end one way. Nopony lives forever.

    8,627 words · 2,467 views · 72 likes · 4 dislikes
  • You Obey
    You are a changeling, servant of Queen Chrysalis. You always obey her orders, even when you don't want to. And at times like this, you really don't want to.
    5,555 words · 4,011 views · 75 likes · 5 dislikes
  • I Did Not Want To Die
    The final thoughts of a fallen soldier. Dedicated to all who serve, all who survived, and all the fallen.
    4,727 words · 11,260 views · 91 likes · 11 dislikes
  • Bratan
    Two old comrades drink and reminisce. For Veterans' Day 2013.
    2,721 words · 150 views · 23 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Racer And The Geek
    49,546 words · 3,640 views · 76 likes · 11 dislikes
  • Barren
    4,862 words · 136 views · 19 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Songs Uncle Sings
    1,630 words · 652 views · 18 likes · 1 dislikes
  • Shell Shock
    2,680 words · 2,993 views · 47 likes · 8 dislikes
  • Reflections
    4,784 words · 1,311 views · 21 likes · 2 dislikes
  • Caravan
    3,663 words · 133 views · 14 likes · 2 dislikes

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Comments ( 76 )

#2 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Great story!

I will say that I discovered a one error, there were probably more that I didn't see, but "him memory" somewhere a ways down isn't correct.

Also, why would an earth pony be a volunteer from Cloudsdale?

Anyways, great fic, lots of "d'aww" as it were and great clop too.

#3 · 54w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Good story.:pinkiehappy:

#4 · 54w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

That was beautiful.

#5 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

I'm normally not into Anthro type stuff, but this was....hehe, A pleasant surprise.

#6 · 54w, 6d ago · · 2 ·

Really? You're a late teens male and yo never watched any porn? Nowadays that's all late teen oys watch....

#7 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2341479

I don't know where that came from. Care to explain? I I said that Midnight had never seen a naked mare in person, but he had seen them in pictures, films, etc... Of course he's seen porn.

#8 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2341107

Thanks for reading, Timstro.

>>2340581

I do try, Prince Lunar. I'm glad that you think that about my writing. :raritywink:

>>2340402

Thank you, Shadow Bolt.

>>2340135

The intent was to make it more sweet than sexy, PoniesAreMyBrain. It's actually somewhat based off of my own experiences with girls. It seems to have worked, judging by your praise. I need to proofread more.

>>2340079

Pretty much, Sayer.

#9 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

I'm rather surprised that my random rape fic spawned TWO spinoffs.

Guess everypony felt sorry for poor Midnight. :applecry:

BTW, I took the liberty of adding this to the appropriate group.

#10 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2341957

Did you like my story?

#11 · 54w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Beautiful story. Not like most clopfics I've read, where there's just sex because it can be there and it has no background. Good job, 5/5 moustaches for you! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#12 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Uhm, I thought his name was Midnight?

“Unbelievable,” breathed he, as his orgasm finally started to subside. His and her movements became less shaky and more lethargic, even as Midnight continued to empty his balls into Fluttershy. Eventually, they were just grinding against each other. Sunny felt his erection soften, but his dick kept twitching and semen continued to be expelled from the tip. He felt the fluids leaking out around him as he finally went soft and withdrew entirely from his mare.

Am I mistaken?

Otherwise, awesome story...

#13 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2342529

My fail. *facepalm* This is why I shouldn't juggle multiple characters at 3 AM!

#14 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Awesome story!

Just a couple of typos.

Carnal

He named his schlong Sunny?

#15 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

That was just amazing

#16 · 54w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

absolutly beautiful:yay:

#17 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2342730

That was my fail. Sorry! I've fixed it.

#18 · 54w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

there is some grammar and spelling errors. other than that, good job.

#19 · 54w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

This was great! My only problem is the swearing during sex (e.x. Fuck, cunt, etc...) I know the characters themselves never said it but its just a personal thing of mine. I guess thats why I really like Jaydex's stories a lot. Anyway you did a really great job with this and portrayed a persons (errr pony's) first time really well!

#20 · 54w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Holy crap, over 900 views and dozens of favorites! I never expected this! Thank you all so much!

But 36 up vs 11 down? What did I do to deserve that? I took a look around at similar stories. The ratio is actually not too shabby compared to a lot of clop, especially canon character with original character. Second person stories seem to be an exception. Seriously though, WTF, haters?

>>2344998

Thanks for the feedback, HSHater. I've gone back and changed some of that.

>>2344752

Thank you, RioulThePonyOfAura13.

>>2342948

I intended to make a romance fic that was sexy, sweet, and realistic. I'm glad I succeeded. That was the point, ponyninja.

>>2342735

I do what I can, Beta Master.

>>2342730

Thanks for catching those. I'm glad that you enjoyed it, TheTownCrier.

>>2342529

My bad- that's what happens when you work on 4 fics at once. Thanks a ton, Snowfall1775

>>2342046

I do try my best. I'm thrilled with how this turned out. It's great that you like it, BookWyrm01

#21 · 54w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Hehe, I forgot bout that part of the story, sort of. But, anyways, I found it hard to imagine Fluttershy (or any pony) with big breasts, couls someone make a deviantart picture or something:twilightsheepish:

#23 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Not bad. I have to admit, I was not expecting Fluttershy to be so alpha. Also, I couldn't help but laugh at all the awkwardness.

#24 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Very very good I enjoyed most of it all. Although you have a few spelling and grammar errors but other than that it was really injoyable.

#25 · 54w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

One question; can it still be considered 'clop' if they don't have hooves? Just something to think about.

#26 · 54w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>2348204 you are very welcome. glad to help:twilightsmile:

#27 · 54w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>2348204 and please, call me Rio

#28 · 54w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

One of the best I've ever read :yay:

#29 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2362192

I'm flattered! Really, I am, KINGALICORN. That's a pretty big honor.

>>2356408

Rio, does this mean that I can melodramatically drag you from upload begging you to tell me what you think of it?

#30 · 54w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

>>2364335 Do you think maybe you could make a part 2 please?I've read 1000's of these stories and yours is on top of my list :pinkiesmile:

#31 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2364424

"On top of my list"

I CAME! Way too much.

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I'll definitely look into it. I'm just blown away.:yay::scootangel::rainbowkiss::heart::pinkiehappy::moustache::twilightsmile::raritywink:

#32 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2364481 For now on, I'll be your biggest fan :twilightsmile: If you ever have any trouble on what to write and/or how to write it, Tell me :pinkiesmile:

#33 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2364569

Thanks a lot!

Any followup pieces will probably go for a romantic resolution. I don't plan on writing another epic sex scene, but I never know what I'll want to do. A bit of clop is probably going to show up, but not anything like this much quantity or explicitness.

#34 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2364648 Anything you write will be wonderful :yay:

#35 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2364664

Do be warned this this is my only wholly happy, sweet, romantic story. The rest are all varying degrees of dysphoric. Since you're reading, I'll give you a rundown of all my other current stories. Have at you!

Reflections is unambiguously my most philosophical and spiritual piece. It's also my second happiest.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/85411/reflections

Welcome To The Brothel is my most moody, experimental piece. It's my first sexual story, but it's not for clopping.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/88520/welcome-to-the-brothel

Shell shock is my darkest and brutal piece. I'm shocked that it got by with a Teen rating.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/90939/shell-shock

Last One Standing is my first piece. I think its my best. It's undoubtedly the saddest and emotional emotional one.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/72998/last-one-standing

Racer And The Geek is my ongoing piece. It's ostensibly a romance piece, but it goes so much deeper than that.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/81159/racer-and-the-geek

#36 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2364786 I'm know your stories :twistnerd:

#37 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2364799

So you've read them all? :derpyderp2:

#38 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2364804 I wouldn't be someone's biggest fan from reading one story :ajbemused:

#40 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2364335 um... what?:twilightoops:

#41 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2364929 It's the least I could do for such an amazing person :pinkiehappy:

#42 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2365265

I'm asking if you'd be willing to give me feedback whenever I have a new release or update.

#43 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2365962 oh!:twilightblush: heh heh, oops...

sure!!! I'll even tell you if there is any grammar or misspellings. (sorry... inner grammar Nazi HAIL GRAMMAR! sorry...)

I am also a editor... probably one of the youngest, actually good editors on this site. No offense to any of you older editors. also, my b-day is in 11 soon to be 10 days

#44 · 53w, 1d ago · · ·

>>2366177 When's your birthday?

#45 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2405731 tomorow:twilightsmile:

I'M SOOOOOOO EXCITED!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#46 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2416635

Fantastische! You get a Saturday brithday! How old will you be?

#47 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·
#48 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·

>> kalash93

But, this story wasn't under the humanized category :derpyderp1: im confused :raritycry:

#49 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2417321

You must be from the clopfics group. I didn't add it to the group. I took out the human tag because the characters aren't humans. Also, it attracted haters.

#50 · 52w, 16h ago · · ·

*sips coffee*

Yeah, not bad at all. Certainly not a clopfic, but I know you didn't write it with that intention anyway, so no worries. :ajsmug:

As a slow pace romantic scene between two (rather awkward) lovers, though, it still comes across as having too much unnecessary detail. I am a fan of romantic fluff, however, and I like that the characters are written in such a way as to compliment the other. Props for that. :twilightsmile:

Other than that, I don't really know how to rate this one. I liked it, but I feel like giving it a dislike. Ah well. I'll just say my piece in the comments to leave the impression of my thoughts as they are. :moustache:

*tips hat* Mmyes. Good day, sir.

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